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I've listed this article for peer review because it was withdrawn by me during FAR. This is an article about a Nigerian author and critic. I withdrew the FA review per the already given review; though plans to take it back to FA. I implore help and substantial edits. I don't owe the article too, just bring out faults and I will always be there to respond and fix the changes. For reviewing, please all aspect. Thanks, All the Best! Otuọcha (talk) 14:04, 31 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Note: Also pinging @SusunW:.

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Okay Otuọcha, let's get to work. I'll help you in any way I can. For the record, I always approach reviews as if they are a conversation between the editor and reviewer. Much of what I ask will be up to you to decide if you want to implement. Please ask questions, and feel free to disagree. SusunW (talk) 16:23, 31 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

So, let's go back to the first section, "Early life and background". Things that I see that need work:

  • You cannot have she was born in Enugu, Enugu State in the lede without it being cited in the body. (The lede is a summary of already cited material, so every single thing in it, must be in the body of the article.)
  • Adichie was born on 15 September, 1977, as the fifth out of six children of James and Grace Adichie from Abba, Anambra State, who lived in Enugu, a local hilly town that lies in the southeastern part of Nigeria; mostly dominated by Igbo people contains information not in the cited source. Luebering confirms date, 5th of 6, and parents names. It says she was born in Enugu, and her parents were Igbo, but does not confirm from where. Perhaps "Adichie was born on 15 September, 1977, in Enugu, Nigeria, as the fifth out of six children, to Igbo parents, Grace (née Odigwe) and James Adichie". Cited to both Luebering and her mother's obit. It is critical that you introduce why Enugu is important because it figures so highly in her work. Perhaps "Enugu lies in the southern part of Nigeria,[1] and had been the capital of the short-lived Republic of Biafra".p. 27 here shows it was the capital and MacFarquhar in the New Yorker says it existed for 3 years. Cite both.
    I really, really like what you have done to the opening. I think it is much better. Doing this now in 3 parts:
    • After Grace (née Odigwe) and James Adichie you need to add a citation to Grace's obit. It is the only source I've seen that gives her maiden name.
    • The sentence starting Raised in Enugu has no subject. Add "She was" to the beginning and a link to Mullane's citation. It's an online source and it makes it way easier for me to verify what we're doing here.
      •   Done
    • capital of the short-lived Republic of Biafra. needs sources. You have already used MacFarquhar's article in the New Yorker it needs to be here as does the book I gave you above by Godfrey Mwakikagile. (Hint, if you put the isbn in the drop down template in cite and input 978-1-56072-967-9 for the isbn and then press the magnifying glass icon, it will input the entire book info. You might have to clean up the title case or publisher name/location, and you will have to press the chain link on the link I gave you for the book to get the url for the book. If you cannot see the book, take out ".mx" and you should be able to.) SusunW (talk) 14:28, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • I think you need to broaden the discussion about her family next and move the bit about moving to Nsukka to a later place in the article. According to the father's obit, he was born in Abba, Anambra State and studied mathematics at University College, Ibadan. After graduating in 1957, he worked for a few years and then in 1963, moved to Berkeley, California to complete his PhD at the University of California. He returned to Nigeria and began working as a professor at the University of Nigeria in 1966. All of that IMO should be in the article.
      •   Done: I am practically concerned with the family move; there is not much about Enugu or it crash lands Nsukka (which is neither not where they lived but just a place where the University is located. I would say Enugu already dominates Nsukka). What do you think? All the Best! Otuọcha (talk) 21:36, 31 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the father's section, link University of Nigeria the first time it appears followed by ", Nsukka" and link it as well. SusunW (talk) 14:36, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      Done Thanks! All the Best! Otuọcha (talk) 18:53, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • From the mother's obit, she was born in Umunnachi, Anambra State. She began her university studies in 1964, at Merritt College in Oakland, California and then earned a degree in sociology and anthropology from the University of Nigeria. Again, this is critical info in my mind because it shows a pattern of education in Africa and the US.
    Again, I'm going to list several actions:
    • After Her mother was born in Umunnachi, Anambra State. cite the obit.
      •   Done
    • The next sentence should be something to the effect that she and James met and married on 15 April 1963, (cited to this) moving together to California and should be cited to MacFarquhar's article in the New Yorker.
      •   Done
    • Link Oakland, California
      •   Done
    • Add "While in the United States, the couple had two daughters" or something to that effect and cite it to this, which you should already have as a source to input the marriage date. SusunW (talk) 15:32, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      •   Done
    • Move where she later became the first female registrar in 1973 to the second paragraph. See below. SusunW (talk) 14:40, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      I see that you have done these, but we need to do 2 things still:
      • In James married her, "her" could be interpreted to be Adichie, so change it to James married Grace.
      • Also, removed the bit about after Chuks being born in Biafta. They moved to the US in 1963. They had 2 daughters there. They returned to Nigeria and then Chuks was born. SusunW (talk) 14:21, 3 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'm not clear when and where the parents met, but per MacFarquhar in The New Yorker, they moved to California together and her oldest brother Chuks was born in Biafra in 1968.
    See comment immediately above for where I think you need to insert this. SusunW (talk) 15:01, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    I think you should move the map to be on the right so the text is not squished between the info box and the map. SusunW (talk) 15:40, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      •   Done
I wrote after since Chuks was born in Biafra after their marriage before going to the US, where they had two daughters. This makes more sense per New Yorker.! All the Best! Otuọcha (talk) 19:09, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
See above comment. Chuks was born when they came back from the US. Delete after their first son Chuks was born in Biafra in 1968. SusunW (talk) 14:22, 3 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  Removed All the Best! Otuọcha (talk) 15:54, 3 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Second paragraph:

  • We also know from MacFarquhar that her dad worked for the Biafran government and that both of her grandparents died in refugee camps in Nigeria. Were they in refugee camps because of the 1966 anti-Igbo pogroms?
  • This paragraph needs to start with something to the effect, of "Shortly after the family returned to Nigeria, the Biafran War (link it) broke out and James began working for the Biafran government, cited to MacFarquhar in The New Yorker. Add the info about the grandparents, it's important context, and link if appropriate to the pogroms. SusunW (talk) 15:01, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      •   Done
      •   Done
      •   Done
  • I'm also unclear when they moved to Nsukka, but according to the father's obit, he was supervising the master's degree program there at UNN in 1971. So perhaps "After Biafra ceased to exist in 1970, James returned to the University of Nigeria in Nsukka" cited to both the obit and MacFarquhar. Then give Grace's information, "Grace worked for the government at Enugu until 1973 when she became an administration officer at the university, later becoming the university's first female registrar", cited to the obit and Martin.
      •   Done
  • Then I would put in the part about they lived in Chinua Achebe's house, but I would expand it to include the information in Ike Anya's article, from the magazine African Writer, which has an editorial board. You have this in external links but it gives information I haven't found elsewhere and appears to be a curated source (has an editor-in-chief). Per Anya, when they moved in the family included Chuks, Uche, Rosemary, Okey, Ngozi, and Kene and her father was the Deputy Vice-Chancellor of the university. The job is confirmed in Business Day, which has an editorial board.
    Comment, I am beginning to think that who she lived with in the US was "Rosemary". Ooh, Ooh Ooh! I found a source that gives a bunch of info, including when the parents married! This confirms Rosemary is ljeoma! Put the children in order per this source: Ijeoma Rosemary, Uchenna "Uche", Chukwunweike "Chuks", Okechukwu "Okey", Ngozi, and Kenechukwu "Kene". I'm going to go above and modify the instructions based on this article. SusunW (talk) 15:26, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Remove the link to University of Nigeria here. It should only be linked the first time it occurs. SusunW (talk) 17:57, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Anya's article, to me, suggests that Adichie was called Ngozi when she was young. (You need to input where her name came from and until we develop the article further, I'm not sure where it should go, but am positive that it needs to be in the article. Per this source, "In an interview with popular Nigerian television personality Ebuka, Adichie" admitted that she made up the name "Chimamanda" in the 1990s to keep her legal English name of "Amanda" and conform with Igbo Christian naming customs of the time. p. 3. Also this says the translation of Chimamanda means "'my spirit is unbreakable' or 'my God will never fall'" p. 300. Maybe you introduce the section with just "Ngozi Adichie, whose English name was Amanda", cited to Anya and Nwankwọ "was born in..." cited to Luebering, and insert her choosing her own name in the 1990s immediately following the first sentence?
    You need to add Nwankwọ as a source to this opening sentence. They both verify different parts of the sentence. SusunW (talk) 14:08, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      •   Done
  • What is the source for Adichie loved novels and story books. She read Enid Blyton novels and saw a different view of literally works from reading Things Fall Apart by Chinua Achebe. Then, she realized that Africans exists in fictional works. She also read Ngũgĩ wa Thiong'o's Weep Not, Child and Joys of Motherhood by Buchi Emecheta. I see loved to read and Things Fall Apart in Luebering, but not the rest of it. I also see in MacFarquhar that as a child she read only English-language stories. So at what point did she discover African literature? Just found that Mullane says she was ten when discovered African literature and began reading Things Fall Apart. Also found in Miyashiro that she was influenced by Blyton. The biography by Daria Tunca in OUP's Dictionary of African Biography (If you cannot access this version, search her name on the Oxford Reference tab at the Wikipedia Library) gives info and influences.
  • This is much better. I note Open Country Mag has writers, department directors, and an editor. (There may be reviewers who want you to bundle the citations for the various books at the end of the sentence, rather than after the comas. I don't know how to do that in the citation style you use, but maybe you do.) SusunW (talk) 16:13, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • I also think that after Blyton you should note that her "juvenilia included stories with characters who were white and blue-eyed, modeled on British children she had read about. cite it to MacFarquhar, Tunca, and Otosirieze. It's important because you haven't indicated she began writing as a child, but she clearly was, before the age of ten when she discovered African literature. SusunW (talk) 18:42, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      •   Done
  • I think this needs to be at the beginning of a new education section. What I am proposing here is that you have Early life and background, followed by Education and influences, followed by a section called Education abroad and early literary efforts. This should be the first sentence of the second section. SusunW (talk) 17:26, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      •   Done
  • Better, except, it's not chronological. Start the paragraph with As a child, Adichie read. After by Buchi Emecheta. insert Adichie began to study her father's stories about Biafra when she was thirteen. The war occurred before she was born, but in visits to Abba, she saw houses that were destroyed and some rusty bullets on the ground. She would later incorporate her memories and father's descriptions into her novels. SusunW (talk) 14:37, 3 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    •   Done
    All the Best! Otuọcha (talk) 15:59, 3 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • What is the source for Adichie has already started noting her father's beautiful story about Biafra by 13, since she was born after the war. According to James, his brother Michael Adichie was one of the soldiers who fought for the Biafran Army. Her father took her along to Nteje, where lies the refugee camp (where most people stayed during the war), to get his father's corpse, only to hear sideway stories from the officials incharge of the camp. After denial of statement, James cried, and took some sand of the ground to go and bury his father's corpse in Abba—their hometown.
  • The source for In Abba, Adichie took notes of the incident, which she would write in her novel. She also saw houses destroyed and some rusty gun bullets on the ground. The family lost almost everything during the Nigerian Civil War, including Adichie's maternal and paternal grandfathers is an inaccessible audio. You either need to find a link so that the minutes can be verified or another source.
  • I suggest this Adichie has already started noting her father's beautiful story about Biafra by 13, since she was born after the war. and In Abba, Adichie took notes of the incident, which she would write in her novel. She also saw houses destroyed and some rusty gun bullets on the ground.[13] stays in the education section, but this According to James, his brother Michael Adichie was one of the soldiers who fought for the Biafran Army. Her father took her along to Nteje, where lies the refugee camp (where most people stayed during the war), to get his father's corpse, only to hear sideway stories from the officials incharge of the camp. After denial of statement, James cried, and took some sand of the ground to go and bury his father's corpse in Abba—their hometown.[13] The family lost almost everything during the Nigerian Civil War, including Adichie's maternal and paternal grandfathers be moved to the background section to follow the sentence about her father working for the Biafran government. It's family context.
      •   Done
  • For the bit that stays in education, lose beautiful, it's not in the source. "Perhaps Adichie began to study her father's stories about Biafra when she was thirteen. The war occurred before she was born, but in visits to Abba, she saw houses that were destroyed and some rusty bullets on the ground. She would later incorporate her memories and father's descriptions into her novels"
      •   Done
  • For the bit that moves to background, suggest something like "James wrote that his brother, Michael Adichie, and brother-in-law, Cyprian Odigwe, both fought for Biafra in the war.(cite Otosirieze) James' father, David, and his father-in-law both died in refugee camps during the war. Obligated by custom which required the oldest child to bury the father,(cite MacFarquhar) when the war ended, James went to the refugee camp at Nteje to find his father's body. He was told by officials that those who had died had been buried in a mass grave and were unidentifiable. In a symbolic gesture, James took sand from the site of the mass grave to the cemetery in Abba to bury David with his family".(cite Otosirieze) Obviously change my suggestions to whatever you think works. SusunW (talk) 17:26, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      •   Done
I see that you've done these but didn't mark it. Reading it, I think we need to rearrange the text a bit. After "pogram" insert everything that follows James wrote that his brother. Then move everything from After Biafra ceased to exist in 1970, to St. Paul's Parish in Abba to the "education and influences" section as a first paragraph. SusunW (talk) 14:46, 3 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  •   Done
All the Best! Otuọcha (talk) 16:07, 3 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Her education was in English and Igbo. Clearly important, as it is mentioned in numerous sources, for example Mullane and MacFarquhar, who says that although she studied Igbo through high school, her knowledge was "imperfect enough that when she wrote poems as a teen-ager she wrote them in English". You should link to Igbo language.
      •   Done
  • I think you need a bit more. Igbo culture and language is important to her, both personally and professionally. MacFarquhar says she studied Igbo throughout high school even though it wasn't a popular subject and most students dropped it as soon as they could. SusunW (talk) 17:57, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Insert it right after the list of children. You might also mention that the family's home parish was St. Paul's Parish in Abba per Otosirieze in Open Country Mag or not, but I love in MacFarquhar where he says "but when she was young she wished she could be a priest". (For the record, I don't like personal life sections in general. I haven't gotten there in the article yet, but may well have you move it. Unless she keeps her personal and professional life totally separated (like someone who uses a personal name for day to day activities and a stage/pen name for work) it doesn't make sense. People's family life happens over the course of their career and typically influences what they do, (stop working to have children, change names with divorce, etc.) and is context needed during the discussion of a career. SusunW (talk) 16:13, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      •   Done
  • Is there a link for the University of Nigeria Campus Secondary School? The article says, Adichie completed her secondary education at the University of Nigeria Campus Secondary School, Nsukka, where she received several academic prizes, which is almost identical to the Business Day source "Chimamanda completed her secondary education at the University’s school, receiving several academic prizes". Perhaps reword it?
      •   Done Reworded! The school may not be notable enough and I don't think there is any link (even the website or mostly declined as a school; the least I know is that it should be before 21st-century since Universities nowadays, don't have much campus accomodations before taking about a primary/secondary school. All the Best! Otuọcha (talk) 23:18, 31 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • What makes Black Past a reliable source? Okay, never mind, I found an editorial board. (If you are wondering why I keep noting things have an editorial board, it is because FA requires a source review and you will likely be asked why you think sources meet our RS sources policy.) I note it says she studied medicine and pharmacy for a year and a half not a few years. But, Miyashiro says two years, so perhaps add a citation to Miyashiro as well.
  •   Not done: I am afraid of this Miyashiro's source. Many sources said 1/2 year. Will provide their links; for now, just left at air. All the Best! Otuọcha (talk) 23:18, 31 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • If you don't think Mijashiro is a reliable source then remove it and replace any citations to it with other, better citations. For featured article, we must have the highest quality sources we can find. I haven't even started the source review and I can promise there will be lots to do, particularly with formatting, when we get to it. SusunW (talk) 17:57, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'd probably then make Education abroad and early literary efforts a new section.

