;Comments from Harrias talk
- Mirroring Giants2008's first comment, I would go further: "A fast bowler who represented his country between 1989 and 2003, Younis is one of the greatest right-arm bowlers in the history of world cricket." Is such a strong claim that it think some inline attribution is required, and probably a slight weakening such as: "Younis is generally considered one of the greatest right-arm bowlers to have played cricket."
- I'm curious why you've chosen to use "Younis" thoughout the article, rather than "Waqar", which is more common in journalistic pieces written about him?
- "He has went on to take.." – Remove the word "has".
- "Making his One Day International (ODI) debut in October 1989, against West Indies in Sharjah." – This sentence doesn't make any sense: it appears to have a dangling modifier, and is in the wrong tense entirely. I can appreciate that you are probably trying to avoid repitition from the first paragraph, but this isn't an alternative!
- In the Test paragraph, all the grounds and locations are linked: in the second paragraph, the "Sharjah" isn't linked at all, let alone mention of it being in the UAE! Also, on the first usage, there is no definite article ("in Sharjah") while on the second usage there is: ("at the Sharjah"). Try to be consistent in whether you apply it or not.
- "He made a hat-trick.." – possibly change to "He achieved a hat-trick.."
- Per MOS:NUM, single digit numbers should be written as words when possible.
- "As of February 2012, he is thirteenth overall among all-time Test five-wicket haul takers, and first in the ODI list." – perhaps change the last bit of this to ".., and top of the equivalent ODI list."
- Why have you included a dagger for wicket-keepers in the Batsmen column? There is nothing to specify whether the play was a bowler or a specialist batsman, I can't see what this adds?
- Also, all of the symbols you use should be Image insertion templates per WP:NOSYMBOLS. This certainly applies to the "spades" symbol, and to the dagger to if you keep it.
- In your table, Headingley links to the area of Leeds, it should link to Headingley Stadium; check for any other similar occurences.
- When the table sorts by wickets, I would expect it to have a secondary sort by runs conceded, so that his best performances show above his not so good ones. (eg. 6/34 would be above 6/78) List of international cricket five-wicket hauls by Ian Botham is an example of this in action.
- Make the batsmen column unsortable: it offers nothing at all being able to sort by that. Harrias talk 21:37, 28 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed. Yes, "Waqar" is more common, especially in Asia. ZiaKhan 00:08, 25 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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