Hi! I'm peer reviewing for our class, Languages in Peril. I have added a few possible sections based on your lead. I would recommend first changing the wording of your lead so that there is no more first person. This is a live page, after all! You can always add to your lead as you write your new paragraphs, so don't worry if it looks a little scant. --Jacquie

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