Wikipedia:Featured article review/Cystic fibrosis/archive1

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The article was removed by YellowAssessmentMonkey 02:03, 5 January 2010 [1].

Cystic fibrosis

Review commentary

Featured article candidates/Cystic fibrosis

Featured article review/Cystic fibrosis/archive1

Notified: ImGz, InvictaHOG, Kyoko, WP MED.

This medical article is a 2006 promotion with unsourced statements, unformatted and inconsistent citations, doesn't conform with WP:LEAD, dead links and MOS errors, in addition to an overreliance on primary sources that don't conform to WP:MEDRS. Prognosis section is incomplete, epidemiology is poorly cited, and several sections are lacking appropriate sources. The article needs to be re-worked to conform to WP:MEDRS and the use of high-quality, peer-reviewed, secondary sources. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 23:00, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

File:CFTR.jpg: it would be nice to have the issue and page number of the journal
File:Mucoviscidose.PNG: Missing information. I guess this is generated by the uploader using the Ensembl data? I don't know enough about the program/database to figure out how it is used, or who the author, etc is.
File:CFtreatmentvest2.JPG: no source or author
File:Dorothy Hansine Andersen.jpg: possibly not public domain. The National Library of Medicine says "Transmission or reproduction of protected items beyond that allowed by fair use as defined in the copyright laws requires the written permission of the copyright owners. Specific NLM Web sites containing protected information provide additional notification of conditions associated with its use."[2] If you look at the credit line, at [3], you can see that the photograph is credited to "Archives and Special Collections, Columbia University Health Sciences Division". (It is the other image at the NLM webpage[4] [the one at the bottom] that is credited to the Library of Congress Prints and Photographs Division.[5])
Other images OK. DrKiernan (talk) 23:27, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comment. Please add alt text to images; see WP:ALT. Eubulides (talk) 23:49, 20 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Comment. Although not absolutely necessary, the article could use a main picture at the top right-hand corner of the page. This is typical of many featured articles. Tyrol5 [Talk] 02:38, 21 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

File:Aspergillus fumigatus 01.jpg: This image is captioned in a misleading way for this article, and it is a poorly chosen image for illustrating the problems of cystic fibrosis patients--Aspergillus spores are so common it would be unusual not to find them in a human lung. So, why not show the hyphae or a pathological lung instead? Aspergillosis tissue pathology is evidenced, usually, by the presence of hyphae, not specifically of conidia. I admit it is a nice conidiophore. Including this image, poorly captioned, will cause confusion for the reader with slight knowledge and misinformation for the reader with little knowledge. I'm not an expert so I don't know if the expert will get a chuckle from it, though. The image should be removed. I am unwilling to be "bold" having a prior attempt to remove a bad image from a featured article met with instantaneous reversion. --69.226.100.7 (talk) 22:02, 20 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Move to FARC, very little happening here, still a lot of uncited text. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 15:07, 5 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

This is definitely in need of some work, particularly due to uncited content and reliance on primary sources. I'd be happy to help with wordsmithing, MOS cleanup, ref formatting etc. if we can get something happening on the content and sources end. Maralia (talk) 19:42, 5 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comment The entire October issue of Seminars in Respiratory and Critical Care Medicine was dedicated to reviews of cystic fibrosis. If someone has access, these could be used to greatly expand and update the article. Fvasconcellos (t·c) 22:02, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- These articles are now available at Wikipedia:WikiProject Resource Exchange/Resource Request#Cystic fibrosis. Dr pda (talk) 04:12, 12 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I am also concerned with the lack of daughter articles; this is one topic where the application of summary style would be very appropriate. Fvasconcellos (t·c) 22:20, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

FARC commentary

FA criteria concerns are sourcing, copyright, MOS, lead. YellowMonkey (bananabucket) (Invincibles finally at Featured topic candidates) 05:31, 6 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Remove, unfortunately, little is happening, the article still has citation problems and needs an update. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 14:10, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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