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The article was not promoted by Ian Rose 01:57, 3 July 2012 [1].

Justin Bieber on Twitter

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Nominator(s): LauraHale and Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:39, 24 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

This article explains an important modern cultural phenomenon. The use of social media technology like Twitter for marketing has major commercial and marketing implications, and has recently been the subject of academic inquiry in a number of disciplines. The Wikipedia has a shortage of high quality articles on commercial subjects. We believe that this article meets the featured article criteria. It is fully and amply sourced from a variety of reliable sources, including academic and mainstream news articles. It has passed a careful and painstaking Good Article nomination, and has appeared on the the front page as a Did You Know?

  • As the editor who passed the GAN for this, I have to say that I don't see it becoming FA status. ⇒TAP 21:46, 24 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Having been alerted to this in an email (conversationally, not seeking any action on my part), I don't think the prose is FA standard. Also, the section markers seem more or less arbitrary, I am not sure they are a guide to the reader in seeking to find content. Urge the nominators to consider withdrawal and a PR. Not opposing merely because I don't want my oppose to hit the noms with a fifteen-day penalty.--Wehwalt (talk) 22:06, 24 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • I haven't read the article, but please, let's all follow Wehwalt's example and try to keep this discussion centered around whether the article meet the WP:WIAFA criteria--not what we personally like or don't like to read about on Wikipedia. Mark Arsten (talk) 22:10, 24 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Question If the goal is discussing Twitter as social marketing, why isn't an article on "Twitter as a means of social marketing" at FAC instead of one of the multitude of "Pop icon on twitter" articles? Such an article would be far more informative, useful, and likely to meet FA criteria.PumpkinSky talk 22:13, 24 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
ref issue
  • Contains two definitions of the named ref "biebstwits32" and four "/" invocations:
<ref name=biebstwits32>{{cite news|url=http://www.theage.com.au/entertainment/dangerous-creature-justin-bieber-bungyjumps-in-new-zealand-20100428-tr4g.html |title=Justin Bieber Bungy-Jumps In New Zealand: Pictures, Photos |newspaper=[[The Age]] |date=28 April 2010 |accessdate=24 April 2012 |location=Melbourne}}</ref>

<ref name=biebstwits32>{{cite news|url=http://www.theage.com.au/entertainment/tv-and-radio/justin-bieber-hits-back-at-costars-claim-hes-a-brat-20110510-1egb8.html |title=Justin Bieber denies he's a brat |newspaper=[[The Age]] |date=10 May 2011 |accessdate=24 April 2012 |location=Melbourne}}</ref>

<ref name=biebstwits32/>

The second definition is simply omitted from the rendered article; they are all collated together using the first definition; see here. The first ref is presumably correct. The second could be fixed by simply renaming it. It is not clear which the "/" invocations should really be linking to without a review of both the article content and the sources. Br'er Rabbit (talk) 22:14, 24 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]


