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I've listed this article for peer review because I hope to improve it as much as I can. I'm fairly inexperienced as an editor of Wikipedia articles.
Thanks, Farrtj (talk) 00:26, 28 May 2011 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Thanks for your interestin improving this article, here are some suggestions for improvement.
- The article has four major cleanup tags at the top - this is enough to disqualify it from peer review. The idea is that major issues have already been identified and should be addressed first.
- There is a toolbox on this PR page which finds 2 dab links
- Also finds 1 dead external link
- A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow. There are several featured articles that may be useful models at Category:FA-Class school articles
- The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. The fact that the campus is 50 acre is only in the lead.
- To get an idea how to expand the lead, my rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way. Please see WP:LEAD
- Per WP:CITE references come AFTER punctuation, and are usually at the end of a sentence or phrase
- Article needs more references, for example there are multiple citation needed tags and several paragraphs and sections with no sources at all
- My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
- Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
- It would be nice if more images could be added.
- Please make sure that the existing text includes no copyright violations, plagiarism, or close paraphrasing. For more information on this please see Wikipedia:Wikipedia_Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches. (This is a general warning given in all peer reviews, in view of previous problems that have risen over copyvios.)
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 11:58, 2 June 2011 (UTC)