Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Sviatoslav I of Kiev

This is an old article but over the last few weeks has seen dramatic expansion and improvement and is now, in my opinion, very comprehensive. I did considerable work on it so I guess this is a self-nom, but others, including User:Ghirlandajo and User:Beit Or, contributed as much as or more than I did. Briangotts (Talk) (Contrib) 15:39, 20 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

A new, somewhat more conservative map has been uploaded. Briangotts (Talk) (Contrib) 20:35, 20 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • He is the villain of Samuel Gordon's novel The Lost Kingdom, or the Passing of the Khazars is too abrupt, begin it with something like "In the novel The Lost Kingdom..."
  • Sviatoslav is famous for his incessant campaigns in the east and south East and South of where? I could be talking about Birmingham & Franklin & nobody would no what I'm talking about.
  • at times was allied with the Pechenegs and Magyars, when both "was allied" and "allied" make sense, you choose the active tense.
  • by rapid expansion into the Volga River valley should have a.
  • the Volga River valley, the Pontic steppe and the Balkans again no reader has any idea where that expansion took place.
  • Sviatoslav's conquests, for the most part, were not consolidated into a functioning empire maybe "failed to consolidate" might be better.
These are some of the problems that I'm pointing out. I suggest somebody fix the entire article 1 more time. (Wikimachine 03:56, 22 November 2006 (UTC))[reply]