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The article was promoted 21:04, 31 July 2007.

Kaziranga National Park

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Well written, comprehensive, factually accurate, neutral and stable. Amartyabag, Pradiptaray, Nichalp, Dwaipayanc and others have done a wonderful job. Nicely referenced and nicely laid out with good images, and reads nice too. If there are any minor issues that need to be solved, we can address them here pretty very quickly. Aditya Kabir 13:32, 16 July 2007 (UTC) It is a national park and a World Heritage Site in Golaghat and Nagaon districts of Assam, India. Two-thirds of the world's Great One-horned Rhinoceroses live in the park. Kaziranga has the highest density of tigers among protected areas in the World and was declared a Tiger Reserve in 2006. The park has large breeding populations of Elephant, Water Buffalo and Swamp Deer. Kaziranga is recognized as an Important Bird Area by Birdlife International for conservation of avifaunal species. I ask every wildlife interested person and for further conservation of critically endangered rihnos to support this article and to correct minor sentence problems themselves if possible. Amartyabag TALK2ME 05:35, 20 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

  • Mild Oppose — To me the "Etymology" section seems awkwardly written, and does not satisfy 1(a) of the FA criteria. It needs a re-write and some paragraph breaks. The first paragraph of the lead also seems to lack a natural flow, and reads like a concatenation of a bulleted list. There are one or two minor punctuation/grammar issues in the text that I'm sure will be cleaned up, and the use of the phrase "took off" to describe a career appears to be vernacular. Other than that, the article seems pretty decent. — RJH (talk) 14:57, 19 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I have cleaned up the etymology section and tried to make it more presentable. Can you please have a look and give feedback?-Deepraj | Talk 16:49, 20 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Well, I made some extensive rearrangements to the "Etymology" section, before I saw that Deepraj had already made some changes. Chaipau 21:57, 20 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks. I've removed my opposition. — RJH (talk) 21:28, 21 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comment - These sentences could be better phrased "Grasslands dominate the western reaches of the park which are typically at a lower altitude than the eastern end, with tall elephant grass on the higher ground while the short grasses cover the lower grounds surrounding the bheels or flood created ponds."[1] "After a decreasing trend for past few years, six one-horned rhinoceroses were killed by poachers in the early 2007, with a report establishing links for funding the Islamic militant groups in Bangladesh connected to Al Qaida."[2] There's also some incorrect dash usage. Epbr123 20:04, 19 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I have cleaned up the Flora and Conservation Management sections in which the above sentences occur along with some minor copy-editing. Can you please have a look and give further feedback if you feel anything else is necessary?-Deepraj | Talk 16:49, 20 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • "There is tall elephant grass on the higher ground" - sentences shouldn't start with "there" when the "there" doesn't stand for anything. "Tall elephant grass is on the higher ground" is better. Epbr123 17:02, 20 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
 Done RedoneAmartyabag TALK2ME 06:16, 22 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comment- replace {{convert|37|°C|°F|0}} and some more with {{convert|37|°C|°F|0|lk=on}}. rest there is no problem regarding the content except Etymology section- it needs a bit improved. after you address all the req. feel free to strike away my comments. thanks, Sushant gupta (talk · contribs) 08:35, 20 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
right now i just fixed one as an example. after you address rest of them, then strike away my comments. Sushant gupta (talk · contribs)04:59, 21 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
According to WP:MOS, only for the first time the links to the Units is needed. Atleast once of all the units has been linked, the etymology section has been redone by Deepraj. Amartyabag TALK2ME 06:07, 22 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Object - The transport section needs some references. Many of the sources are the website of KNP. I believe that these cannot be taken to be independent sources. Thirdly, I think some of the sentences might be improved, although I am no expert on (1a)
    • According to another legend Srimanta Sankardeva, the 16th century saint-scholar, once blessed a childless couple, Kazi and Rangai, and asked them to dig a big pond in the region so that their name would live on
      • shouldn't the comma be after "legend"?
    • he was told it came from Kaziranga and the legend how it got its name
      • I don't understand that
    • Pieces of monoliths associated with Karbi rule found scattered in the area seems to bear testimony to this assertion
    • shouldn't it be "seem to bear testimony"
  • There are probably other bits and pieces which can be improved by copyediting. Blnguyen (bananabucket) 05:04, 23 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Done some copyedit in the Etymology section and added references in the transport section and other. Amartyabag TALK2ME 12:23, 23 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Just for the record, I am satisfied with the notes that were struck out by Amartyabag. Blnguyen (bananabucket) 02:27, 30 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Action List
  1. ^ corrected by Deepraj on 16:39, 20 July 2007 (UTC)
  2. ^ corrected by Deepraj on 16:47, 20 July 2007 (UTC)
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