Wikipedia:Peer review/Ceres (dwarf planet)/archive1
Annyone knows how to improve this article? There doesn't seeem to be much more to say about Ceres, but it is one of the few planets not to be an FA. Thanks if you can helpNergaal 02:50, 15 September 2007 (UTC)
I think that with a few touch-ups, this could achieve Featured Article status. Any improvements would be appreciated.
Thanks!
Yesiammanu 03:38, 22 January 2007 (UTC)
It appeared that a PR entry was generated but it has not been archived, so I'm speculating that the entry was never added to the main peer review page. I'm adding it in now. This page may become very topical in about 7-8 years due to the upcoming Dawn Mission. Comments appreciated. (I'm adding my own below.) — RJH (talk) 17:06, 5 July 2007 (UTC)
RJHall
editSome comments:
- The 'Observations' section could use some work. At present it is very terse: little more than a bulleted list. The section could explain why the occultation was notable, and the discoveries made with the recent telescope observations. Please also include some actual information about observation, including magnitude, angular diameter and so forth. (C.f. Jupiter#Observation.) Some of this is in the 'Physical characteristics' section (the second paragraph), so perhaps it could be moved to the more appropriate location in 'Observations'?
- The 'Asteroid belt' section should really be a link in 'See also', rather than a section.
- 'Namesakes' is a trivia section. Can this be merged with the text? (E.g. in the 'Name' section.)
- The 'Symbol' section is too short. It should be merged.
- There is some bold text in the notes. I think those should be italicized instead.
- The 'Physical characteristics' section only briefly covers the topic of why this body is round. Could this be explained a little more? Also could the article cover the topic of how Ceres was formed and why it didn't swallow the remaining mass in the belt and form a planet?
Thanks. — RJH (talk) 19:21, 17 September 2007 (UTC)
DTGardner
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