Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Dobroslav Jevđević/archive1
- The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.
The article was promoted by User:Ian Rose 00:37, 17 February 2013 [1].
- Nominator(s): User:PRODUCER and User:Peacemaker67 Peacemaker67 (send... over) 06:27, 30 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
We are nominating this for featured article because it has undergone significant refinement in the last few months, including a GAN review and MILHIST ACR, and we believe it now meets the FA criteria. Regards, Peacemaker67 (send... over) 06:27, 30 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Sources and images but no spotchecks
- Captions that aren't complete sentences shouldn't end in periods
- Does this apply to both the map and the pic? I modified one, but they seem like sentences to me... Peacemaker67 (send... over) 04:53, 31 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- I believe GermanJoe has fixed this. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 22:47, 12 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Not sure you can justify a non-free image of the subject where he appears in a free image later in the article. That being said, would File:Jevđević_with_Italians.jpg still be free if initial publication were in Croatia? Since publication location is uncertain, should account for both possibilities
- We were working on the basis that the closer, almost face-on image in the infobox is justified in that the other image (being a profile shot from further away) doesn't really show his appearance properly for the purpose of identification. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 04:53, 31 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- FN6: page formatting
- No citations to Goldstein 29 October 2012.
- removed. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 04:53, 31 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Nikkimaria (talk) 16:20, 30 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Support on prose per standard disclaimer. I've looked at the changes made since I reviewed this for A-class, and I'm making some minor tweaks now. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 04:03, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks for the review Dank! Peacemaker67 (send... over) 12:13, 2 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Comment Images - both images are most likely PD (either PD-croatia or PD-because as a work in a non-signatory state of the Berne Convention), but the situation with a now defunct state is often vague and confusing. I can file a request for advice on Commons to be sure, if you want. GermanJoe (talk) 14:52, 4 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- That would be a great help. Thanks, Peacemaker67 (send... over) 15:11, 4 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Added that question to WP:Media copyright questions (PD-status of ...?) for Wiki-files. If you have any additional info, please provide it there. GermanJoe (talk) 18:34, 4 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Image check - OK (see comments), two requests for feedback on Wiki and Commons didn't gain any additional advice.
- Based on available information both files should be ok (added PD-croatia as suggested for the second possible country of publication).
- WP:NFCC allows fair-use, when no other image for the "same encyclopedic purpose" is available. The second image is of very low quality and the subject is barely recognizable, so both images are used for different purposes within the article.
- Unlikely, but if any other images can be found later, the actual photos should be exchanged. GermanJoe (talk) 09:32, 18 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
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"Case White in the winter of 1942/43." According to the Manual of Style, the slash should be an en dash instead.- I'd prefer "winter of 1943", if that's okay. MOSNUM says: "2005–06 (unspaced) generally denotes a two-year range; 2005/06 may be used to signify a period of 12 or fewer months, such as a corporate or governmental fiscal year, if that is the convention used in reliable sources; sports seasons spanning two calendar years should be uniformly written as 2005–06 season." - Dank (push to talk) 02:35, 23 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- I've gone with Dank's version.
- I'd prefer "winter of 1943", if that's okay. MOSNUM says: "2005–06 (unspaced) generally denotes a two-year range; 2005/06 may be used to signify a period of 12 or fewer months, such as a corporate or governmental fiscal year, if that is the convention used in reliable sources; sports seasons spanning two calendar years should be uniformly written as 2005–06 season." - Dank (push to talk) 02:35, 23 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Operation Alta: "and urged him to undertake this operation as soon as possible in order to clear the Partisans...". The "in order" is a bit of wordiness that can safely be removed without affecting the meaning."participated in the Italian-led Operation Alta. Operation Alta...". Try to avoid repetition from the end of one sentence to the start of another, like in this example."with Germans and NDH troops driving from the north and Italian and Chetnik forces pushing from the Neretva River." This is a type of "with + -ing" structure that is typically awkward. To fix it, you could try a semi-colon before this, followed by "Germans and NDH troops drove from the north and Italian and Chetnik forces pushed from the Neretva River.""while others were sent later to northern Dalmatia to aid Momcilo Dujic's forces." Flip "sent" and "later" in order for the best possible sentence flow.Case White: "and also recognition of almost all of eastern Herzegovina as a 'Chetnik zone'." No need to even have "also" here.How were the people who went to Mostar to kill him stoppped? An assassination attempt seems to be an important enough event to justify an extra sentence or two of explanation.Withdrawal: "after which he was captured and killed." Who is "he"? Durisic?Giants2008 (Talk) 02:27, 23 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]- All addressed, except that there is no more information available on the attempted assassination. Thanks for the review! Peacemaker67 (send... over) 07:47, 23 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Support – Hard for me to know much about whether this is comprehensive, but it seems so at first glance to this reviewer who knows nothing on the topic; I wish there was more on the assassination, but can't penalize the article when the sources don't provide anything. I'm satisfied with the writing after the tweaks, and am not concerned about whether or not a translation is provided for the Serbo-Croatian sources. Giants2008 (Talk) 01:14, 27 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- All addressed, except that there is no more information available on the attempted assassination. Thanks for the review! Peacemaker67 (send... over) 07:47, 23 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Support. - The article is well-written, well-researched and comprehensive. I am particularly impressed by the high-quality sourcing. I did notice a few isbn-10s where we should use isbn-13 if available. Some minor prose issues remain, but nothing significant enough to hold-up promotion to FA. Nice work! GabeMc (talk|contribs) 01:28, 10 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks, and thanks for the review! Have fixed the isbns. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 04:29, 13 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Closing note: This candidate has been promoted, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. Ian Rose (talk) 00:17, 17 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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