Wikipedia:Peer review/Bill O'Reilly (cricketer)/archive1

Bill O'Reilly (cricketer)

This article is the latest collaboration with User:The Rambling Man (TRM) and the Cricket WikiProject. It's extensively referenced, well illustrated and hopefully on track for FAC. As ever, TRM and I welcome all criticism, particularly if specific. --Dweller 11:36, 10 May 2007 (UTC)

• Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR _t 23:29, 10 May 2007 (UTC)

  All comments attended to except question mark of size and contents of lead, per WP:LEAD... The Rambling Man 11:04, 11 May 2007 (UTC)

• Added some stuff about the Bradman tensions. Well done guys! Angry ghost 01:35, 11 May 2007 (UTC)

  Thanks! The Rambling Man 06:59, 11 May 2007 (UTC)

• The captions of the pictures are kind of pov, so just needs a little re-captioning.--THUGCHILDz 03:51, 11 May 2007 (UTC)

  I've tamed the captions down a bit, thanks. The Rambling Man 06:59, 11 May 2007 (UTC)

• I assume it is open season, then? :) I have done a light copyedit, but this is looking very good. I have left a few hidden comments and questions inline in the text. -- ALoan (Talk) 12:15, 11 May 2007 (UTC)

  As always, many thanks for your time and effort...! The Rambling Man 12:17, 11 May 2007 (UTC)

• Few things I've noticed:

1: The following paragraph, is it a quote? "How was I to know that I was about to cross swords with the greatest cricketer that ever set foot on a cricket field ? ..." (cut it short to save space, it's the 4th paragraph in 'Youth and early career') If it is, it could do with quotation marks. Not sure of the source, though.

Yes, it is a quotation from him so I've added quotation marks. I don't really want to cut it down because it highlights the start of his "rivalry" with Bradman.... The Rambling Man 16:07, 11 May 2007 (UTC)

I meant cut it down on this page specifically, not the actual article. :) AllynJ 16:19, 11 May 2007 (UTC)

I've reduced it a bit, removed the imagery and stuck more with the confrontation, hope it's okay now. The Rambling Man 16:49, 11 May 2007 (UTC)

2: Ref 35 could do with accessdates via {{cite web}} (although this has been noted by ALoan I believe, and is currently captioned out).

I've hopefully used the suggested citations and made proper citewebs and distributed them correctly across this paragraph. I've also added a final sentence showing O'Reilly's deep-down respect for the Don. The Rambling Man 16:37, 11 May 2007 (UTC)

3: "Bradman later noted after their deaths that his team was much more united after their departure." - this suggests he noted something after he died, which doesn't make any sense. Was it written before he died and only discovered after? Was it after O'Reilly died but before Bradman died? I'm not sure.

I presume "their" refers to Fingleton and O'Reilly, as it does in the rest of the paragraph. JPD (talk) 16:40, 11 May 2007 (UTC)

Yeah, I don't like this sentence and I can't find a reasonable citation for it either so I'm removing it for the time being... The Rambling Man 16:43, 11 May 2007 (UTC)

Other than the one remaining {{fact}} and a number of redirects that need bypassing (which I'll probably do myself in a minute or two as they're a pet hate of mine :p) it looks good and reads well, and is well sourced (except possibly the ESPN link - but that's been noted too). Good work guys. You're not far off. AllynJ 15:56, 11 May 2007 (UTC)

One note on the redirects, it's better to leave them than to just edit the article to correct them - I've been told off before, you can find out more here! The Rambling Man 16:43, 11 May 2007 (UTC)

ESPN link removed, and now off to find the final {{fact}}... thanks for your comments! The Rambling Man 16:43, 11 May 2007 (UTC)

Cited. I believe that's all your comments addressed! Thanks again. The Rambling Man 16:54, 11 May 2007 (UTC)