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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article review. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted 19:42, 20 January 2007.

AC/DC

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This is a self nomination. This article has been nominated once about a month ago and I think all the issues has been addressed. No-Bullet (Talk • Contribs) 16:50, 30 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comment if you clean up and complete your references, I'll read the article. If your links go dead, readers need to be able to find the information, and all websources need last access date. Books need page numbers, and news/magazine articles need enough information so that readers can find the article. Some random examples:
    • (This article contains an author and a publication date which aren't listed in the footnote - if I want to find the article in a library, or if the link goes dead, I need that information.) "Rock and Roll Hall of Fame 2003: AC/DC". Rolling Stone. Retrieved 2006-10-30.
    • (I have no idea what this is) Bonfire Box Set, released 1997
    • (This has a publication date, which is not listed. We need to know as of when?) Top Artists. RIAA. Retrieved on 2006-12-30.
    • (Include publication date, which is given - Wikipedia articles are dynamic, and we need to know as of when.) AC/DC Biography. TheRockRadio.com. Retrieved on 2006-12-30.
    • Book sources need page numbers.
    • (This isn't correctly cited - author isn't listed either) The Age, September 10, 2004. See the article online here. Retrieved on 30 November 2006.
    • Most of these aren't correct references - readers need to have enough information to find the article, which usually includes an author, publication date, and article title.
      • The Age, February 15 2005
      • ABC Madrid, March 23, 2000
      • Guitarist Magazine, April 2006
      • Italian Rock Hard magazine, January 2004
  • Those are just samples - pls check all your references. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 17:17, 30 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Done. All the references are now properly cited. No-Bullet (Talk • Contribs) 21:13, 30 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Refs look better now - would prefer, though, that the last two refs use the formal webpage name, rather than saying just "here". SandyGeorgia (Talk) 05:32, 31 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Great, I also corrected those two. No-Bullet (Talk • Contribs) 07:23, 31 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Comment - The article needs a copy-edit, get a few fans of the band to take a look, i will point out some things,

  • External link in the middle of the text, AC/DC lights a Bonfire in tribute.
Fixed, today I was correcting the references and I forgot to add the ref tags to that one.
  • Too many one/two sentence paragraphs, example, Scott's family buried him in Fremantle, Western Australia, the area to which they emigrated when he was a child.[21]
Fixed, they are now expanded or included with other paragrahps.
  • U.S. Album Sales, you will need to reference all these
Referenced.
  • Regained popularity (1988–present), then it has a section on Recent events, recent events are present, and should be merged
Fixed, changed the name of both subsections.
  • I'm sure with the image that promotional photos aren't allowed as there are licensed alternatives under PD, CC licenses, I'm not sure about images, perhaps ask User:Jkelly, if he isn't busy
Done, added fair use rationales.
  • , 1980 (see 1980 in music) link 1980 to 1980 in music
Done.
This is actually wrong, take a look: Wikipedia:WikiProject Music/MUSTARD/Internal linking. I'm reverting this. No-Bullet (Talk • Contribs) 00:16, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
That's a bad guideline - I hate distracting parenthetical inserts in text, and don't think it's encyclopedic at all. See also's have a place in Wiki articles - not in the midst of the text, where they interrupt the flow. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 05:04, 4 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I fixed that when I began copy editing the article. Random Passer-by 01:17, 5 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • In November 1973, Malcolm and Angus Young started AC/DC. Malcolm played rhythm guitar and Angus played lead guitar, no flow at all
Corrected.
  • They worked all over the UK and Europe, worked? do you mean toured?
"They worked all over the UK and Europe to establish themselves, touring almost constantly..."
  • I'm sure when it comes to the charts instead of #3 you write number 3 or number three
I took a look on some other FAs and they use #1.
  • References 45 and 46 say official site, yet they are different links. Bands only have one official site, and multiple fan sites, unless I'm mistaken.
These are the websites of the tribute bands.
Instead of 'Official website' for both, mention the name She/DC official website as it kind of looks like it's a AC/DC official website and the same reference used twice.
Done, I think it's better now.
  • There is another street, in Leganés, Spain, which was named after the band in 2 March 2000, read it and you will see the error
I can't see the error. No-Bullet (Talk • Contribs) 01:01, 31 December 2006 (UTC)☻[reply]
I still can't see what's wrong, but I've rewritten the sentence: "There is another street, on Leganés, Spain, which was named "Calle de AC/DC" on 2 March 2000." Hope it's better now. No-Bullet (Talk • Contribs) 07:23, 31 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Should be March 2, 2000 M3tal H3ad 08:48, 31 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed. No-Bullet (Talk • Contribs) 00:16, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • acceptance speech and Brian Johnson, needs a reference for that speech
Referenced. No-Bullet (Talk • Contribs) 01:23, 31 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