  • I don't see that you have done this, but I strongly suggest that you do it. Her influences/life in the United States were markedly different than those of her early life in Nigeria. It's a symbolic way of recognizing those changes. SusunW (talk) 18:42, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Per above Miyashiro cannot be the source for this. Suggest you modify this (see comments below) to read: "Adichie published Decisions, a collection of poems, in 1997",(cited to Tunca) and then left Nigeria at the age of 19 for the United States..."(cited to Black Past and Business Day).
      •   Done
  • Here I'd input the information about Decisions being published in 1997. Luebering says she moved to the US in 1997 and other sources indicate it might have been 1996. The book was published by a London publisher, so we don't really know if it was before or after she moved to the US, but in any case, you have it cited to encyclopedia.com, which says it was published in 1998, which does not jive with the 1997 date reported in worldcat (don't use that as a source), Mullane, or OUP. I would definitely cite OUP's A Dictionary of Writers and their Works rather than encyclopedia.com (You can access the full article, unlocked from the WP library) or Tunca in the Dictionary of African Biography, which says she published Decisions in Africa and then left for the US.
  • I do not see that you moved Decisions to this section. It needs to be moved, as it isn't one of her acclaimed works written after her career began, and the heading Decisions (1997) needs to be deleted. See my suggestion about wording above. SusunW (talk) 18:42, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      •   Done
  • I would follow that with the publication of For Love of Biafra in 1998 and cite that they both were written under the name of Amanda N. Adichie, cited to Nwankwọ. (As per above, that is not a pen name, rather her English and Igbo names.) Also, Tunca in the Dictionary of African Biography says that "The following For Love of Biafra was a play about the Nigerian Civil War, which was her first exploration into the conflict, which is pretty important.
      •   Done
  • Again, move the information from the heading Decisions (1997) to the education abroad section. For Love of Biafra needs to follow Philadelphia, Pennsylvania. I also do not see that you have also cited Nwankwọ, which is necessary because Tunco does not give the information about what name she used when she published these. SusunW (talk) 18:42, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      •   Done
  • Later, she transferred to Eastern Connecticut State University, where she received a bachelor's degree summa cum laude in 2001, with reasons for going to stay with her sister Uche. This article from the Guardian makes them appear to be two different people? She transferred to Connecticut after 2 years per Miyashiro, Black Past and Business Day. ECSU is in Willimantic, per Mullane, which you should link and cite. Both Mullane and Business Day say she moved to Connecticut to live with her sister "Ijeoma". How do we know that is Uche? (We do need to know it because the list of siblings above does not list Ijeoma.) I'd probably write this as "Two years later, she transferred to Eastern Connecticut State University in Willimantic, where she lived with her sister X, who was a medical doctor there. She received her bachelor's degree summa cum laude with a "major in political science and a minor in communications" in 2001" or something similar.(The quote is from Mullane, which needs to be cited, along with Black Past which confirms summa cum laude.)
      •   Done Quite rechecking Ijeoma or Uche; done checking!
  • For the life of me I cannot figure out WP technology. I do not understand why sometimes I have a reply button and other times I do not. *sigh* Sorry, rant over. Do not use the primary source from ESCU. You can just delete it and add Mullane after Black Past. Both are needed, they confirm different information. SusunW (talk) 19:15, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • While she was at ECSU she wrote articles for the university paper Campus Lantern per Black Past.
      •   Done
  • Her short story "My Mother, the Crazy African" does not appear to be cited to a curated source from the link given. Poking around I find In Posse Review is an on-line journal with issues, not a website, has a submissions policy and editors. I also found that the story was published In Posse Review: Multi-Ethnic Anthology in 2000, that is different than the regular issues of the journal. You need to correct the citation and change the link.
  • The link you input goes directly to her article and does not have any indication on it about where it came from. The link I gave you shows that it was published in an anthology. Use my link. The ref is also formatted as "|website=Web Del Sol" but In Posse Review is an on-line journal. I'd input it as {{cite journal |last1=Adichie |first1=Amanda Ngozi |title=My Mother, the Crazy African |journal=In Posse Review |date=2000 |volume=Multi-Ethnic Anthology |url=http://www.webdelsol.com/InPosse/anthology_index.htm |publisher=Spectrum Publishers |location=San Francisco, California |archive-url=https://web.archive.org/web/20240331193207/http://www.webdelsol.com/InPosse/anthology_index.htm |archive-date=31 March 2024 |url-status=live}} Also the information about this needs to immediately follow She wrote articles for the university paper Campus Lantern[16] and. Following that She received her bachelor's degree...SusunW (talk) 19:15, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    •  Done All the Best! Otuọcha (talk) 00:45, 2 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • So as not to interrupt the later sections on evaluating her writing, I would probably leave the rest of her education here where you have it, but it needs to be written per Wikipedia:Proseline less like a list of dates and accomplishments. Perhaps: "While a senior at Eastern Connecticut, she began writing her first novel, simultaneously continuing her education and pursuing a writing career.(Tunca, p 94) She earned a master's degree from Johns Hopkins University in creative writing in 2003,(I would not use the primary sources from the actual universities, unless you cannot verify the information in secondary sources, because of WP policy, or unless there is a conflict. In the case of Johns Hopkins, you need direct verification because Tunca says 2004 and Black Past says 2003. but the link you have is dead, the Wayback link on the article is to the wrong archive, and the correct archive doesn't allow you to access Adichie's profile. This link to John's Hopkins works and confirms 2003, so I would cite both it and Black Past.) and for the next two years was a Hodder Fellow at Princeton University and taught introductory fiction.(Tunca, p 94)(Business Day) She then began a course in African studies (link it) at Yale University, and completed a second master's degree in 2008".(Tunca, p 94)(Mullane)
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  • I do not see that you have changed the refs as I indicated that you need to do. Hodder Fellow bit needs both Business Day and Tunca, and second master's degree in 2008 needs Tunca and Mullane. SusunW (talk) 19:31, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'm going to break here. It's a lot of work to review this in-depth. A break will give you a chance to address the points and us to polish those sections up before we move to the next section. I hope I haven't overwhelmed you. I did warn you I am very detail oriented and want to get this right. Ping me when you are ready for me to review these sections. Please feel free to question anything that isn't clear to you or that doesn't seem to be correct. SusunW (talk) 20:34, 31 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

  • @SusunW: You may continue. Thanks for the review so far. I have tagged done per review and some listed as rechecking or not clear what you meant (you can also rephrase via the reply). All the Best! Otuọcha (talk) 07:58, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Otuọcha We're getting there. Back to you for now. SusunW (talk) 19:31, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Will fill in your reviews now. Exactement (French), we are getting therw. Thanks so far. Neither have I seen such courageous editors if not few. Regards, All the Best! Otuọcha (talk) 19:38, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Otuọcha I didn't hear from you yesterday, so I came to check the progress. Please 1) always ping me when you have finished with all the changes and 2) always mark everything you have finished as   Done so that I do not have to keep checking and rechecking the same info. We are making progress. "Poco y poco" (Little by little). It's a marathon, not a sprint. I have a meeting on Friday, so probably won't be around much of that day. SusunW (talk) 15:01, 3 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    @SusunW: We are really making progress. I just had this sudden tooth ache. I wanted to ping but this WP technology will not show "reply" despite showing it. This is frustrating indeed. I will do as you say and always mark   Done as you said. All the Best! Otuọcha (talk) 15:05, 3 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Otuọcha I am so sorry you having tooth issues. Never fun. Hope you are better soon. And yes, WP technology is baffling (and frustrating). I'm working on another article, so when you feel up to it and have time to work through the bullet points, just ping me. SusunW (talk) 15:12, 3 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    @SusunW Just saw your inputs now; will add it up and ping you when I am ready. Probably today. All the Best! Otuọcha (talk) 15:14, 3 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    SusunW: I have done all. You may continue. Thanks and healthy reviewing! SafariScribe (talk) 20:48, 3 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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Because it's a bit confusing at this point, I've made a new section here. The first two sections are good. I moved the text for the "Education abroad and early literary efforts" and we still need to work through some points in this paragraph. SusunW (talk) 14:27, 4 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

