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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by Sarastro1 via FACBot (talk) 21:53, 4 November 2017 [1].

Raymond Leane

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Nominator(s): Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 07:31, 9 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Raymond Leane was a highly decorated Australian Army officer who rose from the rank of captain to lead a brigade during World War I, and was dubbed "the foremost fighting leader" in the Australian Imperial Force. After the war he was quickly appointed as the Commissioner of the South Australia Police, a role he carried out with distinction for 24 years, overseeing significant developments in the force, for which he was knighted. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 07:31, 9 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

  • File:The_fighting_Leanes_of_Prospect_1915_P02136-001.jpg: source states this is a studio portrait from the UK - not sure AustraliaGov would apply
  • File:SLSA_B9700_Anzac_Day_March_1937.jpg: as a newspaper photograph, the copyright wouldn't automatically have belonged to the government, unless there was some agreement to that effect? Nikkimaria (talk) 14:17, 9 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Support I reviewed this article at GA. I believe that it meets the FA standard. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 18:44, 12 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Hawkeye! Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:26, 12 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Sources review

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All sources seem of appropriate quality/reliability and are formatted consistently. Brianboulton (talk) 16:37, 11 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Brian! Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:40, 12 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments Support by Cas Liber

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Taking a look now....

During the war, two of his four brothers who served were killed, and six of his nephews also served, two of whom were killed. - I think it sounds better more repetitive actually, thus: "During the war, two of his four brothers who served, and two of six of his nephews who served, were killed." or something like it. It just flows a bit oddly as is.
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In its capture, the 11th Battalion had lost 36 killed and 73 wounded.[ - this strikes me as odd grammatically.
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The article has both "while" and "whilst" in it - suggest choosing one (I like the former...)
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and carried him (in his arms) to a spot where he dug a grave (himself) before erecting a cross above it - I'd argue that the words in parentheses are redundant...
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In November 1928, two of Leane's sons, Lionel and Geoffrey, had joined the mounted police - why "had joined" (pluperfect) tense here?

:::it is out of chronological order, as the narrative has already gone into 1930, so I used "had" to denote that it had already happened.

Oh ok, it lust looks off as the 1930 is the previous paragraph, but ok Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 04:47, 21 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Otherwise looking on track for a shiny star....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:13, 19 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Cas Liber, all addressed I believe. Here are my edits. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:48, 20 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments Strong support from Adityavagarwal

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What a wonderfully written article it is. Just few minor issues!

  • I guess one style should be retained, of putting a double quote mark before or after a fullstop.
  • It varies depending on the source. I am trying to apply MOS:TQ. Can you point to where you think I've misapplied it? Thanks.
  • "On 25–27 May" or "From 25 to 27 May"?
  • Done.

Thanks for taking a look, Adityavagarwal! I just have that query about the quotation marks. Thanks, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:23, 29 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Strong support - A super solid article, and well deserves a shiny star to it! Adityavagarwal (talk) 05:56, 29 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@FAC coordinators: this one looks go to go. Can I have dispensation for a new nom please? Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:46, 3 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

That’s fine with me. Sarastro1 (talk) 07:50, 3 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
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