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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by SandyGeorgia 18:41, 21 March 2009 [1].

Guitar Hero: Aerosmith

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Nominator(s): N.G.G.

I am nominating this for featured article because...it is in excellent shape and meets the criteria in every way. This article has been being shaped for a long time and just about passed the GAN with flying colors. I was going to nominate it for A first but figured might as well shoot for the top. There are many editors who were constantly working with the article and will easily be able to adress any problem that comes up in this review. And so, I give you Guitar Hero: Aerosmith. N.G.G. 21:23, 11 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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Comment Two of the link that are marked as dead is not dead. The last two link are marked as such but are not. Check them before opposing.N.G.G. 02:37, 12 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I'm not opposing anything, and keep your cool dawg. There is one dead external link, the other two yes I know they are fine, which is why I said dead external link not external links.--₮RUCӨ 03:01, 12 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Sorry if I came off as heated, I was just trying to keep people up to date. Thanks for your help. :) N.G.G. 03:15, 12 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Its ok. Links are up to speed now.--₮RUCӨ 20:12, 12 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Oppose Not ready. Prose needs significant overhaul. Examples only:
    • It's tiring to see four of the first five sentences begin with "The game is/was"
    • "Aerosmith has re-recorded..." Is the game not yet released? Why are we using the present perfect here?
    • "by playing significant songs " Interesting personification here.
    • "The player starts as Joe Perry" Commence the roller coaster ride of tenses: present -> future -> present -> past -> present perfect.
    • No wikilinks whatsoever in Gameplay?
    • "Billboard announced that the band Aerosmith was" No context. Please at least provide when. Why are they "announcing"? Aren't they a trade publication that would report such news?
    • "It is currently unclear whether this announcement was in reference to Guitar Hero: World Tour, or the announced spin-off of Guitar Hero III: Legends of Rock, Guitar Hero: Aerosmith." WP:OR?
    • "On February 15, 2008, Activision announced that one of the two new Guitar Hero installments will be Guitar Hero: Aerosmith, to be released in June 2008.[5][9] Guitar Hero: Aerosmith will be developed by Neversoft for the Xbox 360 and PlayStation 3 versions, and the Wii version of the game will be developed by Vicarious Visions and the PlayStation 2 version will be developed by Budcat Creations." Future tense because?
    • "The developers attempted to recreate as many of historical venues within the game." Hmm.
    • "the developers used old photographs and YouTube videos of the club during the 1970s, to a highly accurate degree, as claimed by those that had attended the club during that period" Eh? Wordy, awkward, and confusing.
    • "Within these venues, set decorations are inspired from Aerosmith album covers. Five that were confirmed are" More tense issues. Use of passive makes for weak prose here. BuddingJournalist 04:56, 12 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Otherwise, sources look okay, links checked out with the link checker tool. Ealdgyth - Talk 15:05, 12 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Destructoid is the equivalent of IGN and is one of the mots visited video game sites but just about only a little less known. Other links I will check and see what makes them reliable.N.G.G. 20:21, 12 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
As for the second link, it is a trusted Kansas based website. More research is being done.N.G.G. 22:19, 12 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
(Pre-empting Ealdgyth's inevitable reply) To determine the reliability of the sites, we need to know what sort of fact checking they do. You can establish this by showing news articles that say the site is reliable/noteworthy/etc. or you can show a page on the site that gives their rules for submissions/etc. or you can show they are backed by a media company/university/institute, or you can show that the website gives its sources and methods, or there are some other ways that would work too. It's their reputation for reliability that needs to be demonstrated. Please see Wikipedia:Wikipedia Signpost/2008-06-26/Dispatches for further detailed information. BuddingJournalist 03:26, 13 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Someone stole my boilerplate! (laughs). BJ got it right on the nose. Ealdgyth - Talk 03:29, 13 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Actually to correct NGG, Max's Kansas City is one of the nightclubs that Aerosmith became popular in, and one of the venues created in the game; in this specific case, the club itself commenting on the recreation of the venue in the game would be an appropriate source here. The other two sources should be replaceable. --MASEM (t) 03:44, 13 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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