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The list was promoted 21:49, 2 May 2008.

Blue Heelers (season 13)

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I am self-nominating this list because it has had a lot of work go into it of late and I believe it now meets all featured list criteria. The episode summaries are concise and are not too long and not too short. I believe it satisfies all applicable Wikipedia guidelines and policies. I have modeled it on and compared it with other featured lists of a similar nature such as Lost (season 3), The Simpsons (season 1), The Simpsons (season 7), etc. and believe it has reached FL level. I will address any problems or comments anybody has and would be more than happy to answer any questions. I support.

Thanks, Daniel99091 (talk) 06:13, 2 April 2008 (UTC).[reply]

  • The first sentence says it's the third season. I'm guessing this is an error. I think the article would benefit from a little more time 'in the wild', being less than a week old. --Golbez (talk) 06:25, 2 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

As the result of a recent discussion, many Blue Heelers articles were split into individual season articles and much information was merged into their respective season lists. Much of the content on the page has been simply moved. Daniel99091 (talk) 09:46, 2 April 2008 (UTC).[reply]

Resolved stuff from The Rambling Man (talk)
  • Comments
    • Avoid bold links in the lead per WP:LEAD#Bold title
      • Link removed, link in infobox will suffice
    • "third" - "thirteenth"?
      • changed, quite a stupid mistake. Probably what you'd call "making a bad impression"
    • "concerns about the decline of Blue Heelers" in what sense?
      • changed to "decline in ratings"
    • "and, when it came time for its contract to be renewed in late 2005, the Seven Network allowed it to continue filming to the end of the year (2005), although its future proceeding this was still unknown." - bit clumsy reading this.
      • changed to "When it came time for Blue Heelers' contract to be renewed in late 2005, the Seven Network allowed it to continue filming to the end of the year (2005), but its future after this was still undecided."
    • "John Wood, who portrays Tom Croydon" - "..who portrays Croydon..." will suffice.
      • changed to "..who portrays Croydon..."
    • "and is, undisputed," undisputedly?
      • changed to indisputably
    • Worth emphasising that The Bill is a British cop show.
      • emphasised
    • "did not, in fact, " in fact is redundant.
      • changed to "...failed to..."
    • "Awards-wise, this season proved a winner for ..." reads like a newspaper report...
      • changed to "This season was very successful in regards of awards, particularly for John Wood..."
    • "the Gold Logie, Wood had been nominated for, but not won, for ten straight years" not sure I can read this correctly...
      • terrible sentence; changed to "Wood had been nominated for the Gold Logie, but not won it, for ten straight years;"
    • "It is currently unknown when, or if, the thirteenth season of Blue Heelers will be releases on DVD." so remove the sentence.
      • removed
    • Guest actors aren't cited.
      • now cited
    • First para of Production is uncited.
      • now cited
    • "show's storylines; The second ending was used" uncap the "The" after the semi-colon, and use "the latter ending..."
      • changed to "the latter ending..."
    • " start producing Heelers again" Blue Heelers.
      • changed to full programme title
    • Check your times meet WP:DATE.
      • changed "PM" to "pm", removed commas from dates (eg. 14 January, 2006 becomes 14 January 2006)
    • "record, which was, and still is," reads oddly and may go out of date so provide an As of...
      • re-written the sentence and removed the reference to current time
    • "These type of figures which Blue Heelers had not achieved for years." is this a sentence? Why is half of it in italics?
      • forgot to end the italics after Blue Heelers
    • "In this, Blue Heelers' final year" I think this has been emphasises enough.
      • removed a few references to the final season
    • Half of the awards section is uncited.
      • now cited
    • Synopsis should be prose, not a load of bullet points.
      • done
    • " police for the deat "? death?
      • typo, changed to "death'
    • "what could happen to him in the hands of him?" don't get that at all.
      • clarified and changed to "what could happen to Rory in the hands of this fearsome criminal?"
    • "Inspector Falcon-Price " no need repeat Inspector twic in a single synopsis.
      • changed to "Inspector Falcon-Price gleefully takes over the operation of the station and also becomes suspicious about Tom's whereabouts, questioning Kelly. Amy begins to get frustrated when the Inspector does his utmost best to hinder her case of a brutal home invasion and assault; only to be taken off the case when their opinions begin to differ.".
    • "she tries to find dirt of Joss's new girlfriend." what does this mean?
      • sorry, idiom, changed to "she tries to find some negative information about Joss's new girlfriend.".
    • " DVD Release" heading should be DVD release. And is it worth a section if it's unknown both when or even if it'll be released?
      • I thought I would try to have as much consistency over each season article as possible but I see your point, I have removed the section.
  • So a lot of work to do, I must oppose at the moment. The Rambling Man (talk) 07:36, 2 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Try and find a free image to use in the list. Might be difficult as it is a television series, and not necessary, but it would boost the "appeal" of the list, if you like. weburiedoursecretsinthegarden 19:33, 2 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    • Resolved stuff from Matthewedwards (talk)

