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- I presume that available data is very patchy and that's why, for example, there's nothing at all listed for 1998 or 1999? I would definitely make this much clearer early on in the article, rather than leave readers to think "hang on, where's half the information?"....... -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 09:30, 18 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- @ChrisTheDude: Thank you for pointing this out, I have included something in the lead. Is this okay? Greets;Cartoon network freak (talk) 10:05, 18 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- More comments
- "Over the years, it was compiled by broadcast monitoring services Body M Production A-V and Media Forest" - does this mean that it was compiled by one organisation at one time and the other one at a different time? Or does it mean that it was compiled by both for all of its existence? If so, get rid of the first three words.
- It was first compiled by Body and then by Media Forest. I think I adjusted the language now.
- "After its launch in 1995, the chart was announced during a two-hour radio show in 1998" - why just 1998? Was that the only year in which it was announced on the radio? How was it announced for the rest of its existence?
- I restructured things, hope it's clearer now.
- "It also gained notoriety, being featured" - I don't think "notoriety" is the word you want here. To be honest I would just say "It was also featured...."
- The chart was successful and had media portrayals in Romania (there's also a magazine report on that), but I agree this is a bit too much, so I have just removed the word.
- "Over its three-decade history" - in English, saying that something had a three-decade history means that it existed for at least thirty years. As this chart seems to have existed for only 17 years, the wording isn't appropriate.
- Done.
- "150 documented singles have reached" => "150 documented singles reached"
- Done.
- "has spent 12 weeks at the summit" => "spent 12 weeks at the summit"7
- Done
- "longer than any other song" - how do you know this for sure if records are incomplete?
- The things is... everything in this article is based on just the things that I gotted from research. Of course everything is incomplete, but everything searchable has been addressed. I already say "documented" a lot, I think the user can assume that, if we had more archives, things would look different.
- "Since the chart's inauguration," - by definition, nobody can have reached number one before the chart's inauguration, so these words are redundant
- Done.
- "multiple artists have reached number one" => "multiple artists reached number one"
- Done.
- Photo caption: "being the song with the most documented weeks at number one in the chart's history." => "making it the song with the most documented weeks at number one in the chart's history."
- Done
- Other photo captions: I don't think you need to mention when the picture was taken unless it was many years before or after the thing that the caption refers to (to indicate that the person probably looked different at the time). So, for example, I don't think you need to note that the picture of Busta Rhymes was taken in 2002 when talking about something he did in 2003......
- Done, removed some.
- "and further topped the chart with "Where Is the Love?"." => "and also topped the chart with "Where Is the Love?"."
- Done.
- "topped 2011 year-end chart." => "topped the 2011 year-end chart."
- Done.
- "The chart was founded in 1995, but had another name until 1996" - it seems odd that this fact is only mentioned in a footnote, and equally odd that you don't say what the other name was........
- I would really love to mention the name, but unfortunately it isn't available. However, while I though about it, I think it isn't that much of a too-notable fact for it to be included here, so I removed it. I also restructured things a bit. Does it look better now?.
- "In some cases, the inscriptions solely reflect the maximum amount of weeks at number one available." - "inscriptions" definitely isn't the right word here and the rest doesn't seem to make sense. Could you confirm what it means? Does it mean that a song might not have spent as many weeks at number one as are shown here? Or that it might have spent more?
- I want to say that the weeks listed are in cases (especially for those where we lack archives) not the total amount of weeks at number one, but rather the found/available amount of weeks at number one. I may indeed sound weird, do you have an suggestion on how to rewrite.
- I would suggest "In some cases, data is incomplete and songs may have spent more weeks at number one than shown" -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:19, 19 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- @ChrisTheDude: Thank you very much for your comments, I have solved several on them. I ask for advice on some, though. All the best; Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:05, 18 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- @ChrisTheDude: Done that as well now. Cartoon network freak (talk) 10:47, 19 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
@ChrisTheDude: Not to bother you, but have your concerns actually been solved? If you're busy, feel free to disregard. Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 19:38, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Capped everything above, will have a second look tomorrow...... -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 20:25, 22 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- "Start in 2004" => "Starting in 2004"
- "unupdated" is not a word. To be honest, I am not sure that sentence is even needed, I think the previous sentence covers it.
- We have a lot of archives of the RT100 website, for example in 2009, but the chart table remains frozen because it hadn't been updated there. But I understand your point; I have instead added "lacks usable archives" in the previous sentence and remove the one in question.
- "the youngest artist ever to attain a number-one in a country" - firstly, "number one" should not have a hyphen. Also, "in a country" isn't the right wording because of course it happened in a country, where else would it happen? ;-) I think what you mean is "the youngest artist ever to attain a number one in any country"
- Ahaha, thank you very much for the help, I changed up the sentence now.
- @ChrisTheDude: Thank you very much for your comments, I have solved them. Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 19:15, 23 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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