  • She did not study political science at Drexel. She studied communications. Change that. Remove the citation to Miyashiro and replace it with Black Past and Business Day.
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  • and received her bachelor's degree summa cum laude with a major in political science and a minor in communications in 2001.[8][20] While a senior at Eastern Connecticut, she wrote her short story "My Mother, the Crazy African", which discusses the problems that arise when a person is facing two cultures that are complete opposites from each other is chronologically out of order. She published "My Mother" in 2000 and then graduated, so "and while a senior, she wrote..." Make "She received her bachelor's..." a new sentence.
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  • Move the citation at the end of While a senior at Eastern Connecticut, she wrote her short story "My Mother, the Crazy African", which discusses the problems that arise when a person is facing two cultures that are complete opposites from each other. to follow the comma after "African"," You cannot analyze the work and Adichie's text is just the story. Looking for a source, I found this journal article. I think Tunca supports your text about opposing cultures on pp 297-298. Add the source. (Also I note that she gives a bit of info that might be useful on p 294 about For Love of Biafra.)
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  • It was her first attempt of publishing; thus she began writing her first novel, simultaneously continuing her education and pursuing a writing career. It wasn't her first attempt at publishing, as she had already published at least two other works. Suggest "After finishing her undergraduate degree, she continued her pattern of simultaneously studying and pursuing a writing career", or something like that.
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  • To finish this section, I think we should move the information below here and delete the "Personal life" section. Adichie has been married to Ivara Esege, a Nigerian doctor, since 2009.[12] In 2016, they had a daughter.[58] Adichie divides her time between the United States and Nigeria, where she teaches writing workshops.[59][1] suggest should change to "Adichie married Ivara Esege, a Nigerian doctor, in 2009,(cited to MacFarquhar) and their daughter was born in 2016.(cited to Quartz) The family primarily lives in the United States because of Esege's medical practice, but they also maintain a home in Nigeria".(cited to MacFarquhar) (Quartz], per this this has an editor-in-chief, executive editor, and news editor.) Add the text immediately following Harvard University.
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That should finish the "easy" part. I'll be completely honest with you, the next bit will be harder. I suggest that we restructure the article somewhat. I would rename "Life and career" to "Early life, education, and family". After the subsection "Education abroad and early literary efforts" input a new main section called "Career" with subsections of "Writing", with secondary sections of "Style and themes" and "Critical reception", and Lecturing. (Career would have == around it, Writing and Lecturing === around them and Style and themes/Critical reception ==== around them, if that makes sense) In the writing section, we will chronologically list her works, in the style and themes her influences and focus, and critical reception will include what others say about her works and awards she has received for them. We'll work on the Lecturing part when we get there. I think it will probably be easier to work in a sandbox and then move the completed sections into the article. On your personal page there is a human icon in the top right corner. Press it and you will find a drop down box and a bullet for sandbox. Open a page, and copy everything between Purple Hibiscus (2003) and She also have explored homesickness, which was a major effect on her and education in America. (the end of the current section on Americanization) into the sandbox. Save it with the edit summary "copied from Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie". The edit summary is important because copying text, even within WP can be plagiarism without proper attribution. Once you have created the sandbox draft, at the top put in the new headings, subheadings and secondary subheadings so we can move information around to fit the new sections. Ping me with the link to the sandbox when you have completed all of the review points above and we'll dive in again. SusunW (talk) 16:14, 4 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

SafariScribe I see you changed your name  . You're up. SusunW (talk) 16:16, 4 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Oh! My bad. I changed the name. It's somewhat looking like "Otuocha" in Anambra State. I saw your review and will pile them in. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 18:11, 4 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
SusunW: This is the link User:SafariScribe/sandbox. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 17:04, 5 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Safari Scribe That looks good. Only 1 change still needed above and the sandbox headings look good. You need to read through each section and move it according to whether it is a description of writing the book, about her style or themes, or about critical reaction and awards. For example, in the first section of information from the published article in the heading "Purple Hibiscus (2003)", delete the heading. Move everything between While studying in America, to her book has been published. and It was published in the United Kingdom on 1 March, 2004 by Fourth Estate, and Adichie also got a new agent, Sarah Chalfant of the Wylie Agency. to the subheading "writing". Move Adichie was clear in adding racial issues involved in her education which was portrayed by her character Kambili in the book to the "Style and themes" heading and all of the rest of that section to the "Critical reception" heading. Repeat that with each of the old sections of the article, deleting the old headings as you relocate material to the new headings. I see a lot of unsourced material, so be sure to source all of material. If you get stuck, confused, or need help ping me. Once it is all moved and sourced, I will verify it line by line as before. SusunW (talk) 21:55, 5 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Safari Scribe just checking in with you. How's it going on reorganizing and citing the text? SusunW (talk) 17:52, 10 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    @SusunW Thank you for your shown concern. It's not been easy but I will round off by Friday. Then, I will ping you to continue. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 21:06, 10 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    @SusunW: I know you have other things doing but a drive-by suggestion. I was considering moving the subsections of the works to the "writing section" since everything there discusses 'Purple Hibiscus'. Same way, there will be "Career" with subsections "Writing" (with under section of the works—how they were written). Another stand-alone section, a new it not section of Style" and "Themes", others can then follow. I need feedback probably today to round off this weekend. Thanks! — Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 00:01, 13 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Safari Scribe, sorry. I don't understand. The point is to eliminate most of these headings. On the individual works look at "Half of a Yellow Sun (2006)" and move anything about writing/chronology to "writing", anything about style or themes to that section, and anything about critique or awards to "Critical reception". Then do the same with "The Thing Around Your Neck (2009)", "Americanah (2013)", "Dear Ijeawele, or A Feminist Manifesto in Fifteen Suggestions (2017)", "Notes on Grief (2021)", and "Mama's Sleeping Scarf (2022): launch and review". Then in the "Style and themes", the same process should happen, eliminating the subheadings and keeping the most pertinent recurring themes. The critical reception section needs beefing up with reviews from high quality reviews.
    The point is that this is a biography of her. Detailed discussion about of the works should be in individual articles about the works themselves. The sections that remain in her biography should be broad summaries and concise, covering each subtopic - "writing", "Style and themes" and "Critical reception" - as an overview of her body of work (everything she has written), not as individual works and not as individual topics. I know it's hard, but this detailed analysis of what to leave in and what to leave out and focused attention on the details is part of the processes of preparing the article to reach featured status. (Speaking of details, please fix that last reference citation above for Tunca. I keep checking and it is still wrong.) Truth is, I could do it for you, but my job as a mentor is to coach you in how to do it. If you need me to step in, I will, but then it is my work and not yours. SusunW (talk) 15:11, 13 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Safari Scribe Sorry, we lost internet yesterday afternoon and it just came back. I am behind on a lot of things. I'll start reviewing again tomorrow. SusunW (talk) 18:55, 15 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    SusunW, I got ya. There is no problem with that. — Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 05:39, 16 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Writing
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  • From While studying in America to take a risk on you." No need to cite the same source for each sentence. When you change sources, add a new citation, unless you are quoting something. So remove all of the citations leaving only the one at the end of take a risk.
  • From According to her to considered her home, suggest tightening the text, i.e. "It was written during a period of homesickness and set in her childhood home of Nsukka, Nigeria".
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  • Add a brief discussion of what it is about, i.e. Dube, p 227 says the book explores post-colonial Nigeria during a military coup d'état and examines cultural conflicts between Catholic, Christian, and Igbo traditions in the dynamics of a family.
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  • After sending her manuscript, suggest "She sent her manuscript to publishing houses and agents, who either rejected it, or requested that she change the setting from Africa to America, as it was more familiar to a broad range of readers".
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  • A few days later, she was emailed by Diana Pearson, a literary agent working at Pearson Morris and Belt Literary Management, seeking the manuscript with lines saying, "I like this and I'm willing to take a risk on you." Source doesn't confirm a few days later, perhaps "eventually"? Name isn't Diana Pearson per the source, the agent was Djana Pearson Morris. (Another source gives Diana Morris, but I googled it and Djana is the correct spelling.) It also doesn't confirm her agency, nor that it was an e-mail but this does - add source. (Can you confirm if the author of the Open Country Mag piece is the same as the author of the Brittle Paper source? It has an editorial board. If they are the same, the author's name should be consistently presented throughout the article.)
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So this is what I was trying to explain about sources being centralized at the bottom making it easier. In 2 places you call this author Otosirieze and in another Otosirieze Obi-Young. The name needs to be the same in all 3 and linked. I searched in the writing section, but couldn't find the citation. When I expanded my search to the whole draft, I finally found it. I don't care if you list him as just Otosirieze or Otosirieze Obi-Young, but they all need to be the same and linked to the article of who he is.
  • Move Another issue came up with the novel: it was marketing and finance, as Adichie was black and not an African American. It was difficult, according to her agent, to sell the work to follow take a risk and cite it to Brittle Paper. Suggest, "Morris recognized that marketing would be challenging because although Adichie was Black, she was neither African American nor Caribbean".
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  • Adichie, who was desperate to be published, sent her manuscript to the agent, who edited and sent to publishers till it got published on 30 October 2003 by Algonquin Books. is not confirmed in Dube text, but is confirmed by the Brittle Paper article, except it doesn't confirm that Morris edited it. Deleted "edited and", change "till" to until, and change got published on 30 October 2003 by Algonquin Books. to was accepted by Algonquin Books in 2003. Cite Brittle Paper.
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  • Add "Algonquin focused on publishing debut novels and was not concerned with industry trends. They created support for the book by sending advance copies to booksellers, reviewers, and media houses. They also sent Adichie on a promotional tour". Cite it to Open Country Mag
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  • However, Adichie was happy that at least her book had been published. Possibly delete as unnecessary?
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  • It was published in the United Kingdom on 1 March 2004 by Fourth Estate, and Adichie also got a new agent, Sarah Chalfant of the Wylie Agency. My reading of Open Country Mag is that Algonquin sent it to Fourth Estate, who agreed to publish it. Perhaps, after "on a promotional tour" "and sent the manuscript to Fourth Estate, who accepted the book for publication in the United Kingdom in 2004". Cite it to Open Country Mag. The part about a new agent is not in Open Country Mag, but it is in the Brittle Paper. Perhaps "Adichie's hired the agent Sarah Chalfant of the Wylie Agency to represent her in the UK" and cite it to Brittle Paper.
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  • Purple Hibiscus was well received with positive reviews from book critics. Move to "critical reception" and cite it to both Open Country Mag and Brittle Paper.
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  • The novel features two Igbo families: Papa Eugene's family with his wife Beatrice Achike, who was called Mama, and their children Kambili and Chukwuka (always called by his childhood nickname Jaja).[2] As an exploration of Adichie's childhood, the family lived in Enugu with Sisi as a house help and Kevin, a driver. I would delete this, as we've given a more concise summary above.
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  • Move According to Otosirieze Obi-Young, the book sold on its own until it was awarded the Commonwealth Writers' Prize for the Best Book, a Hurston-Wright Legacy Award, and shortlisted for the Women's Prize for Fiction.[3] In a review by The Washington Post, she was praised as a "very much the 21st-century daughter of that other great Igbo novelist, Chinua Achebe."[4] Luke Ndidi Okolo, a lecturer at Nnamdi Azikiwe University, said that "Adichie's novel treats clear and lofty subjects and themes. But the subjects and themes, however, are not new to African novels. The remarkable difference of excellence in Chimamanda Adichie's "Purple Hibiscus" is the stylistic variation – her choice of linguistic and literary features, and the pattern of application of the features in such a wondrous juxtaposition of characters' reasoning and thought." to "critical reception". (I'll analyze it when we get there.) SusunW (talk) 16:21, 16 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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  • I would probably add here that it was published by Kachifo Limited in Nigeria in 2004 (cite to Brittle Paper) and subsequently translated into more than forty languages. (cite to Open Country Mag)
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  • Following the success of her first book, (study.com is not what would be considered a "high quality source". It contains papers, written by middle/high school students, reviewed by their teachers. Remove it as a source.) According to this source (Madueke p. 49), it was first published by Anchor Books, a trademark of Alfred A. Knopf, who also released it later under its Vintage Canada label. It also confirms the book was published as L'autre moitié du soleil in 2008, by Éditions Gallimard in France. This article from The Age confirms it was also published by Fourth Estate in 2006, but it doesn't confirm that she wrote it after her first book was successful. It says instead that she worked on it for four years, researching extensively and studying her father's memories of the period. The four years is also confirmed by Madueke (p. 49).
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  • Replace The novel was set before and during the Nigerian Civil War and Adichie said "it was her, paying homage to her grandfathers who tragically perished in the aftermath". cited to study.com with the description given by MacFarquhar and The Age, i.e. something like "The novel expanded on the Biafran conflict weaving together a love story which included people from various regions and social classes of Nigeria, and how the war and encounters with refugees changed them." (cite both.)
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  • Move Adichie was inspired by Buchi Emecheta's 1982 novel Destination Biafra up so that it is included in the part about her research for the novel. Busby says specifically that Adichie said "Destination Biafra was very important for my research".
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  • Move Half of a Yellow Sun garnered critical acclaim, earning accolades including the 2007 Orange Prize for Fiction[8] and the Anisfield-Wolf Book Award.[9] The novel was later adapted into a 2014 film of the same title directed by Biyi Bandele.k[10] to "critical reception".
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  • Adichie's third book, The Thing Around Your Neck, was written and published in 2009 with themes on marriage and hindrances of feminism while in the US. It is a collection of 12 stories, some already published in issues of magazines is cited to the Kirkius Review. Source confirms only that the book was published by Knopf in 2009 and that it contained 12 stories. Open Country Mag confirms that they were stories already published. Suggest something like, "While completing her Hodder and MacArthur fellowships, Adichie published short stories in various magazines.(Cite to Open Country Mag) Twelve of these stories were collected into her third book, The Thing Around Your Neck, published by Knopf in 2009". (Cited to Kirkius) In this source by Aminatta Forna says the stories focused on the experiences of Nigerian women, living at home or abroad, examining the tragedies, loneliness, and feelings of displacement, which result from their marriages, relocations, or violent events. I would put the description cited to Forna after "published by Knopf in 2009".
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  • Move One story from the book, "Ceiling", was included in The Best American Short Stories 2011.[12] Adichie was praised as "one who makes storytelling seem as easy as birdsong" in a review by Daily Telegraph[13] and a line in The Times described her as "Stunning. Like all fine storytellers, she leaves us wanting more".[14] to "Critical reception" but change "one story from the book" to "One story from The Thing Around Your Neck".
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  • Add "The Thing Around Your Neck was a bridge between Africa and the African diaspora, the theme of her forth book, Americanah published in 2013. (cited to Open Country Mag)
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  • It was a story of a young Nigerian woman, who encounters racism in America. It was from Adichie, who explored the character Igbo: Ifemelu, being identified by the colour of her skin at arrival to the United States.[16] seems a bit confusing. Looking at the NPR source, and also this one by Elizabeth Day perhaps "It was the story of a young Nigerian woman and her male schoolmate, who had not studied the trans-Atlantic slave trade in school and had no understanding of the racism associated with being Black in the United States or class structures in the United Kingdom.(cite NPR and Day) It exploded the myth of a "shared Black consciousness", as both of the characters, one who went to Britain and the other to America, experience a loss of their identity when they try to navigate their lives abroad. (Cite Day)
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  • Move Americanah was listed among the "10 Best Books of 2013" by The New York Times.[15] The book won the National Book Critics Circle Award[17] and the 2017 "One City One Book" selection for best books to "Critical reception"
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  • Move She co-curated the 2015 PEN World Voices festival in New York,[20] where she delivered the closing address lining with racism in terms of theme of her novel Americanah to "lecturing".
  • Adichie's next book, Dear Ijeawele, or A Feminist Manifesto in Fifteen Suggestions, was published in 2017.[22] She wrote the book after making a few changes from of it's origin—an email written to her friend who had asked for advice about how to raise her daughter to be a feminist.[23] Not exactly, the source says she wrote a letter to a friend in 2015 and posted it on Facebook in 2016. Comments on the post, convinced her to expand her ideas on how to raise a feminist daughter into a book. I would also omit Adichie's next book,
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  • In 2020, it was followed by "Zikora", a stand-alone short story about sexism and single motherhood.[24] After her father's death, Adichie wrote a memoir Notes on Grief, published in 2021[25][26] based on an essay of the same title published in The New Yorker the previous year.[27] Perhaps, "In 2020, she published "Zikora", a stand-alone short story about sexism and single motherhood[24] and an essay "Notes on Grief" in The New Yorker, after her father's death. She expanded the essay into a book of the same name, which was published by the Fourth Estate the following year.(Cited to Flood of the Guardian. Note, you have a citation #25 listed but it is blank and the citation to Flood goes to a deadlink. Add archive-url=, archive-date=, and url-status=dead to the Flood citation.)
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  • Move Notes on Grief was critically praised in a review by Kirkus Reviews as "an elegant, moving contribution to the literature of death and dying."[28] Leslie Gray Streeter of The Independent saud that "Adichie's words put a welcome, authentic voice to this most universal of emotions, which is also one of the most universally avoided."[29] to "critical response".
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  • To avoid proseline issues (a list of dates and events, change In 2022, Adichie began writing her first children's book Mama's Sleeping Scarf, which she dedicated to her daughter, and using the pen-name "Nwa Grace James", an Igbo pseudonym.[30][31] A year and a half in the writing, because her young daughter rejected the first two drafts as "boring",[32] it was published in September 2023 by HarperCollins. to possibly "Adichie spent a year and a half writing her first children's book, Mama's Sleeping Scarf, because she wanted her daughter's approval.(Cite Krug. WAPO is firewalled. Insert archive-url=, archive-date=, and url-status=dead so that others can look at the citation.) Although written in 2019, it was published in 2023 by HarperCollins under the pseudonym Nwa Grace James,(Cite Otosirieze 2022. If this is the same person who wrote the previous 2 articles, make sure you use the same name as author.) a dedication to her parents, as Nwa means "child of".(cite to Otosirieze 2022 and Ibeh 2022) Illustrations for the book were made by Joelle Avelino, a Congolese-Angolan animator.(cite to Ibeh 2022) The book tells the story of the connections of generations through family interactions with a head scarf.(cite Krug)