M3tal H3ad 00:07, 31 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

  • Support. It's obvious that this article has had a lot of work. Try as I might, I cannot find fault with it. It is as good or better than any paper encyclopedia. — Ultor_Solis • T 22:37, 31 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Oppose. Appreciate the effort, but the article is not ready yet. Don't be too hasty, eh? First off, the writing is a bit choppy in places, with paragraphs of two-three sentences. But the main problem that I have is that the article is scattered with sound samples (which lack fair-use rationales) that add absolutely nothing to it. I recommeded a few samples on the last FAc, but not only is it now a bit overdone, the samples seem to exist only for decoration. Like pictures, (afterall, the songs are copyrighted!) samples are supposed to add to the article significanly, and you need to show how they represent the nature of the topic: what significant sound are you trying to highlight? What's is the importance of the lyrics of the songs? Once again, I ask that the editors look to Mariah Carey, Celine Dion — or perhaps any other articles with samples— to see how to properly work samples into the article; if done improperly (as they now are) copyright infringement can occur! See also, Wikipedia:Music samples. Orane (talk • cont.) 02:44, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Hi, I guess that was a mistake to take a look on the Pink Floyd article before adding the samples :P. What should I do with them? Should I use the multilisten templates? because I think the samples I've uploaded do represent the band's sound. I had no idea the ogg files also needed fair use rationales (the samples in the PF article don't have them), I'll add them tomorrow.
This is the second comment on the writting, so I'm going to ask for help on the League of copyeditors. No-Bullet (Talk • Contribs) 06:39, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
It probably was a mistake looking at the Pink Floyd article. I'm not sure how it passed with the samples like that, but then again, that was a year ago, and things change on Wikipedia. Its better to use the box so you can justify their existence in the article. It's far more useful and comprehensive than just putting random samples in there. Just read Wikipedia:Music samples. Orane (talk • cont.) 09:37, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I replaced the samples with boxes, are they better now? I'll add fair use rationales in the next few hours. No-Bullet (Talk • Contribs) 20:21, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Added fair use rationales. No-Bullet (Talk • Contribs) 21:31, 2 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Comment→ I have struck out my oppose. However, I'll still admit that this article could use a little help. The samples still seem to be there only as decoration (their inclusion in the article is not justified). You don't need samples to say that "this song reached #3 on the charts." So what? What about the song is so special? Do I need to hear it to be convinced that it reached the top 5 of the charts? IMO, samples should be used when referring to the bands sound/music. An adequate caption to a sample would be "the song 'I love you' depicts the stong rock influence in the band's sound," or " the lyrics to this song addressed poverty...." or something like that. As the article stands now, I won't oppose it. But I'll choose to abstain, because its not good enough to make me want to support. Orane (talk • cont.) 08:37, 3 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I think they're better now. No-Bullet (Talk • Contribs) 03:53, 4 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Oh yes, definitely. I really appreciate and commend you on your effort at addressing my annoying issues lol. Good job, you should be proud.Orane (talk • cont.) 05:08, 4 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Object, I just had a second look (since it's been ce'd), expecting to support, and found ce problems; redundant and uncompelling prose. I made some changes in one section, and looked at a few others, which had boring, uncompelling prose consisting of strings of quotes from the media. Not there yet. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 15:46, 5 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
    • Besides the redundancies such as those I just edited, here's a sample snake:
      • After Bon Scott's death the band members briefly considered quitting but then decided he would have wanted AC/DC to continue so they lined up various candidates to replace him. Among them were ex-Back Street Crawler vocalist Terry Slesser who preferred not to join an established band and went on to a solo career which included co-writing the song "Rainbow's Gold", covered by Iron Maiden in 1984; ex-Moxy frontman Buzz Shearman who couldn't take the opportunity due to vocal problems; and ex-Geordie singer Brian Johnson.
    • followed by prose typical of what is throughout the article - a reliance on quotes to tell the story:
      • Angus Young said about Johnson, "I remember Bon playing me "Little Richard" and then telling me the story of when he saw Brian singing. And he says about that night, 'there's this guy up there screaming at the top of his lungs and then the next thing you know he hits the deck. He's on the floor, rolling around and screaming. I thought it was great, and then to top it off —you couldn't get a better encore— they came in and wheeled the guy off!'" Later that night, Johnson had been diagnosed with appendicitis which was the cause of his writhing around on stage.
  • ("had been" as far as I know because the incident described happened at a different time to the events described around the quote.)
  • I posted a request for a second copy editor at the League of Copy editors two days ago but there hasn't been a response yet. I can only hope the article I left was better than the one I found. If, in your opinion, it was worse then I can only apologise and suggest a revert to remove my work (I would have no obejection to that at all). :-) Random Passer-by 17:32, 5 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Since English is my second language, I've troubles copyediting, so the only thing I can do now is wait until someone from the LoCE comes to help :( No-Bullet (Talk • Contribs) 19:18, 5 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Everything else on this article looks sound: I'm prepared to support once another copyedit is done. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 19:50, 9 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