    Comments

    •  Done"due to its cancellation by the Seven Network. The cancellation was a result of Seven Network concerns about the sharp decline in ratings of Blue Heelers." could be "due to its cancellation by the Seven Network as a result of concerns about the sharp decline in ratings." Same information, less repetitive and clunky
    •  DoneAfter the first use of "the Seven Network", couldn't simply "Seven" be used instead?
    •  Done"When it came time for Blue Heelers' contract to be renewed in late 2005, the Seven Network allowed it to continue filming to the end of the year (2005), but its future after this was still undecided.[1] In January of 2006, the Seven Network announced that they had henceforth canceled Blue Heelers" could become "When the time came to renew Blue Heelers in late 2005, Seven commissioned ten further episodes to be produced, but its future after this was still undecided.[1] In January of 2006, the Seven Network announced that they had canceled Blue Heelers".
    •  DoneFurther to this, Ref [1] suggests that these episodes are from season 14, as season 13 had just wrapped: "Producer Gus Howard told the cast and crew on Monday - a day before series 13 wrapped for the year - that Seven had commissioned 10 more episodes. That takes Heelers to 510 episodes"
      • the show had "wrapped for the year"; Blue Heelers episodes are not live and need to be filmed some time before they go to air, as Blue Heelers usually started airing immediately after the Christmas hiatus. I will try to integrate this in.
        • I'm still confused then. To me it sounds like they were a day before finishing the thirteenth season. Then they're told they can have 10 more episodes. Those ten more episodes it seems are the ones listed here. So either they're a part of season 13, in which case where are the rest, or they're actually season 14. -- ṃ•α•Ł•ṭ•ʰ•Ə•Щ• @ 00:42, 4 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
          • I see what you mean. I think that this writer has just made a mistake; a few mistakes actually. I'm guessing "a day before series 13 wrapped for the year" should read "a day before series 12 wrapped for the year". Furthermore, where the writer states "That takes Heelers to 510 episodes, beating the 509-episode record held by Homicide for 30 years.", is also wrong. Blue Heelers equalled Homicide's record which was also 510 episodes. I think I'll remove this source, definitely not reliable. Thanks, and sorry it took me so long to work it out, Daniel99091 (talk) 00:57, 4 April 2008 (UTC).[reply]
    •  Done"partially due to the series's move its lower-rating timeslot" is missing a "to", I think
    •  Done}I can see lots of changes in tense, such as in Cast section: "There were no changes made to the main cast", then "The main cast is the same as in the twelfth season", and then "Main cast for this season consisted of"
    •  DoneThose redlinks need turning blue by creating articles
    •  DoneI would say that pilot refers to the series' first episode, not the season's, which would be a season premiere
    •  Done"This season also marked the time when Blue Heelers matched the record for most episodes produced..." didn't Prisoner Cell Block H have 600+ episodes?
      • corrected to "the record for most episodes produced in an Australian weekly primetime drama"
    •  Done"These type of figures which Blue Heelers had not achieved for years." is a fragmented sentence
    •  Done"achieved 1,512,000 viewers in the 5 cities (metro only)." There are only five cities in the entire country?
      • "5 cities" refers to the five largest state capitals in Australia, probably should have explained that.
    •  Done"as previously mentioned," isn't necessary
    •  DoneInstead of explaining what each #'ed column represents, why not just title them "season #" and "series #"?

    That's all for now, but I think it should also have a thorough copyedit. -- ṃ•α•Ł•ṭ•ʰ•Ə•Щ• @ 18:50, 3 April 2008 (UTC) I will try to give it a good proof and copyedit today. Thanks, Daniel99091 (talk) 00:09, 4 April 2008 (UTC).[reply]