Safari Scribe I'm going to stop here to let you clear this section's comments. Advise me when you are finished or ping me if you get stuck. SusunW (talk) 20:45, 16 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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  • SusunW, wonderful. I feel happiest with your review so far. Thanks always for offering, I'do appreciate. — Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 21:05, 16 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    • SusunW, I'm done with the reviews. However, I haven't link Mac of New Yorker because it's not in the citations in my sandbox. I'll have that in mind when we move it to the mainspace. For now, I see you're a bit busy with your sand box drafts. They look good too. I'll be moving and restructuring the critical reception, since I moved contents there without arranging them in order. That what I'do be doing while you may continue the review. I will also read and know whether it's in good order—which it should be and tell you if there is any variant moving. Thanks! — Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 20:35, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      SafariScribe first thing tomorrow. Just finished up a fairly major article and my brain is fried. While we're on the topic of references, I would like to ask you to consider citing only the "ref name" in the body and moving the actual sources to the bottom in alphabetical order. It isn't required that you do that, but it makes it far easier to edit IMO, because you aren't having to "read around" the refs, so to speak. We can discuss it further, just wanted to put it out there for you to think about. SusunW (talk) 22:11, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      SusunW, Alright. Maybe thats how I am, I literally see the current state better. Thanks though! — Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 13:36, 23 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      No worries. As I said, it's not required. We may end up revisiting this, because when we get the the reference review there will be a lot of editing on them and it may be easier to have them in one place rather than scattered through. Anyway, so far looks good. Still working my way through the changes. SusunW (talk) 13:53, 23 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      SafariScribe I see that you are trying consolidated references. But I also note that you probably cannot see the link error messages I see. (I remind you I am not remotely technical, so I'm going to phone a friend, who mostly understands my confused explanations of things, to help us  .) Gog the Mild there is a gadget that one can install in a "skin"? that shows errors in the links to citations and sources in various colours (BE just for you). For example, on the anchor I see this "Harv error: link from CITEREFObi-Young2018 doesn't point to any citation." in orange and in the source, I see "Harv warning: There is no link pointing to this citation. The anchor is named CITEREFOtosirieze_Obi-Young2018." in brown. I have no idea how to find or edit the "skin", much less how to find the name of the gadget or how to install it. Do you understand what I am trying to say and can you help? SusunW (talk) 15:42, 23 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Susun is confusing me with someone who can tell a quark from a quart. I have no clue what a "skin" is - I assume not the barrier which delimits me from the rest of the universe? That said, would this be what you are after? Gog the Mild (talk) 20:12, 23 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Gog the Mild I honestly have no clue. I also asked Headbomb and maybe he knows for sure. All I know is that someone installed it for me in the far distant past and it's really helpful. SusunW (talk) 20:20, 23 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
That was one of my "jokey" rhetorical questions. It is what you are after. Gog the Mild (talk) 20:26, 23 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
OMG, Gog the Mild I am dying laughing. I am so clueless about technical stuff that it is impossible to even understand jokes about them. Give me the tool and I'll use it. Expect me to find it, install it, know how it magically makes things appear in color on my page, not possible. I appreciate you. SusunW (talk) 20:31, 23 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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@SusunW, Either way you wanna go. I'm also satisfied with it too just that a little corrections time to time will be good. I can he doing that myself while you continue the review. Mehn! That style and theme needs some one like you, who can understand. I will remove/merge certain uncited words there that I've forgotten where I cited it from. Till then, thanks so far.🔥🔥🔥 — Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 16:16, 23 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Okay, well, then I think we work on the references, since they are overarching and impact the entire article. When they are formalized, it will make it easier, I hope. SusunW (talk) 16:50, 23 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Looking at what Headbomb gave us, this one has all the colors I see. I hope you can figure out how to install it. If not, ask him, he's very helpful, as you saw. SusunW (talk) 23:06, 23 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
SusunW, sure. I was greedy to install all. — Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 00:50, 24 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
References
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So first I'm going to list a bunch of tools we will need:

  • Look at the MOS citation guide on "What Information to include", based on what kind of source.
  • The Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Titles of works says that titles (meaning the name of the articles cited) should be in title case. This Title converter is a handy website to convert the article titles.
  • The segments in an ISBN number mean things. They identify the language, the publisher, the specific work, etc. This ISBN converter is a handy tool to segment them. Technically it makes no difference if you use 10-digit or 13-digit numbers, except that in a FA review there will be reviewers who want them to be consistent, so I try to use all 13-digit numbers. If a book doesn't have an ISBN, you should look up the OCLC number, see below.
  • Worldcat is invaluable for finding OCLC and ISSN numbers. (Basically ISBN identifies books, ISSN identifies journals, and OCLC identifies specific works in journals or books. If you have the ISBN, it isn't necessary to cite the OCLC, but it is helpful (not required) to do so with journal articles.)
  • Because it is important that others are able to view the references, Wayback is a good tool to make sure your links are always accessible even if the host dies. It isn't necessary to always input the archive-url, archive-date, and url-status, but you definitely want to try to save your links in Wayback so that if a link dies those can be used.

Copy everything between Ngozi Adichie, whose English name was Amanda and also maintain a home in Nigeria.[13] into the sandbox. Save it with the edit summary "copied from Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie".

