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The list was promoted by Giants2008 17:09, 16 October 2012 [1].

List of threatened fauna of Michigan

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Nominator(s): Dana boomer (talk) 00:28, 5 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'm renominating this list (now that I have a bit more free time!) after, hopefully, addressing the issues raised in the last review. The main issue last time was the number of red links - since that concern was raised, I have significantly decreased the prevalence of red links. I do plan to continue working on this issue, but at this point, I think that the number is low enough to not be a problem. As far as I know, the other issues raised in the review were addressed. Thanks in advance for your comments, Dana boomer (talk) 00:28, 5 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from NapHit (talk) 13:53, 8 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • Could link freshwater mussels and snails in lead?
  • "populations in Michigan." not sure we need in Michigan here, seeing as we've already established this about species in Michigan
  • Images could do with alt text
  • There are minimal redlinks so don't think this is an issue this time around
  • ref 3 needs the parameter |format=PDF adding

NapHit (talk) 12:09, 5 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comments, NapHit! I believe I have addressed all of your concerns; please let me know if there is anything else. Dana boomer (talk) 15:28, 5 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments – I sympathise with your red-linking problems, I've had to write loads of stubs for insects and plants in my articles on the individual reserves in the Norfolk SSSI. Your article looks pretty sound, just some quibbles/requests for clarification Jimfbleak - talk to me? 06:59, 6 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  • part of fauna of the United States — part of the fauna ?
  • Done. - DB
  • The federal status descriptions have "listed…", the state status descriptions don't. Is there a reason for this?
  • I was originally thinking it was necessary to distinguish listed species from candidate species, but then realized that the fact that they're listed (rather than candidate) is implied with Federal status = endangered/threatened. So, basically, I hadn't thought it through. Now that I have, I've removed the "listed"s. - DB
  • I'd expect vertebrate classes to be in the order mammals-birds-reptiles-amphibians-fish, any reason for your ordering?
  • This is the way it was ordered when I started?? Really, no reason other than not having a good reason to change the ordering from what it was when I began working on the list. If you would prefer it in the order you give above, I have no problem changing it - it's a simple fix. - DB
  • Each insect order is given a subsection, but the mollusc groups each have a full section, is there a reason?
  • This is the way they were split in the main reference I used. Do you think that some of the insect groups should be combined, or the mollusc group separated? - DB
  • Some of your intros have a redundant "of these" or "of them"
  • I've taken a run through the intros and made some changes - have I addressed your concern? - DB
  • I don't think your link for cricket goes where you intended

Support Comments – Looks pretty good to me; I have minor nitpicks that should be easy to fix. Sasata (talk) 21:28, 7 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  • I think the lead sentence should link endangered and threatened species. Unfortunately, species of special concern is currently a dab and not helpful.
  • possibly useful links: natural heritage, subspecies, extinct
  • "federally-listed" don't hyphenate compound adjectives with -ly words, per WP:HYPHEN (check throughout article)
  • caption: "A spotted turtle, a threatened species in Michigan" sounds a bit awkward (other instances too)
  • "One further species is listed as extinct in Michigan" further -> additional (check for other instances too)
  • "A further nine species which previously had" which->that
  • is it necessary to have tables with a single row sortable?
  • why do some of the snails and fingernail/pea clams have two binomials listed?
  • why are some pea clams "peaclams" (without a space)
  • caption: "A European pea clam, a species of special concern in Michigan" Since there's more than 1 clam in the picture, how about modifying to "The European pea clam is a species of special concern in Michigan"
Resolved comments from The Rambling Man (talk) 07:43, 10 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • Nice to see the list back at FLC.
  • "The list was last updated in 2009,[2] and was the sixth iteration of the listing" maybe "The list was last updated in 2009 to its sixth iteration" to avoid list and listing in one short sentence?
  • "The state also recognizes species of special concern, are not protected under the Act" I think there's a word missing here?
  • "is done by " never keen on "done", perhaps "is undertaken by"?
  • Check that all image captions which are complete sentences have a period.
  • "fox snake" has a space but "watersnake" doesn't. Nor "ratsnake". Is there any reason here?
  • "Critical Habitat" suddenly sneaks in. Is that worth a quick note to say what it means?
  • "of endangered fish" shouldn't that be "threatened fish"?
  • "12 are listed as species of special concern, two as" ... MOSNUM applies here, so "Twelve..."

The Rambling Man (talk) 12:18, 9 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, TRM! I believe I have addressed all of your comments; please let me know if there is anything I missed. Dana boomer (talk) 18:45, 9 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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