User talk:ZachMcDowell/sandbox
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editYour article covers ideas a, b, and c, but not idea d. This might be a good place to further your research. --Debaser42 (talk) 20:04, 22 April 2015 (UTC)
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editThis is a suggestion. Debaser42 (talk) 16:54, 19 November 2015 (UTC)
Peer Review for COMM 206
editYour article was really fantastic in X Y and Z ways. I have a few suggestions: 1) This stuff,
- This stuff
- That stuff
- This thing here
- I suggest that you take a look at this article, as it might work well for your section on this other thing.
- This other page seems to have some information that you might look at as well. ZachMcDowell (talk) 15:18, 2 November 2017 (UTC)
I agree with the above, and would like to also add that this and this and this other thing should also be done. Also check out this stuff its super awesome thank you and have a great day. ZachMcDowell (talk) 15:19, 2 November 2017 (UTC)
- This is indented reply ZachMcDowell (talk) 15:20, 2 November 2017 (UTC)
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editCOMM206 Peer Review
editThis is a peer review and these are the things that I think you should improve ZachMcDowell (talk) 17:43, 22 March 2018 (UTC)
This is your review and then you sign it. ZachMcDowell (talk) 17:44, 22 March 2018 (UTC)
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This is a good start to the article. I found a couple of issues that you might think about addressing.
- The lead was a little confusing and could be improved by summarizing in X or Y ways
- I found the wording in the X section to be slightly less neutral than it should be, try saying "this" rather than "that" for that paragraph
Fake Peer Review
editThis is a good first draft. You have a clear lead and your sources were good. I have made a few edits and have a few suggested changes:
- I made a few edits for spelling and grammar as well as fitting to the Wikipedia MOS.
- Your lead was pretty good, but could use more information as it seems to have been written before you added additional information.
- I found a source you might have missed on an event that your organization did.
- This thing
- The other thing
- This other thing also
Peer Review by YOURUSERNAME
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- this other thing
- things
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Peer Review by ZachMcDowell
edit- This is great stuff heres an example
- This is other stuff that might need help
- This stuff was cool
- this is other things
- this is a thing i changed.