Wikipedia:Peer review/American Life/archive1

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I've listed this article for peer review because… I have already fixed the problem of sources and I have arranged the tables

Thanks, TbhotchTalk2 Me 07:22, 15 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by DragonZero

Well my grammars not really good but here are things that sound strange to me.

  • The second paragraph in the lead, using But to start a sentence sound strange, maybe it should be combined.

  Done

  • Album Information section.
"Is often considered a concept album with its recurring themes of the American Dream and materialism." Sentence seems fishy.
"Madonna started recording the album in 2002, after filming the movie Swept Away. While recording the album in London, England, she also worked on other projects, such as her West-End appearance in the play, Up For Grabs, and filming her cameo-appearance in the James Bond film Die Another Day." Seems irrevalent to the album itself.

  Done

  • Downloads sections
"It is unknown who hacked the website, although many investigations lead that the hacking was a result after Madonna leaked faked song titles, as it was a prank to insult Madonna's way of counter-attacking illegal downloads." Original Research, though obvious.

  Done

  • Title and Cover

"According to unconfirmed reports, the photo shoot cost 415,000 U.S Dollars."- Meaning no source?

  Done

  • Reception
"received mixed or average reviews", sound strange and not certain.

  Done

"At the end of the video is shown, then President George W. Bush." Grammar.

  Done

  • Overall
Seems like it needs a copy edit, some refs need to be placed in some places. And the reference dates should be changed to month, day, year. DragonZero (talk · contribs) 09:15, 20 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  1. The certifications table should be modified as per List of music recording sales certifications. See The Fame for the modification. --Legolas (talk2me) 07:51, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  Done

  1. The lead needs to conform to WP:LEAD. --Legolas (talk2me) 07:51, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  Doing...   Done (I guess) TbhotchTalk2 Me 23:29, 22 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]