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Big Trouble in Little China

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I've listed this article for peer review because a lot of work has gone into this article and I am looking for suggestions and contributions to help get it ready to be evaluated for GA status.

Thanks, J.D. (talk) 18:23, 19 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Finetooth comments: This is interesting, broad in coverage, and generally well-done. The prose could use some more polishing, and I've tried to make specific suggestions about particular sentences. I've noted a few Manual of Style issues. A few claims about things that are not common knowledge lack sources.

Lead

"Big Trouble in Little China (also known as John Carpenter's Big Trouble in Little China) is a 1986 American comedy/action film, directed by John Carpenter and stars Kurt Russell as truck driver Jack Burton who helps his friend Wang Chi (Dennis Dun) rescue Wang's green-eyed girlfriend (Suzee Pai) from bandits in San Francisco's Chinatown." - Too complex. Suggestion: "Big Trouble in Little China (also known as John Carpenter's Big Trouble in Little China) is a 1986 American comedy/action film directed by John Carpenter. It stars Kurt Russell as truck driver Jack Burton, who helps his friend Wang Chi (Dennis Dun) rescue Wang's green-eyed girlfriend (Suzee Pai) from bandits in San Francisco's Chinatown."

Fixed--J.D. (talk) 20:44, 25 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"Although originally envisioned as a Western set in the 1880s, screenwriter W. D. Richter was hired to rewrite the script... ". - Suggestion: "Although the film was originally envisioned as a Western set in the 1880s, screenwriter W. D. Richter was hired to rewrite the script... ".

Fixed--J.D. (talk) 20:44, 25 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"The studio hired Carpenter to direct the film, which fulfilled a long-standing desire to make a martial arts film, and rushed Big Trouble in Little China into production so that it would be released before a similarly themed Eddie Murphy film The Golden Child, which was slated to come out around the same time." - Too complex. Suggestion: "The studio hired Carpenter to direct the film and rushed Big Trouble in Little China into production so that it would be released before a similarly themed Eddie Murphy film, The Golden Child, which was slated to come out around the same time. The project fulfilled Carpenter's long-standing desire to make a martial arts film."

Fixed--J.D. (talk) 20:44, 25 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"It received critically mixed reviews which left Carpenter disillusioned with Hollywood and influencing his decision to become an independent filmmaker yet again." - Suggestion: "It received critically mixed reviews that left Carpenter disillusioned with Hollywood and influenced his decision to return to independent film-making."

Fixed--J.D. (talk) 20:44, 25 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Screenplay

"They had written a Western originally set in the 1880s with Jack Burton being a cowboy who rides into town." - "as a cowboy" rather than "being a cowboy"?

Fixed--J.D. (talk) 20:44, 25 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"The rapid-fire delivery of dialogue, especially between Jack Burton and Gracie Law, is an example of what the director is referring to." - This claim needs a source.

Fixed--J.D. (talk) 20:44, 25 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Casting

"Russell wasn’t that interested in... " - Delete "that"?

Fixed--J.D. (talk) 20:44, 25 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"he got a handle on the character... " - Slang. Suggestion: "he gained insight into the character... "

Fixed--J.D. (talk) 20:44, 25 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"and liked the notion of having “never played a hero who has so many faults." - Suggestion: "and liked the notion of playing "a hero who has so many faults."

Fixed--J.D. (talk) 20:44, 25 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Visual effects

"said that there were no difficulties with their workload and that Big Trouble was probably their favorite film at the time, with the exception of Ghostbusters." - Boss Films is an "it" rather than a "they". Suggestion: "said that there were no difficulties with the company's workload and that Big Trouble was probably its favorite film at the time, with the exception of Ghostbusters."

Fixed--J.D. (talk) 20:44, 25 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"It was shot with a special matting system... " - Should "matting system" be explained?

I have an article on the film's visual effects that I will incorporate some details and clarify.--J.D. (talk) 20:44, 25 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Soundtrack

A good rule of thumb is to source every paragraph, every unusual claim, every set of statistics, and every direct quote. The second paragraph of this section includes a lot of material that is not common knowledge, yet the paragraph is unsourced.

I am going to beef up this section with more info as it is pretty underdeveloped right now.--J.D. (talk) 20:44, 25 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

References to Chinese mysticism

The "citation needed" tag needs to be addressed.

Reaction

"grossed $2.7 million in its opening weekend" - WP:NBSP says in part, "Use a non-breaking space (also known as a hard space) to prevent the end-of-line displacement of elements that would be awkward at the beginning of a new line... " It specifically mentions construction like $2.7 million". I added a few nbsps to similar constructions earlier in the article, but these and others still need them.

Merchandise

"It was met by mixed critical reception. - Tighten to "Critical reception was mixed"?

Fixed--J.D. (talk) 20:44, 25 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"Big Trouble in Little China was released on a 2-Disc Special Edition DVD set... " - Should this be "a two-disc special edition DVD set"?
Wikilink Blu-ray Disc?

Fixed--J.D. (talk) 20:44, 25 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"Early release information has claimed that it includes an extended cut, this is untrue." - This claim needs attribution to a reliable source.

I deleted it as there is no credible claim of this to be the case.--J.D. (talk) 20:44, 25 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

References

The date formatting in the reference section should be internally consistent, either yyyy-mm-dd or m-d-y but not a mixture of the two.

I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog. That is where I found this one. Finetooth (talk) 19:41, 25 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

This is great! Thanks so much for taking the time to take a look at this article. You have given me a lot to work with.--J.D. (talk) 20:44, 25 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Images Just a quick note, you might want to add some Alt tags for the poster and screenshot in this article as well. Andrzejbanas (talk) 01:52, 3 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]