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Sacred Heart Convent School (Jamshedpur)

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Sacred Heart Convent School in Jamshedpdur, is one of the most innovative and progreesive institutions in Jamshedpur and has contributed to the city's growth as well as its relation to TATA Steel. Graduates are typically well-educated young ladies who are able to thrive in a modern society and at college. Arundhati bakshi 14:15, 28 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

  • Oppose: This does not seem to meet any of the criteria. Please look at some of the recent FAs on subjects such as this, and then re-write. References are essential. Perhaps Wikipedia:Peer review or Wikipedia:Good articles would be a better place for this at the moment, although even "Good Article" requires reference too. Giano | talk 14:49, 28 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Oppose. This is nowhere near ready to be posted on FAC.
    • No inline citations or reference section
    • Incorrect heading formatting
    • Tons of internal links that lead to redirects
    • Filled with POV and informal tone: "Mother" this and "Sister" that, "young ladies"
    • Grammar and spelling:
      • Sentences begun without capital letters
      • "ran" when it should be "run" (in the very first sentence)
      • "...the maintain the vision of education as the means to transform society." Huh?
    • Content
      • Why are we talking about the history of the school and all of a sudden there's one sentence about how it isn't air conditioned?
      • National Institute of Open Schooling section makes no sense at all
This is simply not ready for FAC. I suggest you work on the problems I've listed and then submit the article for a Peer Review before trying for Featured Article status. Good luck! Kafziel 15:03, 28 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]
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