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List of Cleveland Browns first-round draft picks

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The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page. No further edits should be made to this page. The closing editor's comments were: 20 days, 4 support, 0 oppose. Promote. Juhachi 08:20, 27 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

This is a self-nominated list that details the first-round draft choices made by the Cleveland Browns since the team entered the National Football League in 1950. It denotes players who have been enshrined in the Pro Football Hall of Fame based on their performance with the Browns and players who have been enshrined in the Hall of Fame having spent only a portion of their career with the Browns, players who were selected with the number one overall choice in the draft, and the players' positions and their colleges. As far as I'm concerned, it is properly formatted and need only be updated at the end of a given year's NFL Draft. Any information to make the article better before being featured would be appreciated. Wlmaltby3 00:16, 7 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

  • Oppose A good start, but there are a few issues:
    • Lead needs a copyedit. I know we often get on leads for being too short, but this one seems too long. Seems like the language needs tightening up
    • Key is WAY too self-referential. Try a short phrase in the key, like "First overall pick" or "Pro Football Hall of Fame inductee". Also, the distinction between the orange and the red color seems moot, especially with only one orange color.**What about AAFC history? Was there a draft in the AAFC? I am pretty certain that the NFL accepts records from the AAFC; I wonder if there is a draft record from those years. If it exists, the list could probably use those for completeness.
That's all I found for now. Fix that up, and I think this will be a good list! --Jayron32|talk|contribs 05:24, 9 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comments I took your advice, and cleaned up the article. The key isn't self-referential any longer, and I reversed the order of the list. (If season articles go from early to late, why shouldn't this list?) I also added references to certain picks that were changed (as in trades, etc). I couldn't find anything about AAFC history, however. And I'll attempt to shorten up the lead in time. Thanks for the suggestions! Also I need to point out that the article was moved to List of Cleveland Browns first-round draft picks. Wlmaltby3 00:18, 10 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • One more minor fix: Is Kellen Winslow II really that notable of a player to bear mentioning in the lead? Really? Also, there doesn't seem to be need to mention the lack of 31st and 32nd selections (especially since this is not stringintly correct; there have only been 32 teams for the last few seasons). What the lead really needs is a brief overview of how draft order is determined. I did some work on this at the National Football League article, feel free to pilfer the text and references from there. Make these fixes, and I will change my vote to support. The AAFC information would be nice too, but I won't hold up my support based solely on that.--Jayron32|talk|contribs 01:25, 10 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • I only mentioned Kellen Winslow II because he was the son of a HOF great, and I'd mentioned HOF players taken by the Browns prior. But it can be taken out. I really just wanted to pad the lead because I DID notice how much everyone said leads needed to be longer. So I figured I'd make it long and no one would complain. Haha. I'll work on it and see if I can't come up with. Any specific length recommendations? Wlmaltby3 03:15, 10 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • Length is not the issue. Completeness is. A lead should fully summarize and explain the article without delving into trivia. Naming players notable for being in the HOF is probably worthwhile, since you did color them by the key. Naming a (so far) total bust simply because he is coincidentally related to a HOF member is somewhat egregiously trivial. Look above, I give recommendations on how to expand the lead using useful information, without getting overly trivial. Quality not quantity...--Jayron32|talk|contribs 03:31, 10 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • I never did support this myself. At any rate, thanks for the changes, Jayron! They look good. As for pictures, I don't know how I'd put those in there, aside from placing them in the lead. But I'll take a look around and see if I can't add one or two. Wlmaltby3 17:53, 10 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]
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