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The list was promoted by Scorpion0422 22:54, 6 June 2009 [1].

Manager of the Year Award

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Nominator(s): KV5 (Talk • Phils) 19:50, 25 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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Another baseball award-related list. Comments will be addressed by me. Cheers. KV5 (Talk • Phils) 19:50, 25 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Giants2008
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  • "while leading a team who finished outside the top two spots in their division". "who" → "that". Also change "their" to "its" for tense purposes.
  • Buck Showalter is linked twice in the lead.
  • I find the beginning of the third paragraph to be misleading, because the wild card playoff berth has only existed since 1994. Therefore, second-place teams before then couldn't make the playoffs.
  • Consider moving the photos of National League managers next to the NL list.
  • Might be a good idea to add a note for the 1996 AL Manager of the Year, saying that Oates and Torre tied in the voting. In fact, that might be worthy of mention in the lead.
  • The record columns are not sorting properly.

Support, all issues resolved. Dabomb87 (talk) 14:04, 5 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved issues, Dabomb87 (talk)
Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)
  • "The award is voted on by 28 members of the Baseball Writers Association of America (BBWAA)." The award, or the awardee?
  • "managers of the league-leading Yankees" Explain what "league-leading" means here (wins, I assume).
  • "Number of wins by managers who have won the award multiple times"-->Number of wins (at that point) by managers who have won the award multiple times
  • Not essential, but I think the tables would look better centered, at least the "Year" and "Record" column.

Sources look good. Dabomb87 (talk) 18:18, 31 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments
  • Don't use parentheses in the captions. Say "Joe Maddon, 2008 AL Manager of the Year" or other.
  • Parentheses are to set text apart from others, usually subsidiary and less important. There's nothing inherently wrong with it, but they signify the parenthetical text to be excess. Just being set off by a comma keeps that info important. Parentheses signify "John Maddon (Oh, and by the way, he was 2008 Al Manager of the Year)", whereas a comma says, "This is John Maddon, and he was 2008 AL Manager of the year". Punctuation really does make a difference.
  • According to the article you link to, "parentheses … contain material that could be omitted without destroying or altering the meaning of a sentence … [and] to add supplementary information". Noting when they won is redundant to the table; it's purely supplemental and merely a helpful reference. Therefore, it can be omitted without destroying or altering the meaning. KV5 (Talk • Phils) 23:55, 3 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • As I said, the parentheses aren't wrong, but a single comma is much cleaner.
  • I'd rather the formula for the scoring be in the lead, not a note. Also, don't make it mathy, just say 5 points for first place, 3 points for second, and 1 point for third.
  • The formula was removed from the lead because it broke up the prose. Since it is a formula, it's mathematical by nature, which is why it's shown as such. The same thing is done with ERA and other elements that require calculation in other baseball lists. KV5 (Talk • Phils) 16:18, 3 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Well I don't think you really need to include a formula at all and especially not in that formatting. Neither reference given does it that way: one is 5-3-1, and the other gives it in plain words. "five points for first-place votes, three points for second-place votes, and one point for third-place votes." is a lot simpler than "The formula used to calculate the final scores is Score = 5F + 3S + T, where F is the number of first place votes, S is second place votes, and T is third place votes." People really don't want some math formula; you're just making it more complicated. I think that info is vital to the text and shouldn't be a note; honestly, when I first read it I wondered how the score was tabulated - it just went from voting to the highest score without any indication of why. When I noticed the note, I was like "Oh, why the heck didn't he just say it up there?" Reywas92Talk 21:42, 3 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • I didn't say to copy the references! But that doesn't mean it hs to be more complicated. Isn't it simpler to just tell them, not have a separate note for an excessive formula?Reywas92Talk 02:43, 4 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Regarding your last edit, making the above changes before consensus is reached isn't cool. That's why we are discussing here, to make a decision. This isn't the place to make unilateral changes. KV5 (Talk • Phils) 11:38, 4 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I think everything else looks great. Reywas92Talk 16:10, 3 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Truco

Review by Truco (talk · contribs)

Lead
  • 'Lou Piniella won 116 games with the Seattle Mariners in 2001,[2] the most by a winning manager, and Joe Torre won 114 with the New York Yankees in 1998.' -- The 'and' before Torre should be a while
  • Actually, that's incorrect. It took me some time to break myself of that habit, but I've tried my best, thanks to Dabomb87 catching it every time I do it. KV5 (Talk • Phils) 23:56, 4 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Truco, "while" is usually used to signify contrast. Here, there is no particular contradiction or difference between the two bits of information, so "and" is more appropriate. Dabomb87 (talk) 00:37, 5 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • 'Three National League managers, including Dusty Baker, Whitey Herzog, and Larry Dierker, have exceeded the century mark as well.' 1)Reword to Three National League managers (Dusty Baker, Whitey Herzog, and Larry Dierker) have exceeded the century mark as well. 2)What is the century mark?
  • 'Baker's San Francisco Giants won 103 games in 1993;[6] Dierker's 1998 Houston Astros won 102 and Herzog led the Cardinals to 101 wins in the award's third season' -- What is meant by 'award's third season'? Like the third year the award was given out?
  • 'In 1991, Bobby Cox became the first manager to win the award in both leagues, winning with the Atlanta Braves and having previously won with the Toronto Blue Jays in 1985.' -- It would help the reader if they knew which team belonged to what league here.
  • Easily discovered by clicking on the links to the teams. It's clear that they are in different leagues from the wording; I don't know that it's terribly important which team is in which league, and the table tells the reader that. KV5 (Talk • Phils) 23:56, 4 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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Oh okay.
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