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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Buidhe via FACBot (talk) 24 April 2023 [1].

Mercedes-Benz Vision EQXX

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Nominator(s): X750. Spin a yarn? Articles I've screwed over? 01:57, 20 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about a proof of concept electric car introduced in 2022 by German automaker Mercedes-Benz. X750. Spin a yarn? Articles I've screwed over? 01:57, 20 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Where? All over, is the simple answer.

Lead
  • Cites are not needed in the lead unless for quotes – and the ones that are supporting the statement " average energy consumption of 8.7 kWh (31 MJ) per 100 km (approximately 11.5 km per kWh)" should be in the body with the rest of the sentence – the lead should summarise the article, not have different information.
  • "Mercedes-Benz'": Benz' is not the possessive: Benz's is the correct form
  • "However": always a bit of a flag and is certainly misused here
  • '"... entire company is headed."' Should be ' entire company is headed".' Per LQ
Overview
  • One paragraph supported by one citation. Unfortunately the citation is not at the end, so the last sentence is unsupported – and I'm struggling to understand why you took out the citation needed tag
  • Elsewhere in the bit that is supposedly supported, we are told "Initial design ... began in January 2021": for the life of me I can't see that in the source, so that's a sourcing fail. Ditto the claim that the car has "1,000 km (621 mi) of range" – the source says it "will travel more than 620 miles on a single charge", which is different.
Elsewhere
  • Both "hood" and "fender" are US English and the article is written in (and tagged) as British English. "Bonnet" and "wing" are the correct terms – and what a "distinguished fender" is, is anyone's guess.

This isn't a full in-depth review, just a very quick glance at a couple of points that caught my eye. As I said above, I would recommend withdrawing and returning in a couple of weeks once the prose and sourcing are FA compliant. Looking at the talk page I don't see any record the article has been through a peer review. I suggest that would be your best option, adding it to the FAC peer review sidebar to raise its profile. - SchroCat (talk) 08:03, 20 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

SchroCat, I did bring it to peer review. It was unattended for for two weeks. Thanks for the pointers though, I'll work on it. Cheers. X750. Spin a yarn? Articles I've screwed over? 08:07, 20 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]
So why isn't it recorded on the article talk page? There should be a record of it.
As I've said above, this is not a full review, just a spot check on a couple of points and there is enough for me to retain my oppose here, even after these have been completed. - SchroCat (talk) 08:13, 20 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Well, I closed the discussion and I removed it from the talk page as I thought it was not needed anymore. Anyhow, I did not expect you to withdraw your oppose anyway. It just gives me a starting point from which I can improve the article. The discussion is located at Wikipedia:Peer review/Mercedes-Benz Vision EQXX/archive1. I have also recorded it on the talk page. Apologies for the mishaps, I am relatively new to the process. X750. Spin a yarn? Articles I've screwed over? 08:30, 20 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]
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