Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/International Red Cross and Red Crescent Movement/archive1

This was a WP:COTW back in October 2004, and I been tinkering with it ever since. It was substantially re-written by UW and Tfine80 in September 2005 based on the much better (and featured) article from the German wikipedia. -- ALoan (Talk) 18:14, 8 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

  • Object - See point 5 of the FA criteria. This topic could use a more condensed treatment.- -mav 18:43, 8 December 2005 (UTC)
    • Thanks for your comment. I take it you think there is too much information in the article? Are there any particular areas you would like to see condensed? -- ALoan (Talk) 19:12, 8 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
    • One thing I have noticed is that the German Wikipedia is much less likely to split articles than the English one. Personally, I feel like each article should give a complete overview of the item listed in the title, which in this case is a very complicated subject. If any of the issues need to be expanded upon, separate articles should be created, but they should not simply remove the text and force the reader to navigate through the hypertext. Previously the Red Cross pages were scattered all over the place with very little coherence, which is critical on this subject because it is so commonly misunderstood. Tfine80 01:14, 9 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
  • Object. The very complete "History" section should probably migrate in largely its current form to a new article History of the International Red Cross and Red Crescent Movement, with a summary-style history left in this one. I'll also note that I find the table-of contents structure of the History section strange, particularly the existence of the sub-sub-section 1.2.1, "History." I'm also concerned about some wording that seems a little too POV regarding Dunant: "...his tireless activities..." for example. —Bunchofgrapes (talk) 20:46, 8 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]