  • With each reference, make sure that you have at a minimum the required elements per the MOS. So for example the first reference is for "Nwanko". Required elements for a journal article are author, date, title, work name, volume, issue, page(s), links. (I personally add more, so I would change this one from {{cite journal|url=https://www.postcolonial.org/index.php/pct/article/download/2803/2612|website=postcolonial.org|volume=18|issue=3|date=2023|title=Traditions of Naming in Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie's Fiction|last=Nwankwọ|first=Izuu}} to {{cite journal|url=https://www.postcolonial.org/index.php/pct/article/download/2803/2612 |journal=Postcolonial Text |volume=18 |issue=3 |pages=1-17 |date=2023 |title=Traditions of Naming in Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie's Fiction |last=Nwankwọ |first=Izuu |publisher=[[Sorbonne Paris North University]] |location=Villetaneuse, France |issn=1705-9100}} (The last 3 fields I got from here. They aren't required, but I put them in because they are helpful information for other researchers who might be looking for the source. I also checked wayback, it has been archived; worldcat, but found no OCLC for the article; and WP, finding no article for the author.)
  • Move the reference to the section marked bibliography in alphabetical order by surname, and in the in-line citation add the page number like this {{sfn|Nwankwo|2023|p=3}} For all of the other in-line citations to this source, like after personality Ebuka Obi-Uchendu, under the name Amanda N. Adichie., verify that the information is on that page or change the page number.
  • The next source is a webpage <ref name="African Writer">{{cite web |url=https://www.africanwriter.com/in-the-footsteps-of-achebe-enter-chimamanda-ngozi-adichie/ |title=In the Footsteps of Achebe: Enter Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie |work=African Writer |date=15 October 2005 |first=Ike |last=Anya|access-date=31 March 2024}}</ref> and MOS says required elements are URL, author, title, website, publisher, date, page(s), if applicable, access-date. Per the contact page, the publisher is African Writer Magazine, location is Williamstown, New Jersey and there aren't any pages. (I checked wayback and it is archived; WP shows no article for the author)
  • The next source is <ref name="obit1">{{Cite web |last= |date=16 March 2021 |title=Chimamanda's Mother for Burial May 1 |url=https://www.thisdaylive.com/index.php/2021/03/17/chimamandas-mother-for-burial-may-1/ |access-date=12 March 2022 |website=[[This Day]] |language=en-US |archive-date=22 May 2022 |archive-url=https://web.archive.org/web/20220522165155/https://www.thisdaylive.com/index.php/2021/03/17/chimamandas-mother-for-burial-may-1/ |url-status=live }}</ref> You have it coded as a web page, but the link for This Day confirms it is a newspaper. MOS says for newspaper use author, title, newspaper, location, date, page(s) if applicable. (also I would give link and access-date because it is on the web). So, change "cite web" to "cite news", "website" to "work", and add location Apapa, Lagos. There isn't an author, so insert the anchor link |ref={{harvid|''This Day''|2021}}
  • Move the reference to the bibliography alphabetized under the title since there is no author, i.e. in the C's, and change all the in-line citations that point to that source to {{sfn|''This Day''|2021}}
  • I'm not going to evaluate every ref, just giving you examples. You will need to analyze each of them and I'll proof the changes. Just giving examples of different types and the next one I find that is something different is a book. <ref name="Tunca2">{{cite book|url=https://orbi.uliege.be/bitstream/2268/33339/1/Tunca_Adichie_African.pdf|publisher= L‟Harmattan|location=Paris|title=Présence africaine en Europe et audelà {{!}} African Presence in Europe and Beyond|editor1=Kathleen Gyssels|editor2=Bénédicte Ledent|date=2010|pages=291–309|chapter=Of French Fries and Cookies: Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie's Diasporic Short Fiction|last=Tunca|first=Daria|lang=en}} See p. 300.</ref> I would list this one like this {{cite book|chapter-url=https://orbi.uliege.be/bitstream/2268/33339/1/Tunca_Adichie_African.pdf |publisher=[[Éditions L'Harmattan]] |location=Paris |title=Présence africaine en Europe et au-delà |trans-title=African Presence in Europe and Beyond |editor1-last=Gyssels |editor1-first=Kathleen |editor2-last=Ledent |editor2-first=Bénédicte |date=2010 |pages=291–309 |chapter=Of French Fries and Cookies: Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie's Diasporic Short Fiction |last=Tunca |first=Daria |lang=en |isbn=978-2-296-12803-3}} (I find no WP articles for author/editors; link is saved in Wayback)
  • Move the reference to the bibliography alphabetized under Tunca and insert the in-line citation {{sfn|Tunca|2010|p=300}}

If you get stuck at any point, please ping me and I'm happy to jump in. SusunW (talk) 19:37, 23 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

SusunW, i will finish this by tomorrow. — Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 18:03, 25 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I've verified that the citations in the sandbox match the citations in the article. Noted these as I worked through them that are not in numerical order. You need to flip the anchors:
  • Chancellor of the university [10][2], should be [2][10] etc.
  • children she had read about.[11][16][13]
  • Philadelphia, Pennsylvania.[19][17]
  • introductory fiction.[17][16]
  • in 2008.[16][7]

I can see from looking at the ref section itself that there is still a lot of stuff to do, so I am going to let you continue with that, checking the required elements and adding missing fields and links; putting the titles into title case; fixing isbn, issn, etc.; and putting them in alphabetical order. I'll start on Style and Themes. SusunW (talk) 15:07, 27 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

SafariScribe The reference section needs to be finished ASAP so that you can start moving text back from the sandbox to the main document. Please work on this before doing anything else and ping me when you are ready for me to check required elements, formatting, and title case. It looks to me like everything from the top of the sand box to the end of the style section is ready to move back once the references are in compliance with the manner of style guidelines. For a featured article, a source review is required and you will be questioned not only about the reliability of sources and whether there is/is not close paraphrasing, but also about whether the formatting meets the various Manuals of Style. SusunW (talk) 19:03, 4 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
There I go! Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 19:06, 4 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I am done with the references too. You may now begin the review. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 19:02, 6 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
SafariScribe I am obviously not communicating this well. The references aren't done. Also be sure that you reply in the section related to your answers and not at the bottom of the page. What you need to do is look at each and every reference in the reference section. You are the person who is preparing the article for FA, so you need to go through each and every ref to make sure that it is properly cited with the required elements, with the name in title case, with identifiers such as ISBN, ISSN, OCLC when appropriate. You need to pull up each link to verify whether links given are live or dead and mark them as such. While you are checking the links, make sure they have been saved in wayback. I did Abba and Adichie (2000), so I will look at the first few in the reference section and tell you my observations, but I am not going to tell you what to do for each and every one of them. You're smart, you can look at them as easily as I can to see whether they have the required elements.
  • Adiche (2006) Run the title of the reference in the Title case converter. It will change the title from Truth and lies to Truth and Lies. Use the title case in the reference. The source is a newspaper. MOS says for newspaper give author, title, newspaper, location, date, page(s) if applicable. Location is London, UK.
  • Next one is Adichie (2014) Title is already in title case. Change website=Elle (magazine)|ELLE to =Elle (magazine)|Elle.com (it needs to be shown as the .com website because it is not the print magazine). Websites require URL, author, title, website, publisher, location, date, page(s), if applicable, access-date. Add publisher Hearst Magazines Digital Media and location New York, New York
  • Next one says Adichie (2021), but there is no way that Kirkius Reviews allowed Adichie to write her own review. The author has no byline. The title of the work is Notes on Grief by Chimamanda Ngozi Adiche. Websites require URL, author, title, website, publisher, location, date, page(s), if applicable, access-date. There isn't an author given, Change website=Kirkus Reviews to Kirkus Reviews|Kirkus Reviews.com to distinguish it from the print magazine. Add publisher Kirkus Media and location New York, New York. When you fix all of this move it to the "N"s in alphabetical order.
  • Next one is Agbo. You have it shown as a website, but it is a newspaper. Title is not in title case, website= needs to change to newspaper=, location needs to be London, UK

And no, I am not kidding, you need to look at every single ref.   SusunW (talk) 23:01, 6 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

If you are wondering why I am insisting that you do this section, it is because source review during FA is the most difficult part to get someone to do. If I don't do it and you do it, I can give it a pass in the FA review. SusunW (talk) 17:10, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Gog the Mild, sorry to bother you again, but this mentoring stuff is hard for me. If I format the refs may I still do the source review for a FA, or does that make me "involved"? (Even though I have tried to steer clear of editing the article directly, I won't review the prose because I do think am too involved since I did mostly write the style and themes part.) I literally have checked every single source so far (and will continue to the end) to ensure that the article data is confirmed by the source and that the sources have an editorial board or process, so it seems as if would be a huge waste of time to ask someone else to do it. I am having trouble communicating what I want so that we can start moving the done parts back to the article, so it seems that it would be easier if I just do it. Your thoughts? SusunW (talk) 14:53, 8 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Merely formatting the references and/or citations does not make you involved nor disqualify you from doing an FAC source review. I fully agree that with you having already done the grunt work, why should someone else redo it. When I used to do a lot of work at GoCE I never felt that I changed enough to prevent me coming back for another bite at FAC re a general or "prose" review. Declare any prior involvement and perhaps skip - and say you are skipping - any sections where you feel that you would be "marking your own homework". A view from the inside can be gold to the coordinators, just so long as they know how to weight it. Remember, "prose" - in the literal sense - is only one of several criteria one hopes is included in a "general" review. Gog the Mild (talk) 17:45, 9 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I'm sorry you are finding fault with my editing so far or the mentoring stuff. It isn't my intention of delaying. However, I know and appreciate you are doing great with this and your passion shows that your interest is not forgettable, if not, my edits and delay could have made you leave this review. Yet, you continued. I'm a Nigeria and likewise Africa, there is always difficulty with network related problems and light issues. Sometimes, I don't log to my PC because its down or because I am using it to charge my mobile instead. Also, off wiki stuffs keep popping especially for one (me) who is among the coordinators for my church's "ascension preparation" which is today. All I was hoping was to do the ref section after importing from main page and done with the the reviews. Since I can't log to my PC, it's usually difficult in accessing multiple tabs with mobile. All I plead is for "grace" and "time". I see these reviews and I'm.akways grateful and happy for that. If the liturgy ends in the afternoon, I will complete everything today. I will keep the promise. Regards. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 06:51, 9 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I am going through this. I was thinking maybe after everything, I will do that. Since it's awakening, I will look into it. Thanks. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 06:30, 9 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
SafariScribe I always find reviewing hard, trust me, it isn't you. In general, I have difficulties communicating all of the thoughts (and doubts) swirling in my head. And I totally understand internet issues. This past week we had to have our provider come to the house and replace all of our wiring because I couldn't keep a connection. He found that the wiring casing had just disintegrated (not unusual in our weather conditions). It is the hottest May on record, temps have been 118F/48C for over a week with humidity at 75%. I don't have air conditioning, so it has been hell. People in the Global North cannot possibly understand what we go through just to contribute to WP  . I will just do them and if Gog says I cannot review the sources, so be it. We know they will pass and I want to ensure that we have done everything we can to make the article the best that we are able to make it. SusunW (talk) 13:23, 9 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I have no problem. You said the truth. I believe this article will be done tonight or tomorrow. What do you think? I ca finish the ref review ASAP. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 13:27, 9 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
SafariScribe I think you need to work on the public speaking section and I'll do the refs. I also need to look more at the LGBT section, review the fashion section and we still have to do legacy. We can't rush it. Slow and steady will get us there. SusunW (talk) 13:39, 9 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
SafariScribe I've converted the refs and think we need to start moving stuff back to the main article, because people are editing and I have to keep rechecking info. Do this:
  1. copy the references section to the main article with a edit summary "copying from [[User:SafariScribe/sandbox]]" (do not delete the references section in the sandbox).
  2. in the infobox replace the long citation after spouse with {{sfn|Brockes|2017}} and the long citation after the voice sample with {{sfn|Adichie|2013}}
  3. Move and delete from the sandbox everything in the section "Early life, education, and family" (all of the info in Family and background, Education and influences, and Education abroad and early literary efforts) replacing what is in the same sections of the main article with the edit summary "moving from [[User:SafariScribe/sandbox]]"
  4. Move and delete from the sandbox everything in the section "Selected works" (all of the books, short fictions, videos) replacing what is in the main article section called "Writings" with the edit summary "moving from [[User:SafariScribe/sandbox]]"
I'll start checking public speaking next. (note, the 3 refs we haven't used yet are Adichie (2014) "Why Can't Women Love Fashion?", Anthony 2023, and Sefa-Boakye 2015. I am going to add info from Anthony to style. Perhaps the other 2 have useful information. We need to check. Also note that Brockes has information on a fashion collaboration with Dior, which should probably be added to the fashion section.) SusunW (talk) 14:23, 11 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
SafariScribe okay, I see you are still working on public speaking and I am noticing that it will require that we add to "critical reception", so please move the stuff we are done with as instructed above, and then continue with public speaking. I'll start reviewing fashion and continue with LGBT issues so we aren't tripping over each other. SusunW (talk) 17:02, 11 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Style and themes
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My first observation here is maybe we need to flip these and do themes first. Ishaya & Gunn, p. 71 say that theme is "what" and "style" is "how". This makes me think that we need to define her recurring themes first so that we can explain how she deals with them. Does that make sense? SusunW (talk) 16:58, 27 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

