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Wales national football team results 1900–1914

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Wales national football team results 1900–1914 (edit | talk | history | protect | delete | links | watch | logs | views)

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Nominator(s): Kosack (talk) 09:10, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hot on the heels of the first list comes the next page. I've incorporated the comments from the previous FLC to hopefully make this one more streamlined. I look forward to any comments. Kosack (talk) 09:10, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments
  • "recording two second place finishes" - I would say there should be a hyphen in "second-place"
  • "However, this was followed" - don't think a sentence should start with "however", so redo as "This was followed, however"
  • "A second place finish in the 1908–09 championship was the highest placed finish" - I think both "second-place" and "highest-placed" need hyphens
  • "In the remaining 33 fixtures, Wales drew 11 and lost 23" 11 + 23 !=33
  • Think that's it from me..... -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 10:32, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
@ChrisTheDude: Thanks for the review, I've amended all of the points above. Kosack (talk) 11:32, 14 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Source review - Pass

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Doing now Aza24 (talk) 22:04, 16 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • Minimal sources: No issues in formatting or reliability. I changed the "Bibliography" header to "General" since "Bibliography" would be an umbrella term used for the section heading (in place of "References" for example). Pass for source review. Aza24 (talk) 22:11, 16 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from TRM

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Resolved comments from The Rambling Man (Hands! Face! Space!!!!) 12:15, 7 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
*Put (FAW) after Football Association of Wales.
  • "within the first seven years. Their victory came in the 1906–07 tournament in " I would ditch "within the first seven years. Their victory came" as it's all unnecessary verbiage.
  • "A second-place finish in the 1908–09 championship was the highest-placed finish" finish, finish.
  • Wasn't Tynecastle Stadium known as Tynecastle Park back then?
    It seems Park is the correct name either way, I'm not sure where I got stadium from! Kosack (talk) 18:46, 6 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • St James Park, Newcastle -> St James' Park, Newcastle.
  • I'm not mad keen on having different targets for each edition of the British Home Championship but all piped to "British Home Championship".
  • "Grosvenor Park" not notable enough for an article, despite it hosting an international football match?
    There is a link for Grosvenor Park, but it's redirected back to Lisburn Distillery F.C.. I've added that in. Kosack (talk) 18:46, 6 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Similar for "Penrhyn Park"?
    Penrhyn Park is the name given to he location, but it was really just a makeshift field in the grounds of Penrhyn Castle. I'm not really sure if there's really a chance of it getting an article. Kosack (talk) 18:46, 6 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

That's all I have, probably claiming WikiCup points (for what it's worth nowadays!) for this, cheers. The Rambling Man (Hands! Face! Space!!!!) 13:39, 5 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Thanks for taking a look, I've addressed all of the comments above. Kosack (talk) 18:46, 6 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from HawkAussie

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Resolved comments from HawkAussie
Two slight errors I picked up while reading the prose
  • ...Wales achieved after this during the time period - A slight rewording here so it flows better. - Reworded
  • ...first victory over the Scots at the 30th attempt. - This might be just me but what about changing to 'over Scotland'.

Other than that I think it might look good here for a FL. HawkAussie (talk) 01:11, 7 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • I was deliberately trying to avoid using Scotland again so to avoid quick repetition as it's used immediately beforehand. I've changed to "the latter" now to hopefully make it sound better. Both points addressed @HawkAussie:, thanks for taking a look. Kosack (talk) 06:19, 7 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Support My thoughts have been addressed and I think this looks good to go. HawkAussie (talk) 12:29, 7 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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