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The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was not promoted by Matthewedwards 20:48, 2 August 2009 [1].

List of Dexter episodes

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Nominator(s): --Nergaal (talk), Music26/11, 97198 02:56, 13 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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Third time the charm... Nergaal (talk) 02:56, 13 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Dabs and external links check out fine.--Truco 503 01:49, 19 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs) I'm copy-editing this article. I'll post any questions I have here.

  • "Debra goes on a date with the prosthetics expert who worked on the limbs of an Ice Truck Killer survivor." What does it mean to "[work] on limbs"?
  • "Meanwhile, Paul begins to slide back into his old habits when he" Habits of what?
  • "A call from her ex-husband makes Rita suspicious of Dexter and his behavior." Was it the call itself or something said in the call?

Done with the lead and first season so far. Dabomb87 (talk) 14:43, 20 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

  • "a used-car salesman who targets beautiful brunettes" What do you mean by "targets"?
changed to kills
  • "of ADA Miguel Prado" What does "ADA" stand for?
expanded
  • "Dexter and Rita try take a decision about her pregnancy" This phrase doesn't make sense.
changed
  • "Angel becomes entangled in a sting operation when he picks up a prostitute" "sting operation" is a bit jargony. Please clarify.
wikilinked
added explanation. how's now? Nergaal (talk) 00:22, 23 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Sources

  • Ref 40 (IGN) is not formatted.
  • Oppose
    • Why not use Bloodstain pattern analyst rather than spatter?
    • Premium cable channel is linked on its second use, not its first.
      • done
    • "Writer Daniel Cerone said ..." confusing whether this is the novel writer or the screenplay writer.
      • done
    • Why isn't a season 5 mentioned in the table, albeit with TBA all the way across?
    • "Originally Aired in..." ->aired.
      • done
    • "DVD Release"->release.
      • done
    • No mention of DVD releases in the lead.
    • You mention recurring characters by actor name, but I can't find who plays the protagonist anywhere.
    • "1.1 million American viewers" presumably you mean viewers in America, not necessarily American nationality.
      • done
  • Deal with those and I'll review the episode synopses as I'm a little pushed for time now. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:52, 28 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Episode synopses
  • "...to mysterious murder scenes ..." just murder scenes - the mystery follows and is evident for the lack of blood.
  • "and a personal message" what personal message?
  • Does Dexter work for just the Police Department or for the Homicide Department which Debra is trying to join?
  • Not sure why we need to link "ice rink".
  • " Here, Dexter selects his next murder victim" - where's "Here" in this case?
  • "..is over-committed..." - could you explain this to me?
  • Why is the killer suddenly "irritated"?
  • "Rita takes drastic steps " tell it how it is - does she kill it? If so, say so, we're not trying to sell the show at this point.
  • "Ice Truck victim" do you mean "Ice Truck Killer victim"?
  • "nd decides to kill both of them. Afterwards, he dumps their bodies" - well, he didn't just decide, he actually did, so perhaps just "and kills them both."
  • "described Jesus " - as in the Jesus or a character called Jesus?
  • "strange suicide" what made it strange?
  • "consummating it." consummating what? Presumably their relationship?
  • "who he was told had died thirty years ago, has recently died" - reads poorly.
  • "gathers its contents" of the whole house?
  • "but is gripped by" - "but he is gripped by"
  • Doakes or Sgt. Doakes? After you've said he's a Sgt (the first time) I think just Doakes is fine.
  • "a real nightmare before Christmas" again, a little too much like trying to sell the show. Stick to the facts.
  • "Season premiere" is linked on the second occasion.
  • " "The Ice Truck Killer's" -> the Ice Truck Killer's (i.e. not capital T and no need for the quotations any more - you didn't use them after the first use in season 1 synopses).
  • "Miami Police Department" or "Miami Metro Police Department"?
  • "played by Judith Scott" all the other instances you would have just written (Judith Scott) after the character's name.
  • "eventually destroys the videotape" quite a leap from finding out he was filmed to discovering it and destroying it..
  • "Dexter questions the inclusiveness of Harry's code when realizes"... word missing here?
  • Episode 36 is redlinked, none of the others are, why?
  • MOS says consistent date formats in references. Currently you have a mix of ISO and human-readable.

The Rambling Man (talk) 11:41, 1 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comment
  • Per WP:RED I'd say all episode names without an article should still be linked. I know this was submitted before the "redlink" rule was put back in so it's may not subject to the guideline of 1/3, but they should still be linked - unless deemed not notable enough to get a wikipedia article?  MPJ-DK  (No Drama) Talk  10:31, 2 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Replies gimme time till next weekend and I'll fix all of these issues. The redlink is because I think the episode deserves an article; all tge other episodes are probably less notable they probably won't get articles soon. Nergaal (talk) 19:57, 2 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
    • Technically you're going to overrun the nomination by quite a long way... would you prefer to take this offline and go for a fourth run? I think, as long as you are actively editing, the nomination can remain open, but if nothing's going to be done for a while, it may be better for us to restart when you're done? Just thinking out loud... The Rambling Man (talk) 20:00, 2 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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