  • Strong oppose for the following reasons:
  • The lead needs to be expanded to better summarize the article. It also needs to be rewritten to flow a lot better.
  • Reading the sections from paragraph to paragraph, it is very hard to follow, as it seems that random facts are strewn all over the place with no sign of cohesiveness.
  • Bieber is a self-declared Twitter addict, The closest I can find according to the reference is ...and apparently can't quit with the Twitter. I'm not seeing where it says, or even implies, that Bieber is a self-declared Twitter addict.
  • An extensive copyedit is needed, as there are grammar errors all over the place. Some examples include the following:
  • Ashton Kutcher first learned of Bieber through Twitter and Charlie Sheen accidentally shared his phone number with the world while trying to direct message to Bieber. - Kutcher first learned of Bieber through Twitter and Charlie Sheen?
  • ...where his fans can usually make topics about him trending. - Please see WP:PLUSING; something like make topics about his trends is better.
  • ...which resulted in James A. Roppo, attached to Bieber's record company, being arrested because he failed to post an update... - Again, change to something like "the arrest of James A. Roppo" instead of "James A. Roppo being arrested".
  • Bieber is a self-declared Twitter addict, joining on 28 March 2009, a month after his mother. - You're trying to jam two completely unrelated and separate statements into one sentence (i.e. his being a Twitter addict and when he joined). Move the "self-declared Twitter addict" part somewhere else in the section.
  • His decisions regarding which followers to retweet is, in his words, "kind of, like, it's random". - The subject of the sentence is decisions, which is plural. That means the verb has to be are and not is.
  • MOS:LQ is not consistently followed; compare "kind of, like, it's random". with "all roads lead to Justin Bieber."
  • One example of this is a tweet from October 2009, when he tweeted "If you could give to any charity, what would it be?" - I believe there should be a colon after "tweeted". There are also many others like this.
  • Paragraphing is all over the place. Compare the paragraph structure in the "Introduction" section (which is fine) with all the other sections. There shouldn't be paragraphs that are only one or two sentences long. The "Technology, marketing and the media" is poorly written in this regard.
  • He was ahead of Ashton Kutcher who had a score of 97 and Sean Combs who had a score of 94. - The clauses there need to be set off by commas.
  • The arranged it so Bieber and the others... - Sigh.
  • Bieber, along with other celebrities, has been the subject of the false reports of his death on Twitter, - The false reports?
  • The couple were bombarded with phone calls, and threatened to sue Bieber for having made the tweet. - Should be "and they threatened".
  • There are some glaring verifiability issues, with some stuff either not in the citations given or other stuff that I could not verify after looking at the next available reference.
  • Numerous citation issues:
  • Refs #78 and #79 (and these are just a couple of examples) use a {{cite web}} template for a paper magazine. You need to use {{cite journal}}, put all the pertinent information (including page numbers) and then a URL if applicable. The same applies to many others, including books that are all linked to Google Books. Everything is needed so that, if that Google Books entry disappears, we still have the full citation in which to locate said book or magazine.

Oppose at this time, though open to revisiting. Nikkimaria (talk) 23:47, 24 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Some comments:

  • There are a bunch of quotes of individual tweets, many of which are just stating that Bieber said something, but without indicating why there is any importance to what he tweeted. Why choose those particular tweets to mention specifically, and not others? The reason should be made clear in the text.
  • The Charlie Sheen incident seems to be very tangentially related to this article topic. That is related to Charlie Sheen on Twitter, not so much JBoT.
  • If you say "Bieber related topics", Bieber-related needs a hyphen. There are at least a couple instances of this sort of problem that need fixing.

LadyofShalott 00:18, 25 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  • Specifically (for me) the Introduction section is inappropriate. The last two paragraphs are simple repetition of what he posted on Twitter, (i.e. in the second last paragraph when he hit 6 million fans he thanked them on Twitter, when he reached 11 million fans, he thanked them). The last paragraph is the same (the reference to Drew on X-factor). The sentence "Bieber comments on a broad range of subjects on Twitter, including the Arab Spring's Egyptian uprising that led the country's leaders to shut down the Internet" doesn't seem appropriate, did Bieber's tweeting directly result in the government shutting down the Internet, or was he simply commenting on something that thousands of other people were commenting about at the same time. Same with the Kony 2012 reference, and the "less controversial" tweets, what makes his trip to New Zealand so special that it should be mentioned in this article?--kelapstick(bainuu) 23:21, 25 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I didn't mean the lead, meant the section titled "introduction". --kelapstick(bainuu) 22:53, 30 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Also the reference to Instagram in the lead seems rather unrelated to the article (or Twitter in general, just by skimming the Instagram article.) The only relation is that he mentioned it on Twitter, and the article shouldn't be about everything he tweets about. --kelapstick(bainuu) 23:40, 26 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Has there ever been a case like this, in which an article is simultaneously up for AfD and FAC? And is that allowed? Interchangeable 23:00, 29 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Sure it is; this is how new processes are born: WP:FACD. Br'er Rabbit (talk) 23:21, 29 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, there has been another case like this. Stephen Colbert at the 2006 White House Correspondents' Association Dinner was simiultaneously up for FAC and AfD back in May 2006. It was kept at AfD and not promoted at FAC, only to be promoted at a second FAC a month later. It survived a second AfD in 2009 in a rare case of a featured article being nominated for AfD, but was demoted during an FAR in 2010. Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:58, 29 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

When I copied this and some others into Use of Twitter by celebrities and politicians, I fixed quite a number of errors in citations along the way, including missing page numbers, incorrect authors, missing information, and wrong citation templates used. Checking what's here against what's there would be a productive exercise, not least because you won't have to duplicate my effort and spend the several hours on fixing a whole load of citation problems that I did. Uncle G (talk) 10:11, 29 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose – For reviewing purposes, it's important to separate emotional feelings from an article's merits. This topic has clearly generated a lot of heat, which is reflected by the AfD nom in the middle of an FAC. I rely on the quality of an article in deciding where I stand in reviews, and unfortunately I don't think this is up to FA standards. There are too many issues at the moment, and a sampling are below.