SusunW, I concur. — Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 22:05, 27 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
SafariScribe, I know it looks like I have done diddly squat today, but in truth, I have spent the day reading sources about her themes and style. I am working through how to structure the components and currently am leaning toward starting themes with something like this Her works, beginning with ''Purple Hibiscus'', generally examine cultural identity.{{sfn|Tunca|2010|p=295}} She frequently explores the intersections of class, culture, gender, (post-)imperialism, power, race, and religion.{{sfn|Dube|2018|p=222}} That would give us an intro to discuss conflicts (war, generational differences, family violence, assimilation, racism), personal identity (feminism, education, motherhood, relationships), and humanity (cross-cultural themes, i.e. war sucks, grief is difficult, etc.) I am probably going to read again all day tomorrow, but then hopefully will have some constructive directions. SusunW (talk) 22:59, 27 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
SusunW, thanks for your sacrifice. I owe you a rock! — Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 23:06, 27 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I am struggling with what is the best way to mentor you forward. Do you prefer to collaborate in the writing or do you want to write/rewrite the sections with sources and have me review them? I've sort of gone with both approaches and you can choose (when you get here after you finish the sourcing section). See Style on the draft and then here, themes, for examples of both approaches.
On presenting themes, I've changed my mind. Not a huge departure, but I found this lovely source, again by Tunda, which says Adichie, in a 2011 conversation with Kenyan writer [[Binyavanga Wainaina]] stated that the overriding theme of her works was love.{{sfn|Tunca|2018|p=111}} Using the feminist argument "[[The personal is political]]", love in her works typically is expressed through cultural identity, personal identity, and the human condition, and how these are impacted by social and political conflict.{{sfn|Tunca|2018|p=112}} She frequently explores the intersections of class, culture, gender, (post-)imperialism, power, race, and religion.{{sfn|Dube|2018|p=222}} The discussion of themes then would be broken down into those 3 sections: cultural identity, personal identity, and the human condition.
For the first paragraph, we build off of Her works, beginning with ''Purple Hibiscus'', generally examine cultural identity.{{sfn|Tunca|2010|p=295}} Igbo identity is typically at the forefront of her works, which celebrate Igbo language and culture, and African patriotism, in general.{{sfn|Ishaya|Gunn|2022|p=74}} Her writing is an intentional dialogue with the West, intent on reclaiming African dignity and humanity.{{sfn|Tunca|2018|p=111}} Then you need to evaluate sources to figure out how she makes her readers aware of what it is to be African - by discussing the colonial past, African views of sexuality, African response to religion, African patriarchy, etc.
Following that would be a paragraph on personal identity. How does she present feminism, education, motherhood, relationships in her work? As an example, Adichie's diasporic works consistently examine themes of belonging, adaptation, and discrimination.{{sfn|Tunca|2010|p=296}} In her diasporic fiction, this is often shown as an obsession to assimilate and is demonstrated by characters changing their names, {{sfn|Tunca|2010|p=297}} a common theme to most of Adiche's short fiction, which is used to point out hypocrisy.{{sfn|Tunca|2010|pp=299-300}} The last paragraph in themes would deal with the human condition, perhaps beginning with something like Adichie's works show a deep interest in humanity and the complexities of the human condition. She repeats themes like forgiveness and betrayal in works such as ''Half of a Yellow Sun'', when Olanna forgives her lover's infidelity or Ifemelu's decision to separate from her boyfriend in ''Americanah''.{{sfn|Tunca|2018|p=112}} Then developing it further with references showing the universal impact of war, violence, grief, etc.
This book contains seventeen chapters critically examining her work. There are tons of RS available from the WP library. I have listed here only sources available in the library so that we both have access to view them. We need to shy away from newspapers and website in the sections that analyze her works and adhere fairly strictly to peer-reviewed articles. (Olusola generates a warning error that it is a predatory journal, when I attempted to input the url. It cannot be used as a RS.) So focus on things like, [2].[3],[4],[5],[6][7],[8],[9],[10],[11],[12], and a ton of stuff at Project Muse. When analyzing sources, I find it helpful to write down whatever I think is important in the sources and then ask whether the author is talking about "what" (the theme), "how" (the style), or response (critical reception). In other words, I make notes writing down everything I think is important in a single source and then divide it into the appropriate section. Later, I smooth over the writing, but the critical analysis part must come first. SusunW (talk) 20:55, 28 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I think the section is probably done, unless you want to make changes. We will need someone else's input to evaluate it, since I can't really evaluate what I wrote. SusunW (talk) 18:11, 5 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you for the work you did in the "Theme & style" section. It isn't easy, Andi appreciate that. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 23:50, 5 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
SafariScribe Tru dat. But, doing the work to get an article to FA level, 1) ensures that the page is in compliance with guidelines and written to the highest possible standard, and 2) helps one learn how to be a better editor. My personal motivation is always the latter. I wouldn't write if I weren't learning. Literary analysis is not my thing, but socio-political change throughout history is, so it was at least more familiar territory to read the sources about her work. Hopefully, others who have more expertise in this area will review the article when we are done and can help improve the sections. SusunW (talk) 15:21, 6 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Critical reception
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SusunW, either way. But mostly, collaboration source fine for me. I plan carrying her awards to "critical reception" since they're still repeated there or so. Is that another thing all together? — Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 18:31, 29 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

SafariScribe, got you. On awards, IMO, that is where they should go. In fact, the chart/table needs to be converted to running text. I have been involved in several FA reviews wherein reviewers stated that they would not support articles with tables in them. SusunW (talk) 19:01, 29 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
SusunW, got ya. I'do concert the tables first to prose and get back herein. — Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 19:47, 29 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
SusunW: I just noticed something. While removing the charts on the main page, I realized that most of the awards like longlist, and shortlist should be directed to her book and not her biography. I intend removing them and adding one or two. What do you think? Please reply urgently if you see this, since I left workload there. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 17:43, 30 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
SafariScribe Agreed that the longlist, shortlist entries belong in the book articles. The actual awards, however, focusing only on the most prestigious, IMO should probably be included in the bio. Does that help? SusunW (talk) 18:23, 30 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
That's what I am proposing. Thanks! Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 18:32, 30 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I will do this one. However, the "critical reception" is done but I have a very small problem. Do I use those primary sources for her honourary degrees? Can you help me find third parties or even a single source that mentions them all. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 23:49, 5 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I think you will find when expanding the public speaking section that when she gave a lot of her talks, she was awarded an honorary degree. But, yes, will look for secondary sources when I review critical reception. I'll review that part next, while you finish the references. SusunW (talk) 15:27, 6 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
See below comments. I did find several sources that list groups and one source that lists 15 of the 16 she has received. SusunW (talk) 17:10, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'll start reviewing this section now:

  • My personal preference is to not use block quotes...although I like the one about chocolate that is framed on the right in the main article. I find block quotes in the running text distracting, perhaps that is just me, but in any case, if you choose to use one, I would not lead the paragraph off with one. If you are going to use a block quote, why would Luke Ndidi Okolo's (a lecturer of Nnamdi Azikiwe University) voice be more important than Ernest Emenyonu's (one of the most prominent globally-known scholars of African Literature)? Also unsure why you removed the link by Igwe which explains who Emenyonu is and why his opinion matters.
  • Adichie's work has garnered significant critical acclaim and numerous awards has no citation and isn't on page 306 of Tunca, the first citation in the section. Add cite to Ishaya & Gunn (2022) p. 75 and Hewett (2005) p. 75)
  • I think it reads better if after Book critics, you insert such as.
  • Adichie's words put you need to explain that the quote is talking about grief, because otherwise the poor reader has no clue what "this" is, perhaps Adichie's thoughts on grief "put a welcome, authentic voice ..."
  • She was praised in The Washington Post, link is not to a WAPO article. It is a link to an article by Weller in the Business Insider about Americana winning the "One Book, One New York" contest. The link is dead (needs to be marked url-status=dead, so one can access via the archived link), and doesn't contain the quote. In the main article, the quote is tied to the WAPO article, "A Moveable Feast", but I cannot access it. (Links saved in archive.org return an error that the "page does not exist" and the main link is paywalled, and unavailable even if I clear cookies for WAPO). Tunca (2018) p 109 confirms the "literary daughter" and its wide use and I would probably use her rather than the WAPO ref to "A Moveable Feast", which needs to be removed. (I have no idea if Weller is used elsewhere, but it doesn't belong here.)
  • I would probably name Jane Shilling, as she seems to be a notable literary critic for The Telegraph.
  • Link to Caine Prize is not functional, you have cited in the body as Caine Prize|2009 and in refs as Caine Prize|2013. Pick one, likely it was published in 2009, according to the 2013 archiving history. Add citation to Anya 2005 as a secondary source.
  • Secondary source for the BBC Prize for "That Harmattan Morning" is here. Unfortunately AllAfrica is paywalled, and a search on Leadership's site returns nothing, but we have access through the WP library to Gale A550692546. I would cite it as {{cite news |title=Chimamanda Adichie - Quintessence of a Literary Icon |url=https://allafrica.com/stories/201808060087.html |access-date=6 May 2024 |work=[[Leadership (newspaper)|Leadership]] |agency=[[AllAfrica]] |date=5 August 2018 |location=Abuja, Nigeria |id={{Gale|A550692546}}}}{{subscription required}} and include the information that "Her short story "The American Embassy" won the 2003 O. Henry Award and the David T. Wong International Short Story Prize from PEN International".
  • Not sure about the book sold on its own until it, he says it "took on a life of its own collecting [prizes and]... earning her association, endorsement, and admiration". We know that the publishing house did a lot of pre-publication marketing and that it earned awards prior to publication. Not sure we can say that those didn't influence sales. Perhaps it is better to say, "the book sold well and was awarded...". Obi-Young confirms Commonwealth Writers' Prize, Hurston-Wright Legacy Award, and the Orange Prize for Fiction. You need to pipe Women's Prize for Fiction as Orange Prize for Fiction, because when she won the award it wasn't called the Women's Prize. (Also note, Leadership above, calls the Commonwealth Prize the Best First Book Prize (2005), and says the Orange shortlist was in 2004. I'd probably add a citation to it and put the dates in parentheses.)
  • Half of a Yellow Sun garnered critical acclaims including should be just "acclaim" and after including add "winning". Reuters link to the article by Paul Majendie is fine, but the reference needs to include all the required fields for news. Replace the citation that says Anisfield-Wolf Book Awards 1977 (not sure how it could date to 1977 since the book wasn't even published at that time) with a citation to Leadership 2018.
  • It was later adapted into a film is unclear. The noun immediately preceding the pronoun "it" is the Anisfield Wolf Award. Name Half of a Yellow Sun. Also, fix the date. The article by Felperin is dated 2013, so the film was released in 2013 not 2014.
  • Americanah won the 2015 National Book Critics Circle Award is cited to Hobson, but that is a blog page. Remove that citation and cite it instead to Obi-Young 2021. I think you need to add a second citation to Flood of the Guardian which shows the award happened in 2014. Also the One Book, One New York award is cited to a press release. Add the citation to Weller from the Business Insider.
  • It was listed among the "10 Best Books of 2013"...the "it" here is Americana so a 2013 award should be given before the 2015 and 2017 awards. Move this sentence to come before Americanah won the 2015 National Book Critics Circle Award. Also, as the NY Times itself is primary, I would add a second citation to the Leadership 2018 article.
  • The Thing Around Your Neck won the National Book Critics Circle Award for Fiction is not supported by the link to the National Book Critics Award. The link shows that the 2014 award (given for 2013 publications) went to Americana. Were it me, I would cite this link above with Flood and include the parenthetical explanation for Americana. I do find that The Thing Around Your Neck was the runner-up to the Dayton Literary Peace Prize for 2010,Gale A247445488 and [13] and if you include that it should go before any of the awards of Americana.
  • One story from the book, "Ceiling" needs to come before any mention of Americana.
  • Her memoir, Notes On Grief was positively praised by Kirkus Reviews as "an elegant, moving contribution to the literature of death and dying. Needs to move up to the first paragraph as it isn't a prize/award, which is what this second paragraph is speaking about.
  • Adichie's literary works earned her recognitions including the MacArthur Fellowship in 2008, should be recognition and delete MacArthur Fellowship because we already included it in the education section. She didn't win the Carnegie Medal according to the source, she was a finalist for it. Link W. E. B. Du Bois Medal. Link for the Seattle Times defaults to the main page of the paper, not the article. Mark it as url-status=dead. I also think you should include the 2016 Barnard Medal of Distinction.
  • She was listed in Chronologically, I would list these first and then the Carnegie/Du Bois Medals. I'd probably remove the primary sources to 20 Under 40 and the Hay Festival and cite them to Leadership 2018
  • Also in 2019, she was selected as one of 15 women to appear on the cover of British Vogue, guest-edited by Meghan, Duchess of Sussex probably should move down to views and a section (still to be created) on feminist fashion. I'd replace it with the Winner of Winners of the Women's Prize for Fiction in 2020.
  • honourary degrees The Guardian (Nigeria) says she had received 16 honorary degrees as of March 2022 and lists Yale, University of Pennsylvania, Edinburg, Duke University, Georgetown, and Johns Hopkins. You could add Duke and Penn if you want. According to her website, her first one was this one. Leadership 2018 lists Johns Hopkins University (2016). Haverford College (2017), and the University of Edinburgh (2017). I'd replace the primary sources with the secondary one. This lists American University (10 May), Georgetown University (18 May), Yale University (20 May), and Rhode Island School of Design (June 2019). This one from Black Enterprise lists 15 of them: "Eastern Connecticut State University, Johns Hopkins University, Haverford College, Williams College, the University of Edinburgh, Duke University, Amherst College, Bowdoin College, SOAS University of London, American University, Georgetown University, Yale University, Rhode Island School of Design, Northwestern University, and the Catholic University of Louvain. Totally your call if you want to list them all or just pick the ones most often cited.
  • In 2022, Adichie rejected the award I'd probably word this differently, because it doesn't say what the award was. Perhaps:President of Nigeria Muhammadu Buhari selected her to be honored as a recipient of the Order of the Federal Republic in 2022,(cited to this source by Ufuoma. Note that he also talks about fashion stuff which should be included below in that section) but Adichie rejected the national distinction.(cited to Olaiya 2022)

