Wikipedia:Peer review/Attraction to disability/archive1

Attraction to disability

Please comment on the content, length, verification, language, and relevance of this page. Please give suggestions for revision, renaming or? By the way, I'm not the original author, and this page has been up for some time. Altairah 03:44, 26 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

There's no doubt that this is very long; brevity is... wit, don't forget. People coming here would be looking for a simple overview. If necessary, create other pages for more specific components. More importantly, though your sources list is decent, there are no in-line citations. This article won't go far without them. As for the title, unless there is a more scientific word, this title seems fine to me. Your use of copyrighted images will almost certainly be brought into question, however. -Midnightdreary 19:17, 2 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Midnightdreary, Thanks for the feed back. I'm not sure whether to shorten or add citations first, it's a doozy. I just edited my original peer review request, as I realized that this is an unusual circumstance. I'm not the original author looking for feedback on a new article, I'm an editor considering what changes are needed for a major revision. I'm reading the "fair use" policy to determine if any of the images used comply. Thanks!. Altairah 19:43, 2 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I'd suggest starting with the citations - that's essential to get any article up to good status. It's gonna be tough if you're not the person who originally added that reference list. Try leaving messages on talk pages for the users that added them if you need to. While you're going about citing things, you may find better ways of wording things and compact a few sentences. Either job is going to be tough... but best of luck. -Midnightdreary 23:56, 2 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I'd second that - you probably won't be able to find citations for some of the stuff, and then it can get cut out of the article. Also, the image captions could be better, and relate the picture more to the text, and justify why that picture is used in the article. Do only straight men have communities based around experiencing attraction to people with disabilities? You might ask for help from WP:SEX in general on this article. The lead will also need rewriting, it needs to be a summary of the whole article.-Malkinann 05:57, 7 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]