  • Support now, concerns resolved, nice job. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 15:58, 19 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support, pending A fine article, but would need some further polish to bring it to FA standard. The most obvious area that needs work is the copy as highlighted above, though with a few hours work this can be resolved. The article also has some structural issues towards the end - the "ACDC Lane" section is too slight to stand on its own; the "Name" para should be moved to the top, just before "History"; "Recent events" is listy and should be converted to narrative. + Ceoil 20:30, 5 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I moved the "Name" section and added the "ACDC lane" subsection to the rest of the "Recent events". I also cleaned up a little the last part of the article, so now it looks less listy. No-Bullet (Talk • Contribs) 22:07, 5 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Nice work. As an openion (and it won't effect my vote), the sound box captions could be shorter (they currently seem streached, to my eyes at least). This is a suggestion only. + Ceoil 22:36, 5 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
The article continues to improve. However, much of the text is given to detailing line-up changes, recordings, releases, and chart positions. I'd suggest cutting detial on some of the minor singles, at least. There's a good story here, and it is detailed, but IMO it's lost amid record producers names and chart positions. Also, the bands influence on the NWOBHM could be mentioned, as it was significant. + Ceoil 21:29, 12 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
What do you mean with "minor singles"? Also, where can I mention the influence? Thanks. No-Bullet (Talk • Contribs) 01:23, 15 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
"Hail Caesar", "Cover You in Oil" to take two examples. Too much disog and tour date info IMO, at the expense of context, insight or even anecdote. Is thetabworld.com a reliable source? It seems unlikely that "The band's hard rock sound and Bon Scott's image were significant influences on Sex Pistols's frontman Johnny Rotten." For a start, Rotten didn't influence the sound of the Pistols, only the lyrics; also they seem far removed from his stated influences from that time. NWOBHM could be mentioned in the lead, in one of the late 1970s sections, or in a legacy section. + Ceoil 21:38, 18 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
The tab world page was very informative a few months ago, but now it has the same info that's on article, I'll delete those statements. I'm working on the other issues. No-Bullet (Talk • Contribs) 03:29, 19 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I added a few minor singles for the final albums and for Flick of the switch. No-Bullet (Talk • Contribs) 18:14, 20 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

CONDITIONAL OBJECT. Almost inclined to support this, BUT...way too many sound samples, and still not certain on Fair Use of those. —ExplorerCDT 09:46, 11 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Take a look at Wikipedia:Music samples: "There's no limit of how many samples you could use in one article, but you have to put in mind that music samples serve as tools for a better understanding of the article, so insert only relevant samples." I posted this a few days ago and I forgot to sign, sorry. No-Bullet (Talk • Contribs) 23:15, 15 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • The style of the article is different than what I'm used to, making it a little difficult for me to finish copyediting efficiently. I'll try to finish, but it's still going to need a couple minor tweaks. — Deckiller
Thanks. No-Bullet (Talk • Contribs) 23:15, 15 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I think it's more or less done; the entire league worked on it, so we should be all set. — Deckiller 05:38, 18 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
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