Okay, I think that's it for this section. Ping me when you have addressed these. SusunW (talk) 16:55, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I am done with the critical reception. Chicken and see if there is any omit. Thanks! Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 20:18, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Don't worry it I don't mark {{Done}}. I did all and I have less time (not busy now). I will look at the views and lecture review you dropped. Thanks! Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 20:21, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Okay, this section looks okay to me. Good job with it. SusunW (talk) 14:33, 8 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

We need to work on the critical reception of her speaking. So, I will make points here as I go through the speaking section.

  • When you move Adichie has been praised for her writing and same way, for her speeches and lectures and Whenever speaking, Adichie usually observe a long pause especially when the audience reacts to something hilarious or actable. It is basically to give them time either to applaud or she'll laugh along.[22] to here, insert them after the first paragraph and before In 2002, Adichie was shortlisted...Perhaps, Much as her writing has earned accolades, Adichie has gained wide praise for her speeches and lectures.(cited to Camminga p 818, Anasuya 2015 and Wagner 2015) Journalist Shreya Ila Anasuya described Adichie's public speaking as delightful and articulate, noting that her timing allowed sufficient time for the audience response, before she continued by distilling "her wisdom into the simplest and most compassionate of telling".(cite Anasuya) Critic Erica Wagner called Adiche a "star", stating that she spoke with fluency and power, exuding authority and confidence.(cite to Wagner 2015) Media and Communications professor Erika M. Behrmann, who reviewed Adichie's TEDxEuston Talk, "We Should All Be Feminists" praised her as a "gifted storyteller", who was able to intimately connect with her audience. Behrmann stated that the talk used language that made it relatable to children and adults, giving a basic foundation for students to learn about feminist ideas and issues, as well as learning about how gender is socially-constructed by culture. She also said that Adichie demonstrated that gender inequality is a global challenge, and offered solutions to combat disparities by focussing less on gender roles and more on developing skills based upon ability and interests.(cite to Behrmann, p. 315) However, Behrmann criticized the lack of discussion in the talk on the intersectional aspects of peoples' identities and Adichie's reliance on binary terms (boy/girl, man/woman, male/female), which left "little room to imagine and explore how transgender and genderqueer" people contribute to or are impacted by feminism.(cite to Behrmann p. 316) Emenyonu said that her "talks, blogs, musings on social media, essays and commentaries, workshop mentoring for budding writers and lecture circuit discourses...expand and define her mission as a writer".(cite Emenyonu 2017, p 1) Scholar Grace Musila said Adiche's brand encompasses her reputation as a writer, public figure, and fashionista which expanded her reach and the legitimacy of her ideas far beyond academic circles.(cite Musila 2020, p 807)
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I don't think the article focuses nearly enough on her public speaking. Were it me, I would re-title the section "Public speaking", so as not to confuse academic lecturing with her talks/presentations. If she does also work as a visiting professor, then you can call it "Public speaking and lecturing", but I have found no sources that show she has done that. There are only 3 lectures listed and then another 5 "talks" without any explanation of their content appear as a list lower down. I propose restructuring this section, similarly to what we did for "writing" without the headings, without the lists, and just with prose and combining the stuff below from "talks" here. Start with a description of her speaking and then discuss each of her prominent talks. There are a lot of sources that talk about her speaking style and content, such as [14],[15],[16][17],[18],[19],[20] (full view from the WP Library @ Gale A551123104),[21],[22],[23],[24],[25],[26]. She also regularly gives commencement speeches. I don't think we need to list them all, just simply give examples like [27],[28],[29],[30],[31]. SusunW (talk) 18:11, 5 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

You need to work on this section. We cannot just list the videos, particularly because of the notability of some of the talks. It is similar to her writing, which is discussed it detail, but then listed titles in selected works. SusunW (talk) 13:11, 9 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

SafariScribe I am done with views, I think. Are you finished with public speaking and should I review it? SusunW (talk) 16:40, 14 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