    Resolved stuff from Redl@nds597198 (talk)
    • Comments Firstly, an inconstructive comment I feel compelled to make, I hadn't even realised the show had ended - which is a little sad considering I'm living in Sydney and I watch an awful lot of TV, almost entirely on Channel 7 :)
      •  DoneThis season focused - just like we say "Blue Heelers is" in the main article, because the shows still exists, this should probably be "focuses".
      •  Done Some links in the lead would be nice, like John Wood.
      •  Done 1.2 million viewers, which was more than half what the show had been attracting - a) Do you mean "less than half" (of 2.5 mill)? b) Do you mean "less than half of what..."?
      •  Done Maybe sweep through the article to make sure you're either consistently using "13th" or "thirteenth" - I've spotted some of each.
      •  Done Newspaper names in Reception should be italicised.
      •  Done indicating the sure decline - IMO, either a decline was indicated or there was a sure decline; a sure decline can't have been indicated.
      •  Done Ratings for this season was generally low - not sure if that should be "were generally low".
      •  Done "Stoked" isn't a very encyclopedic word.
      •  Done Names of rival TV shows in Awards should be in italics.
      •  Done Episode plot summaries - reword whatever is posing a question to the reader. The plot summaries shouldn't sound promotional, and see WP:SPOILER - you should give away what happens!
      •  Done Ref #3 is cited to IMDb Trivia - not a reliable source. Not sure if you could find another source on that point but it's better just to remove it.
  • Hope that's useful, and I'll be happy to support if it's done. :) —97198 talk 12:42, 9 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comment There are some references without retrieval dates that should be added. Plus, all full dates should be linked.--Crzycheetah 21:10, 16 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Congratulations on the work put into this - it's really nice to see some good quality content emerging on Australian TV series. However, I have a few issues that I'd like to see addressed before this is featured.
    • The text in general could do with a copyedit. There's a bit of awkwardness in the "casting" section, and the "production" section could do with a fair bit of a tune up. "Awards" is also a little bit clunky.
    • The "season synopsis" section is a bit on the rambly side, and is strangely low down in the article. It could do with being integrated with the lead plot around Croydon and being rewritten to be a bit clearer. I wonder if this wouldn't be better placed between "casting" and "production" too - what actually happened is kind of fundamental to the article topic.
    • I also think that many of the episode summaries could do with being rewritten to be a bit clearer.
  • I know I've picked out quite a few issues with the article, but I do want to congratulate those who've worked on this - it's a great effort so far. I'd even chip in to help fix the article, but I kinda stopped watching when Geoff Morrell left the series... Rebecca (talk) 06:54, 17 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      • I'm also very glad to see some articles about Aussie TV. I have begun copyediting the article, although I am yet to even touch the episode summaries. Let me say that the copyedit was an "attempt"; I have to say, I am not very good at copyediting. I would very much appreciate it if you could perhaps have a read and maybe note some of the most clumsy sentences; or maybe even change them, if you could. I would also appreciate any feedback and further suggestions. Thanks! Daniel99091 (talk) 07:19, 18 April 2008 (UTC).[reply]
    • Don't say "January of 2006" (WP:SEASON). I puzzled how 10 episodes became an 11-episode season; please clarify if the compilation was one of the 10. One sentence calls John Wood the pillar of the show, and the next says "Blue Heelers veteran, John Wood. It's repetitive and suggests some sentences were rearranged. "Hovered" is informal and doesn't indicate the degree of variation; it would be more precise to provide a range for viewer stats. "in regards of"? And the semicolon before "a record of sorts in itself" doesn't look right. Gimmetrow 06:58, 24 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]
      • Changed article in accordance with your suggestions. How are you puzzled as to the episode number? If you are puzzled because of the episode table, the final two episodes were aired together as a 2 hour finale. They were, however, 2 episodes. In regards to ratings, there is not much available for particular episodes etc. and I have included all reliable ratings data I have been able to find. Thankyou for your comments, Daniel99091 (talk) 01:21, 25 April 2008 (UTC).[reply]
    • Oppose—Doesn't meet the requirement for a "professional" standard of writing. Daniel, such a nice note on my talk page, so I feel bad opposing, but I must. Here are random samples from the lead that show the entire text needs scrutiny.
    Resolved stuff from Tony (talk)
      •  DoneRemove first hyphen as unnecessary.
      •  DonePM? See Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style_(dates_and_numbers)#Times.
      •  Done"the Seven Network" twice in two sentences, and why both linked as well? Just "the network" second time.
      •  DonePlain years are hardly ever linked (see MOS); piped maybe, but 2005 et al aren't.
      •  DoneWhat did they mean by "abbreviated". Sounds as though 11 episodes was not abbreviated, but all they shot. I'm confused.
      •  Done"In January 2006, Seven officially announced that they had cancelled Blue Heelers, although they would air a final abbreviated 11-episode season in mid-2006,[2] these being the 11 episodes which had been filmed in late 2005, before Blue Heelers had been cancelled." "although they would" is ambiguous—conditional or part of "announced that ...". Make it ", but would air ...". "these being" is kinda clumsy. Replace with a big dash (see MOS).
      •  DoneThe season, or might mean one that's showing right now.
      •  Done"character that"? Not a robot. Why not "to appear"?
      •  DoneInfobox: two flags, one above the other? One if you have to.
      •  DoneTop image is non-free content. A fair-use justification that says: "Entire image used, although it is not unfair use and does not harm the copyright owners in any way whatsoever" isn't goint to cut much ice. Are you familiar with the requirements at WP:NFC? Maybe it's OK—I'd ask one of the experts there for a quick opinion, including the use of two of these in the article (User:Black Kite is very good). At the least, I think the justification text could be rationalised.
      •  DoneBig problem: overlinking of common dictionary words. Please read MOS on this.
    And down further: "Apart from the main focus on Snr. Sgt. Tom Croydon and his prostate cancer, the season also had many other storylines." Um ... that will put many readers off; we need to engage them, and starting explicitly with "also" many other storylines ... well, just launch into them without that fluff.

    And lots more. Please find fresh eyes to go through it. Consider withdrawing, fixing and resubmitting; when fixed, it will be a worthy FL. TONY (talk) 14:08, 26 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

    Thanks for your comments, Tony. I have made all changes you suggested and hope to copy-edit the article soon. Daniel99091 (talk) 00:43, 27 April 2008 (UTC).[reply]
    • Oppose Support Apparently my comment above was ignored, since I still see references that are not cited properly. They are missing retrieval dates; refs ## 1-5,7,8, 17-21, 23.--Crzycheetah 03:46, 2 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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