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The list was promoted by PresN via FACBot (talk) 00:25, 24 March 2024 (UTC) [1].[reply]

1970 NBA expansion draft

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Nominator(s): -- ZooBlazer 18:43, 29 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'm continuing my journey of improving articles related to the Portland Trail Blazers. This was the fifth expansion draft in the NBA, featuring the newly founded Buffalo Braves, Cleveland Cavaliers, and Portland Trail Blazers selecting players for their inaugural seasons. I'm hoping to make this just the second NBA expansion draft article to become a featured list, with the other being 1966. -- ZooBlazer 18:43, 29 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Pseud 14

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  • I would link NBA in the infobox
    Oops, rookie mistake by me. Done. -- ZooBlazer
  • but folded the following month -- perhaps an alternative word choice for folded as it is a bit informal.
    It was surprisingly harder to find an alternative even after a Google search. I think I managed to figure something out though. -- ZooBlazer
  • After each round, where each of the expansion teams had selected one player each -- I think the second or last instance of each can be dropped, as it sounds a bit repetitive and would still convey the same. I'm leaning towards the second instance.
    I ended up just dropping both of the last two instances. -- ZooBlazer
  • briefly before he was waived -- Perhaps link waived
    Done -- ZooBlazer
  • Worth linking trade on the first instance
    Done -- ZooBlazer
  • That's all from me. Great work. Pseud 14 (talk) 15:29, 1 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    @Pseud 14: Thanks for the comments! I think I've addressed them all. -- ZooBlazer 17:21, 1 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Changes look good. Support. Also, if interested, would appreciate a prose review on an older FLC here. Pseud 14 (talk) 18:03, 1 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
MPGuy2824's comments

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  • "Buffalo, New York, Cleveland, Ohio, and Portland, Oregon were awarded the expansion teams" - is there a way to word this so that it doesn't sound like six different places were awarded teams? Maybe remove the states and just link the cities?
    Done -- ZooBlazer
  • "Houston, Texas was also [...] had to end their pursuit" - Houston changes from being singular to plural mid-sentence
    Cleaned the sentence up by removing the pursuit part altogether. -- ZooBlazer
  • "the existing teams added another player to their protected list" => "each of the existing teams added another player to their protected list"
    Done -- ZooBlazer
  • "However, Howell was immediately traded to the Philadelphia 76ers in exchange" => "Howell was immediately traded to the Philadelphia 76ers, however, in exchange"
    Done -- ZooBlazer
  • "However, Ohl retired from playing prior to the start of the season and" => "Ohl retired from playing prior to the start of the season, however, and"
    Done -- ZooBlazer
  • "However, Hetzel was waived without playing a game for the Blazers and" => "Hetzel was waived without playing a game for the Blazers, however, and"
    Done -- ZooBlazer
  • The order of the table seems to be alphabetical by team and then player. Would it be useful to list them by order of draft pick if this info is available?
    I've been unable to find any sources with the actual order, so I'm not sure if it's just not public knowledge or if it is because it happened so long ago. The closest thing I found was only the first six picks. -- ZooBlazer
  • "No reliable single source listing the drafts, so all of them are cited separately" - this reads a bit "meta" to me. I don't personally think discussion of reliable sourcing or lack thereof belongs in an article. Maybe circumvent this by changing that note to "The previous expansion drafts took place in [year], [year], etc"
    Reworded -- ZooBlazer
  • That's what I got! -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 16:01, 4 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    @ChrisTheDude Thanks for another great review! I was able to do everything except put the results in pick order. -- ZooBlazer 17:58, 4 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 19:38, 4 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Support by Chompy Ace

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Support. Great job as a nearly flawless list! Also, If you have time would you care for reviewing the List of accolades received by Eat Bulaga! regarding its featured list nomination? Chompy Ace 09:16, 8 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Source review passed; promoted. --PresN 15:00, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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