I think the way you have arranged your article was great. You have given details in every points that you have made. But I think You could tell us more about the manuscript itself in your introduction. Also, you could add more sources and some pictures to support your topic. Overall, I think you have done a great job. It's a great start.
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Prof. Neumeier comments
editHi Zoe, some specific comments:
--I can see that you have added a sentence here and there to different sections, but you need to add even more of information and your own writing for this to be considered a meaningful contribution to this article. I advise you to continue to expand in the general paragraphs at the beginning of the Hijazi and Kufic manuscripts sections (An alternative would be to fill in the section on the Blue Qur'an with additional information, because we have seen it in class and you are most familiar with that particular object). And you need to cite the new information you are adding with footnotes, so people can see where you are finding this information. In addition to this, you need a few more references (remember that in the assignment guidelines you are expected to add 4-5 new secondary sources). The essay on the Met Museum website that you do cite at the bottom has a Further Reading section with additional bibliography. I mentioned to you the books by Sheila Blair (Islamic Calligraphy) and Alain George (The Rise of Islamic Calligraphy), both would be excellent. Be in touch with Mama Sanogo in our class, because he may have checked them out from the library already and you may need to share the books.
--I definitely agree with your peer reviewer that you should add at least 1-2 images from Wikipedia Commons to this article.
--"The most punctual Qurans were written in the Hijazi content, a content that originates before Kufic style script." (What do you mean by "punctual"? I think you mean another word? And I would say Hijazi script or style, not content.)
--"Kufic calligraphy, which was named after the city of Kufa from where it originated" (Sheila Blair in her book Islamic Calligraphy discusses how we do not actually know where Kufic originated, and the label "Kufic" seems to have been invented by art historians in the 19th or 20th century. So I would not say that it "originated" from Kufa, probably just delete that part of the sentence)
And edits to your text:
--"The production of the Quran was first prompted by preachings of the prophet Muhammad, after he received revelations from God." TO "The production of the Quran was first prompted by preachings of the prophet Muhammad, who Muslims believe received revelations from God."
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