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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Gog the Mild via FACBot (talk) 21 March 2023 [1].

1986 Tour de France

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Nominator(s): Zwerg Nase (talk) 11:57, 22 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about the 1986 edition of the Tour de France, the most prestigious cycling race in the world. It featured a fierce battle between teammates Bernard Hinault and Greg LeMond, who would become the first American winner of the race. After my nomination of 1998 Tour de France failed to pick up any responses, I am hoping for more engagement here. Zwerg Nase (talk) 11:57, 22 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Procedural note -- although the nominator had another FAC archived just now, it had no comments so the coords are waiving the usual two-week break between such noms... Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 13:23, 22 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Ian Rose: Thank you! Zwerg Nase (talk) 16:29, 22 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

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  • "Greg LeMond of La Vie Claire won the race" - maybe "Greg LeMond of the La Vie Claire team won the race" so it doesn't read like La Vie Claire is the town he comes from?
  • "It was the first ever victory for a rider outside of Europe." - eh? He won in Europe. Or do you mean "It was the first ever victory for a rider born outside of Europe."....?
  • "Several attacks during the race" - they attacked each other?
  • "Stage 12 saw Hinault attack with Pedro Delgado" - more attacking? Really not sure what this means
  • "Hinault [...] was caught and dropped" - what was he dropped off? There's some really confusing wording being used here
  • "One of cycling's Grand Tours, the Tour consisted of 23 stages, beginning with a prologue in Boulogne-Billancourt and concluded on the Champs-Élysées in Paris" => "One of cycling's Grand Tours, the Tour consisted of 23 stages, beginning with a prologue in Boulogne-Billancourt and concluding on the Champs-Élysées in Paris"
  • That's what I got on the lead. Back for more later! :-) -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 17:09, 22 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

More comments

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  • "In the Spring" - MOS:SEASONS recommends not using seasons
  • "having Hinault, who he expected to take an early lead" => "having Hinault, whom he expected to take an early lead"
  • "The race route for the 1986 edition of the Tour de France was unveiled on 8 October 1985 by both Jacques Goddet and Félix Lévitan." - add a few words to explain who these guys are/were
  • Prologue seems to be linked in an image caption but not in the prose
  • "which he reached in time but the yellow jersey was lost" - first mention of the jersey, could do with a link and a brief explanation of what it is
  • "from his teammate Marie, who he now led by six seconds" => "from his teammate Marie, whom he now led by six seconds"
  • "Mathieu Hermans, (Seat–Orbea) and" - comma's in the wrong place
  • "Pedro Delgado (pictured in 2016) won stage 12, but later dropped out after his mother passed away." => "Pedro Delgado (pictured in 2016) won stage 12, but later dropped out after his mother died."
  • "Sensing that the French public, clearly favouring Hinault, made LeMond nervous, the former led all the way up the climb" - this doesn't make sense grammatically. I think what you mean is "Sensing that the French public clearly favoured Hinault made LeMond nervous; the former led all the way up the climb"
  • Think that's all I got :-) -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 19:42, 24 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Coordinator note

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This has been open for more than three weeks and has yet to pick up a support. Unless it attracts considerable movement towards a consensus to promote over the next three or four days I am afraid that it is liable to be archived. Gog the Mild (talk) 13:12, 15 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I am afraid that this has timed out. The usual two-week hiatus will apply. Gog the Mild (talk) 16:17, 21 March 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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