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Wilfredo Gómez

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informative, if maybe rookish, article about legendary boxer's life. Nice photos as well. Antonio men and women's knockout Martin

  • Object. Lupo 28 June 2005 08:14 (UTC)
    1. The images have no sources. Lupo 28 June 2005 08:14 (UTC)
    2. 2nd img caption: Miguel Hernández links to the wrong person. Lupo 28 June 2005 08:14 (UTC)
    3. Lead is too short. Lupo 28 June 2005 08:14 (UTC)
    4. Only one "Biography" section, which is actually more a list of fights. Lupo 28 June 2005 08:14 (UTC)
    5. Nothing on his early life: where was he born (in Las Monjas, Puerto Rico :-), how did he grow up? Lupo 28 June 2005 08:14 (UTC)
    6. No references. Lupo 28 June 2005 08:14 (UTC)
    7. Tone sometimes too casual. First example: "Coming from Puerto Rico, however, meant that the big bucks and exposure of the American media would not come easy, and Gómez had to move to Costa Rica, from where he began to tour all of Central America in hopes of finding matches." (big bucks, had to — who says he had to move to Costa Rica? Why not just "moved to C.R."? Why could he not have made his way in the U.S.?) Second example: "Puerto Rico was shocked by Gómez's defeat" (Was it? Says who? And what about all those people who couldn't care less about boxing? I'm sure those exist in Puerto Rico, too!) Third example: "is now back in Puerto Rico, getting his life back on track" First, it's kind of eerie to switch to the present tense (why not "returned to P.R."?), and second, what does "getting his life back on track" mean exactly, and who says so? When did he return to Puerto Rico? Lupo 28 June 2005 08:14 (UTC)
    8. Especially towards the end, too superficial: "He later moved to Venezuela, where he made a few wrong decisions and ran into trouble with the law." Why? What decisions? What does "trouble with the law" mean? (Apparently, he became a drug addict. What drug(s)? Coke?) Did he stand trial? Was he ever convicted, and if so, of what? Did he spend some time in jail? If so, where and for how long? Lupo 28 June 2005 08:14 (UTC)
      See also [1], which hints at some of these questions, but more definitive sources would be good. Lupo 28 June 2005 08:51 (UTC)
    • Dear Lupo: Hi1 How are you? My regards and salute to you. As far as the Wilfredo Gomez, it was my third article, back in 2002. I believe the page has improved a lot in three years, specially since when I wrote it I was new and it was POV. I worked on some of the issues you mentioned, mosly based on what I myself heard (as far as his early life) both from Gomez himself and from elders in Las Monjas when I lived in Puerton Rico. I think three links is good enough, and the link you offered is a little POV as far as his fights and specially about his life after boxing. He HAS stayed out of trouble since he was in trouble. Anyways, I wanted to thank you for the time to read the article I originated, which always flatters me and I hope you enjoy it now better since I made a few fixes. Thank you and God bless you!

Your wiki-friend, Antonio El Feroz Vargas Martin

  • Refer to peer review. - Mgm|(talk) June 28, 2005 09:00 (UTC)
  • Object: Object: Far too little information. The lead is too short. I would like to see it more sectioned and clearly laid out, and of course the big crime no references. Giano | talk 28 June 2005 11:48 (UTC)
  • Oppose. The article is not well-structured enough and the person is not famous. I've never heard of him. --Deryck C. 2005-06-30 15:39:15 (UTC)
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