  • The second paragraph of Introduction is what previous reviewers say it is: a mixture of a bunch of individual facts that don't form a cohesive whole. I agree with their complaints, and would like to see the section focus on the main aspects of Bieber's tweeting, rather than on a bunch of loosely connected things (I'm sure he wasn't the only person who tweeted about the Arab Spring or Whitney Houston's death).
  • While here, I also have concerns about the jargon that is used at times here. We seem to be assuming that readers will automatically know what return following, following itself, and retweeting are, which I think isn't a safe assumption. If my parents were reading this. they'd be totally lost.
  • Not sure how encyclopedic the phrasing is in "Bieber gave a shout out to his followers". That could be made more formal.
  • I don't see much of value in this section's last two paragraphs. Pretty much the only thing I think is helpful is the follower milestones, and these are covered later.
  • Going back a little bit, I see "For a brief time in April 2011, Bieber quit Twitter." Now this is something that is interesting, yet it's totally glossed over. What made him quit, if anything? Why and when did he come back? Why aren't these aspects covered when many less worthy ones are?
  • Well that sounds like he just had a little snit, and then got over it. To turn the question around, what makes this worthy of even mentioning? It either needs to be dropped, or its significance discussed. Otherwise it's a meaningless factoid. LadyofShalott 02:13, 2 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Technology, marketing and the media: "He was regularly trending in April 2010." It's already mentioned that he trended a lot that year, so why is the month separately mentioned? If it has to do with Twitter's algorithm change, that should be made clearer, perhaps by saying when Twitter did this.
  • The b is capitalized in LeBron James.
  • Followers and fans: The first paragraph is basically a list of followers statistics in prose form. Can't say that this is engaging writing, honestly. And why are his Facebook numbers relevant here? This is an article on his Twitter presence, not his Facebook presence.
  • "In March 2012, Bieber's fans wanted to unseat Lady Gaga as the most popular celebrity on Twitter." This has to be "wanted him to unseat"; otherwise it sounds like the fans themselves wanted to unseat Gaga, which isn't the intention.
  • Neither Bieber nor Lady Gaga discussed their mutual fanbase's campaigns on Twitter." "fanbase's" → "fanbases'"?
  • Why do notes 2 and 3 have 10+ references each? It seems like overkill for what is being cited.
  • Refs 2 and 3 are the same and can be combined. Also, the page range needs an en dash.
  • What makes Twitaholic.com (ref 8) a reliable source?
    • It pulls the data straight from Twitter's API. We could get it ourselves. It was needed only because the GA reviewer wanted the exact date. I was happy with the reliable sources that just said the month. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:27, 1 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Refs 25, 92, and 138 have the second figure missing from their apparent page ranges.
  • In ref 163, PCWorld is a magazine and should be italicized.
  • Ref 77 has an unformatted link.

Giants2008 (Talk) 01:36, 1 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Speedy withdraw article is at AFD, doesn't meet good article criteria 3a & 3b and violates numerous policies.--Otterathome (talk) 16:08, 1 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Speedy withdraw but not because it is at AfD, more because the prose in particular is dreadful; honestly this does not even meet GA standards let alone FA. --John (talk) 21:21, 1 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose: 1e, stability cf: since nomination, diff 246 intermediate revisions by 23 users not shown Fifelfoo (talk) 05:42, 2 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Delegate: I think the Justin Bieber on Twitter article could stand some expansion to incorporate the new material you have unearthed. If it's okay with you, I would like to ask the delegate to withdraw the FAC nomination at this time. Thanks to everyone who make constructive comments. Hawkeye7 (talk) 12:15, 2 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]


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