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I've listed this article for peer review because I've added 31 references and think that it maybe worthy for good article status or featured list status I'm not sure which, as the article in my opinion is ambigious as in whether it is a list or not, so please can some one clarify. So I want general feedback on what else if anything improves the article
Thanks, KnowIG (talk) 01:28, 7 January 2011 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: The article does appear to be a cross between an article and a list. My inclination would be to develop it as an article by adding a good deal more text. Here are some suggestions (mostly in the form of questions) about text expansion and also about prose and Manual of style issues.
- 2009 Sony Ericsson Open, a GA-level article about tennis, might be a useful model to look at for possible kinds of text expansion.
- I would consider creating a more elaborate infobox that includes more information and possibly an image.
- The caption on the one existing image is misleading since Robredo did not win the cup by himself.
- Would it be worthwhile to add some background information about the players who took part in the tournament?
- The existing text needs copyediting. For example, the word "they" in the second sentence of the second paragraph seems to refer to "nations" in the first sentence of the second paragraph, when it actually refers to "teams". Further down, "Whilst Kazakhstan qualified for the event by winning the Asian Hopman Cup" is not a complete sentence, and "whilst" is archaic. After making other changes, especially adding more text, you might seek copyediting help via WP:GOCE#REQ.
- Could the lead include details about Perth, the venue for the matches, the courts, the referees, the audience? Should it include the span of the tournament rather than just the starting date? Should the names of the winning pair be included? Why was Slovakia not invited? How did teams other than Kazakhstan qualify? Can you provide background on the Hopman Cup? How did it get started? Is it always held in Perth? Where did the "Hopman" part of the name come from? Are the players professionals or amateurs? If professional, how are they rewarded for playing or for winning? Were the matches televised? How many people attended, and how many (if any) watched on TV? In the world of tennis, how important is the Hopman Cup? What kind of tournament is this, singles, doubles, or what?
- Should the "Asian Hopman Cup" be briefly explained? Who plays in it?
- Should "Seeds" be briefly explained? Why were there only four and not eight, for example?
- In the "Australia vs. Romania" table, it appears that two women play a singles match, two men play a singles match, and then two couples play a doubles match. Should text be added to make this more clear? The columns need labels. What do 1, 2, and 3 in the first row of this table stand for? What is the meaning of numbers like 62? How is it possible to tell which team, Australia or Romania, won by looking at the table?
- What does "retired" mean in the "Spain vs. Romania" table?
- Make sure that all of the sources meet the WP:RS guidelines. For example, what makes tennisphilia.com a reliable source? It appears to be a personal blog, labeled a "tennis blog from a long-time tennis-philiac".
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at WP:PR; that is where I found this one. I don't usually watch the PR archives or check corrections or changes. If my comments are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth (talk) 00:19, 11 January 2011 (UTC)