| ;Comments from Harrias talk
Firstly, I would suggest that as you don't appear to have reviewed anyone else's nominations in the last six months, a less aggressive attitude would be in order. No-one here is getting paid to do these reviews, it is all voluntary, so it might be worth being nice to those you want to do something for you.
- Done "The career statistics of Russian professional tennis player Mikhail Youzhny features, to date, nine ATP singles titles, and nine ATP doubles titles." As an introduction this sounds a little bit too much like "This is a list of..." I would suggest rewriting it to something like: "Mikhail Youzhny is a Russian professional tennis player who has won nine ATP singles titles, and nine ATP doubles titles in his career to date."
- Done "Youzhny had a fairly successful junior career, reaching a career high junior ranking of world no. 20 in early 2000." Fairly successful according to who? The reference is merely a statistic page, which implies the article is providing editorial comment. For one thing, what one person considers fairly successful, another might consider unsuccessful. I would suggest sticking to the facts, unless there is an article which comments on his junior career.
- Done Four sentences in the second paragraph state "in 1999"; I would suggest trying to merge these, and vary the prose by using phrases such as "in the same year".
- done "and would go on to win" can be simply written as "and he won". Similarly later, "Youzhny would go on to win his first" should be "Youzhny won his first"
- done "He is one of the few active players..." While the source does state that he has reached the QF of all the grand slams, I can't see where it mentions that it has been achieved by very few active players? I might be missing it though?
- done "While chiefly a single player, .." I'm not an expert on tennis, but should this be "singles player" rather than "single player"?
- done "Currently, Youzhny has won over 400 matches, trailing Russian players Nikolay Davydenko and Yevgeny Kafelnikov in match wins." While I'm pretty sure that I know you mean he has the third most wins of a Russian player, behind those two, this could be read as meaning he has the third most wins of any player, behind those two Russians, so it would be worth tightening the language to make the meaning clear.
- done Why is there a full-stop after all the numbers in the "No." and "Rank" column: this seems unnecessary to me, as none of the other columns have full-stops.
- The partner and opponent columns should sort by the players surname, not by the flag and then the first name. Also, MOS:FLAG suggests that "In lists or tables, flag icons may be relevant when the nationality of different subjects is pertinent to the purpose of the list or table itself." In this case, I don't think the nationality of the player is at all relevant to the overall list. Similarly, is a flag does have to be used, the section on "Accompany flags with country names" is relevant, and should be adhered to.
- Its organized, and the name order is the exact same one found at the ATP.. When It comes to the removal of flags, I think this should be discussed at the Tennis WikiProject, this career statistics list controversial enough already... --TIAYN (talk) 10:44, 3 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Simply put, those columns must be sortable by the player's surname. How that is achieved, I don't mind. As to the flags, I know Wikipedia seems to be obsessed with them, and most moves to adhere to the MOS are fought against, but at the end of the day, this is a review to achieve featured status, and so the article has to adhere to the MOS. Harrias talk 12:53, 12 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- (removed sortability) In the "Top 10 wins" the use of merged rows for the years breaks the sortability. Harrias talk 10:21, 3 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- He is not responding. --TIAYN (talk) 11:26, 28 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- He has a wife who is 38 weeks pregnant, a job interview next week and a sprained ankle. He will get back to this when he can. Harrias talk 12:38, 28 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- I think you may have misunderstood me, I've responded at you're talk page. --TIAYN (talk) 12:52, 28 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks, no offence taken really, I'm quite tired at the moment, and snapped a little. I'll try and have a good look at this tomorrow morning. Feel free to keep nudging me about it if I don't! Take care, Harrias talk 15:39, 28 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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