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Arthur Ernest Percival

I would appreciate your comments on how to improve this article, in particular to enhance the formating of the pictures, if there is too much or too little information in any of the sections and if anyone has any suggestion for further pictures to be included (particularly for the Between the Wars section) Thank youNickhk 14:43, 1 February 2006 (UTC)Nickhk

Great work on transforming this article! The intro' needs to be at least two paragraphs, and I'd like to see more detail on his early life and his time as a captive. Also, Brevet Lieutenant-Colonel of the Cheshire Regiment in 1959? Was he actually serving in the Cheshire Regiment, or was that an honorary position? It does need clarification. And perhaps some mention should be made of Brig. Alfred James MacGregor Percival, assuming he's a relative, who was honorary colonel of the Cheshire Regiment from 1992 to 1999. Also, the article does need inline citations. Again, great work! SoLando (Talk) 17:30, 1 February 2006 (UTC)

I believe Brig. Alfred James MacGregor Percival, known as James, is the son (source my father in law who is in the army!). I am also a little confused by the "brevet" appointment as I have only really heard it used in relation to temporary postings in the first world war. I will see what I can find; I'll also look for more info on the early years and and captivity but i cant find much on these so if anyone has any sources pleae let me know Nickhk

I can confirm Brig AG Mac Percival was his son, having served with him. The Brevet title has me confused. I understood it was given to a select band of Lt Cols who had been marked out for future accelerated promotion.

A minor stylistic peeve, too many sentences start with "Percival was...", "Percival became..." etc. A bit more variation would be good. -- Миборовский ^{U|T|C|M|E|Chugoku Banzai!} 23:50, 1 February 2006 (UTC)

A small request: might you be able to try out {{Infobox Military Person}} on this article? The feedback from using it on something more developed would be quite helpful towards fixing any remaining issues with it. —Kirill Lokshin 16:40, 4 February 2006 (UTC)