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I request this article for peer review. What improvements should I make? 202.40.210.244 02:30, 5 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

  • Seems pretty well written and structured, so it's on its way, but not ready for FAC yet, if that is your goal. 1) It's not clear the article is verifiable or that any references have been used in writing the article. If they have, it should be made clear by moving those sources that have been used to a References section and those that have not somewhere else. If no sources have been used, then some need to be obtained and consulted. Certainly five or more high quality sources would be needed for a FA. 2) Triva sections are highly frowned upon for FA's. The facts in them should either be worked in wherever they are appropriate, or simply removed if they are not important enough. Quotations are similar, though not considered quite as poor form if I'm reading the consensus correctly. 3) The cabinet list should probably be moved off to it's own list article and replaced with a discussion of the cabinet and it's prominent members and other important facts about the cabinet. Otherwise I don't know enough about the topic to comment on the material. - Taxman Talk 17:23, 5 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
  • Some comments of mine -- I hope they shall help:
    • "Dr." is not used in this case in English. That's Germish.
    • "Ungela" Provide standard phonetic signs. This is not the correct pronunciation.
    • "The coalition was formed after two months of negotiations following the 2005 federal election." I think this is a too detailed information for the lead. Will be forgotten in some months.
    • The lead should mention that she has previously been minister within Kohl's cabinet.
    • "GDR" should be written out.
    • "Demokratischer Aufbruch" should be translated
    • "According to an article in Der Spiegel" is not precise enough. The publication date and the content of the article should be made clear. Why not a quote?
    • "Speaking near-perfect English" is pro-Merkel POV.
    • The whole paragraph beginning with "According to an article in Der Spiegel" is POV if the exact statement from Der Spiegel is not made clearer.
  • Vb 12:44, 6 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]
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