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This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I want to hear others' opinions about this article, so I can improve it.
Thanks, Yerevanci (talk) 18:23, 20 June 2012 (UTC)
Comments
- See WP:LEAD for recommendations on numbers of paragraphs for this length of article.
- "In 1912-1913" needs to be an en-dash here per WP:DASH.
- "Andranik in Paris, 1921." no full stop required in this caption as it's not a complete sentence. Check all other captions.
- "which was about to wipe off Armenia from the face of the Earth." true as it may be, this is a somewhat emotive way of putting it. Try to keep the tone neutral.
- "Andranik combated in " -> "Andranik fought in "
- "and died 5 years " 5->five.
- Avoid squashing text between images/infobox etc.
- Some of the early parts of Early life appear unreferenced.
- "which he later leaves" -> "which he would later leave"
- "first name - even " en-dash, not hyphen.
- "gave a signal to the hidden fedayees......" then what?
- Don't overlink articles, e.g. you link Macedonian-Adrianopolitan militia twice in quick succession.
- Early parts of Life in exile appear unreferenced.
- Also, consider merging the first couple of short paras.
- "The New York Times reported," -> "The New York Times reported,"
- Legacy in Armenia section is unreferenced.
- The list of quotes is, well, mildly interesting but the article would be better served by integrating some of these quotes into the main article to provide a good context.
- "Avetis Aharonyan, [48]" (and all the others), no comma needed, not space between the name and the ref.
- Online sources should have publishers, authors (where possible), dates of publication (where possible) and access dates.