  • Adichie has been praised for her writing and same way, for her speeches and lectures I think this needs to be moved to "critical reception". (Start a new paragraph after the first one and before In 2002, Adichie was shortlisted.)
  • While she claims to love Lagos and spends most of her time there, cited loving the culture, spirit, resilience and initiative of its people, which has improved her speaking life. Using people-watching as a strategy including staying on the traffic on a good mood and seeing other people, the hustlers, hawkers, lawyers and all other profession. Those she will incorporate in her lectures. The different cultural diversity in Nigeria especially of her native Igbo culture, and Yoruba culture for instance said "there is a showiness to the Nigerian national character which cuts across our different cultural groups."[20] I think this needs to be moved to style following underscore a particular point of view. but I'd condense it a bit, perhaps, She often watches the hustlers, hawkers, and professionals on the streets of Lagos, taking note of the cultural diversity in the city, which includes Igbo and Yoriba cultural expressions. These observations are incorporated into her writing and lectures, to represent the diverse "showiness of the Nigerian national character", and spirit, resilience, and initiative of its people.(cited to Calkin)
  • Adichie who's articulate and funny when speaking usually inserts personal anecdotes before generating a main point of her talk. I moved this to style so delete it here.
  • Adichie has sharp words which she uses in addressing her audience especially when it comes to the code of silence known to have governed the Americana.[21] This needs to go in chronological order. I think we need to expand it a bit because it's an important point. Perhaps, In addressing her audience at the PEN World Voices Festival in 2015, she pointed out cultural differences between Nigeria and America, such as the code of silence which in the United States often acts as censorship. People in American seem to fear being offensive or disrupting "the careful layers of comfort" they have shielded themselves with, whereas in Nigeria, people expect pain. She also stated that molding a story to fit an existing narrative, such as characterising the Boko Haram's kidnapping of schoolgirls as equal to the Taliban's treatment of women, is a form of censorship which hides the truth that Boko Haram opposes western-style education for anyone.(cite Lee 2015)
  • Whenever speaking, Adichie usually observe a long pause especially when the audience reacts to something hilarious or actable. It is basically to give them time either to applaud or she'll laugh along.[22] move to "critical reception"
  • In 2009, Adichie delivered a TED talk entitled "The Danger of a Single Story" end it here and cite to Wagner 2015. Move "The Danger of a Single Story", as of 2024, is one of the top twenty most-viewed TED talks of all time.[23] to "Legacy" but we cannot cite it to Ted Talks and we have to recognize that the number of views change over time. (While looking for a secondary source, I discovered 2 more prizes and just added them to the text.  )
  • In the talk, Adichie expressed her concern for the under-representation of various cultures I don't find that in Wagner, but looking at Anasuya and This I think perhaps, In the talk Adichie expressed her concern that accepting one version of a story perpetrates myths and stereotypes(cited to Anasuya) because it fails to recognise the complexities of human life and situations.(cite Brooks 2016) She argued that under-representation of the layers that make up a person's identity or culture deprives them of their humanity.(cite both Anasuya and Brooks)
  • Move American critic and author Erica Wagner called it an "accessible essay on how we might see the world through another's eyes."[24] to critical reception. (I suggested text Critic Erica Wagner called Adiche a "star", stating that she spoke with fluency and power, exuding authority and confidence. and I would input this after that, i.e. Wagner called "The Danger of a Single Story" an "accessible essay on how we might see the world through another's eyes". cited to Wagner 2015)
  • has many culture should be "cultures" (Last sentence is fine.)
  • In the talk, Adichie addressed her view of African feminism towards class, race, gender, and sexuality.[24] I don't find this in Wagner and Behrmann says it was a global assessment of feminism. Perhaps In the talk, Adichie stressed the importance of reclaiming the word "feminist"(cited to Anasuya) to combat the negative connotations previously associated with it.(cited to Behrmann p. 315) She said that feminism should be about exploring the intersections of oppression, such as how class, race, gender, and sexuality impact equal opportunities and human rights,(cited to Anasuya and Wagner 2015) causing global gender gaps in education, pay, and power.(cited to Behrmann p. 315)
  • Move She said particularly to the gender issue, how she is becoming less interested in the way the West sees continent Africa, and more interested in how Africa sees itself.[27] to "style" (I'd place it after the above move ending in initiative of its people. and perhaps, Adichie has increasingly developed a contemporary Pan-Africanist view of gender issues, becoming less interested in the way the West sees Africa and more interested in how Africa sees itself.(cited to Dabiri)
  • Adichie said that the problem with gender is that "it shapes who we are" and "Gender as it functions today is a grave injustice". On 8 December 2021, Adichie during an interview with BBC News on the responsibility of being a feminist stated that "she did not want another person to define her responsibility and she rather defined her responsibility for herself but did not mind using her platform to speak up for someone else." There are no citations for this entire bit. It either needs to be cited, or it needs to be removed.
  • Parts of Adichie's TEDx talk were sampled in the song "Flawless" by Beyoncé on 13 December 2013.[28] When asked in an NPR interview for her reaction to Beyoncé sampling her talk, Adichie responded that anything that gets young people talking about feminism is a very good thing.[29] She later qualified the statement in an interview with the Dutch newspaper De Volkskrant: "Another thing I hated was that I read everywhere: now people finally know her, thanks to Beyoncé, or: she must be very grateful. I found that disappointing. I thought: I am a writer and I have been for some time and I refuse to perform in this charade that is now apparently expected of me: 'Thanks to Beyoncé, my life will never be the same again.' That's why I didn't speak about it much."[30] Adichie has been outspoken against critics who question the singer's credentials as a feminist and has said: "Whoever says they're feminist is bloody feminist."[31] I think all of this needs to move to "legacy" and we'll deal with it there, but you need to make it clear that it's about "We Should All Be Feminists".
  • On 15 March 2012, Adichie delivered the Commonwealth Lecture 2012 at the Guildhall, London, addressing the theme "Connecting Cultures" and explaining: "Realistic fiction is not merely the recording of the real, as it were, it is more than that, it seeks to infuse the real with meaning. As events unfold, we do not always know what they mean. But in telling the story of what happened, meaning emerges and we are able to make connections with emotive significance."[32][33] This happened in March 2012, "We Should All Be Feminists" happened in December, so the Commonwealth Lecture should come before the Ted Talk. I note the following, both of the sources are primary, so we need secondary ones. Calkin says she was the youngest person ever selected to deliver the lecture and this talks about how literature can build bridges across cultures. Perhaps, On 15 March 2012, Adichie became the youngest person to deliver a Commonwealth Lecture.(cited to Calkin 2013 and Stephen-David 2013) The presentation was given at the Guildhall in London addressing the theme "Connecting Cultures",(cited to Stephen-David 2013) and then the quote.(cited to Commonwealth Foundation 2012 only) Then follow that up with She stated that literature could build bridges between cultures because it united the imaginations of everyone who read the same books.(cited to Adewunmi 2012}
  • Move On 30 November 2022, Adichie delivered the first of the BBC's 2022 Reith Lectures, inspired by Franklin D. Roosevelt's "Four Freedoms" speech.[34][35] to the end of the section as chronologically it happened last. I also think you need to add something like, Her talk explored how to balance the right to freedom of speech against those who undermine fact-based truths with partisan messaging.(cited to Vanguard 2022)
  • After "We Should All Be Feminists" you need to input In 2015, she returned to the theme of feminism at the commencement address for Wellesley College and reminded students that they should not allow their ideologies to exclude other ideas and should "minister to the world in a way that can change it. Minister radically in a real, active, practical, get your hands dirty way".(cited to Anasuya)
  • Then maybe just list: She has spoken at many commencement ceremonies, including at Williams College (2017),(cited to this), Harvard University (2018),(cited to this) and American University (2019). (cited to this Adichie was the first African to speak at Yale University's Class Day, giving a lecture in 2019 which encouraged students to be open to new experiences and ideas and "find a way to marry idealism and pragmatism because there are complicated shades of grey everywhere".(cited to this)
  • Adichie who was the co-curator of the PEN World Voices, along the director Laszlo Jakab Orsos, sat on a front-row seat for the debates about Charlie Hebdo who was said had overshadowed the festival events. Adichie, in her Arthur Miller Freedom to Write lecture, which marked the closing of the festival told the audience that "there is a general tendency in the United States to define problems of censorship as essentially foreign problems." In contrast between the Nigerian and American hospitals, Adichie argued that American citizens seem to be "comfortable", thus bringing a "dangerous silencing" amidst the United States public conversation. Adichie’s address sparked a feeling of sadness following the release of her father, who was kidnapped in Nigeria. Though wasn't mentioned in the lecture, she called Nigerians people who considers "pain" for living.[21] I don't think it necessary to get into the controversy about Hebdo. Maybe change the first sentence to Along with Laszlo Jakab Orsos,(cite to Lee) Adichie co-curated the 2015 Pen World Voices Festival in New York City.(cite it to Sefa-Boakye 2015) The festival theme was contemporary literature of Africa and its diaspora.(cite it to Sefa-Boakye 2015) She closed the conference with her Arthur Miller Freedom to Write lecture, which focused on censorship and using one's voice to speak out against injustices. Although she did not speak of her father's recent kidnapping and release, writer Nicole Lee of The Guardian said that the crowd was aware of her personal ordeal, which made her speech "all the more poignant".(cited to Lee)
  • In 2016, Adichie was invited to speak about her thoughts on Donald Trump's election to the US Presidency for the BBC's program Newsnight. When she arrived at the studio, she was informed that the format would be a debate between her and R. Emmett Tyrrell, Jr., a Trump supporter and the editor-in-chief of The American Spectator, a conservative magazine.(cite Pearce 2017 and Cain 2016) Tempted to walk out of the interview, Adichie decided to continue because she wanted to discuss her views on how economic disenfranchisement had led to Trump's victory.(cite Pearce 2017) The debate turned adversarial when Tyrrell said "I do not respond emotionally like this lady",(cite Cain 2016) and then "Trump hasn't been a racist".(cite to The Root (magazine) article 2016). She countered his statements and a gave an example citing Trump's statement that Judge Gonzalo P. Curiel could not be impartial in the case Low v. Trump University because of his Mexican heritage.(cite to The Root 2016). After the debate, she wrote on her Facebook that she felt ambushed by the BBC and that they had "sneakily [pitted her] against a Trump supporter" to create adversarial entertainment. In response, the BBC issued an apology for not informing her of the nature of the interview, but claimed they had designed the program to offer balanced perspectives.(cite to Cain 2016) (Should this go in controversies, maybe a topic about politics, or just stay here? Other info Pearce says she is a permanent resident of the US with Nigerian nationality. Cain says she was an enthusiastic supporter of Hilary Clinton.)
  • She delivered the 2nd annual Eudora Welty Lecture on 8 November 2017 at the Lincoln Theatre in Washington, D.C. The lecture was presented to a sold-out crowd and focused on her development as a writer.(cite to this) That year, she also spoke at the Foreign Affairs Symposium held at Johns Hopkins University. Her talk focused on the fragility of optimism in the face of the current political climate.(cite to Pearce 2017) Adiche and Hilary Clinton delivered the 2018 PEN World Voices Festival, Arthur Miller Freedom to Write Lecture at Cooper Union in Manhattan. Although the speech was centered on feminism and censorship, Adichie's questioning of why Clinton's Twitter profile began with "wife" instead of her own accomplishments became the focus of media attention,(cite Abimbola 2018, Grady 2018, Adebayo 2018.) prompting Clinton to change her Twitter bio.(cite Adebayo 2018.) Later that year, she spoke at the Frankfurt Book Fair in Germany, about breaking the cycles which silence women's voices. She stated that studies had shown that women read literature created by men and women, but men primarily read works by other men. She urged men to begin to read women writers' works to gain an understanding and be able to acknowledge women's struggles in society.(cite to Saeed 2018) In 2019, as part of the Chancellor's Lecture Series, she gave the speech "Writer, Thinker, Feminist: Vignettes from Life" at Vanderbilt University's Langford Auditorium. The speech focused on her development as a storyteller, and her focus on trying to address systemic inequalities to create a more inclusive world.(cite to this.
  • Then something about speaking at conferences. Adichie has been the keynote speaker at numerous global conferences.(cite to Bernardi|Picarelli|2022|pp=218–219) In 2018, she spoke at the 7th Annual International Igbo Conference, and encouraged the audience to preserve their culture and fight misconceptions and inaccuracies about Igbo heritage.(cite to this She revealed in her presentation "Igbo bu Igbo" ("Igbo Is Igbo") that she only speaks to her daughter in Igbo, which was the only language her daughter spoke at the age of two.(Cite to Mbamalu 2018) Speaking at the inaugural Gabriel García Márquez Lecture in Cartagena, Colombia in 2019, Adichie spoke about violence in the country and urged leaders to focus on educating citizens from childhood to reject violence and sexual exploitation and end violent behaviors. Her speech was given in the Nelson Mandela barrio, one of the poorest neighborhoods of the city, and she encouraged black women to work with men to change the violent culture and celebrate their African roots.(cite to Rojas 2019) Her keynote address at the 2020 Congreso Futuro (Future Conference) in Santiago, Chile focused on the importance of listening. She said that to become an effective advocate, a person must understand a wide variety of perspectives. She stressed that people become better problem solvers if they learn to listen to people with whom they may not agree, because other points of view help everyone recognise their common humanity.(cite to Espinoza Cárdenas 2020) She was the keynote speaker of the 2021 Reykjavik Literature Festival held in the Háskólbíó cinema at the University of Iceland, and presented the talk In Pursuit of Joy: On Storytelling, Feminism, and Changing My Mind.(cited to this)
SafariScribe I am done with this part of the review, I think, but after the text is moved around we'll need to review all of the sections that text was moved to to make sure the flow is okay and that we haven't missed anything critical. SusunW (talk) 15:16, 20 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks. I am incorporating them to the draft. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 15:24, 20 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@SusunW, I am done with this one. What next? Thanks. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 17:21, 20 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
SafariScribe Okay, I'll review it. Perhaps work on the things that haven't been put in legacy yet? SusunW (talk) 17:28, 20 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I think I'm happy with it. Frustrating that we cannot find much academic analysis, but we did incorporate what we found. I think given that Emenyonu didn't include her lectures and Grace Musila says there hasn't been an academic evaluation of her speaking, I think we have to rely on "best sources available". I edited all the refs for MOS (thanks for formatting them), so I think we are down to checking style, critical reception, and legacy. SusunW (talk) 21:24, 20 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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Not exactly sure if views is the appropriate title, perhaps views and controversy? Not sure, will ponder on it. (note to self, look at Brockes for some of the controversies.)

Feminist fashion:

  • This section repeats "feminism" as a topic. We have already discussed her feminist views, but what we don't have is any inclusion of fashion. Perhaps it is better to call it "feminist fashion". (Background history, feminists in the past were typically stereotyped as butch lesbians, or women who eschewed fashion and femininity for androgyny. Feminist fashion let's people know it's a political statement.) There's both scholarly work and media about her involvement.[32],[33],[34] (If you cannot access this entire book chapter, you need to order it from the Resource exchange, chapter doi=10.4324/9780429264405-22, because we cannot ignore a significant RS devoted to her involvement.), [35],[36],[37], [38],[39],[40]. There's obviously more. This article from The Cut gives her personal take, as does this one. Also this says that she won a Shorty Award in 2018 for her "Wear Nigerian Campaign". Also think her photo on the cover of Vogue and discussion about that in "Critical reception" needs to be moved to this section. SusunW (talk) 15:09, 7 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@SusunW, courtesy ping to restoring the sandbox. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 16:39, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
SafariScribe The sandbox should never be deleted. It contains the editing history of the article, because it is where we are working out the text before it goes into the main article. Since we have been restructuring it and moving major sections around, it is disruptive to do that in main space until we are sure where each section goes in the flow. I will go back to reviewing, and I you need to make changes to the draft in the sandbox and not move anything until we are in agreement that it is ready for mainspace. SusunW (talk) 17:05, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Ok. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 17:07, 12 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Adichie, in a 2014 article written for Elle.com(cite the article by Adichie 2014) Then perhaps, described that she became aware of a Western social norm that "women who wanted to be taken seriously were supposed to substantiate their seriousness with a studied indifference to appearance".(cite to Mannur p 411)
  • I think here it is probably important to say how that contrasts with the Nigerian concept. Bernardi & Picarelli, it's on the second page of the chapter, but there are no page numbers (I get frustrated with e-books because they have no page numbers, urg!), says that the western concept contrasted with her upbringing in Nigeria, because in West Africa the attention that a person pays to their fashion and style correlates to the amount prestige and respectability they will be given by society.(cite {{sfn|Bernardi|Picarelli|2022|p=216}} (I am going to see if the RX can get us a copy with page numbers. I'll be back in a sec. Okay, I did that, hopefully they will find a copy and email it to us both.)
  • From She wrote much on Western culture and how she sees women desiring seriousness ends up being judged of their dressing to racism, and class structuring Perhaps, She began to recognize that people were judged for the way that they dressed. Particularly women writers wrote disparagingly about or trivialized attention to fashion,(cite Mannur p 412) depicting woman who enjoyed fashion and makeup as silly, shallow, or vain and without any depth.(cite Medrano 2016) Acknowledging the relationship between beauty, fashion, and style, and socio-political inequalities, Adichie became committed to promoting body positivity as a means to acquire agency.(cite Mannur p 412 and {{sfn|Bernardi|Picarelli|2022|p=216}}) She began to focus on body politics, taking particular pride in her African features such as her skin color, hair texture, and curves,(cite {{sfn|Bernardi|Picarelli|2022|p=215}}) and wearing bold designs featuring bright colours to make a statement about self-empowerment.(cite {{sfn|Bernardi|Picarelli|2022|p=216}})
  • Okay, I'm going to move the bits around as they are confusing to me being out of chronological order and the same event is mentioned in multiple paragraphs.
  • Adichie was included in the 2016 Vanity Fair's International Best-Dressed Lists, while citing Michelle Obama as her styling idol.[142][143] link Vanity Fair's International Best-Dressed Lists and change ", while citing" to and cited.
  • Adichie's TED talk, "We Should All Be Feminists" which was part of her view of femininity and fashion feminism recognized by singer Beyoncé.[144] Adichie's work, referenced by Maria Grazia Chiuri, the first female creative director of American fashion company Dior in her debut collection advocated for fashion and makeup and how they are mutually not exclusive from feminism. is rather confusing. We've discussed the recognition by Beyoncé previously, so I would omit that and Dior is a French company. Perhaps, That year, Maria Grazia Chiuri, the first female creative director of French fashion company Dior, featured a tee-shirt with the title of Adichie's TED talk, "We Should All Be Feminists" in her debut collection.(cite Brockes 2017 and Medrano 2016)
  • Adichie saying that the politics of the company had never been her interest despite being a fashion company and her, loving fashion emerged from the appointment of Grazia as the first female ever, and her question becomes why the company had lacked female creative directors over the years. For Adichie, it is a shame for women lacking to defend their love of fashion and beauty.[145] She appeared in the front-row of the company's spring runway show during the Paris Fashion Week, as a honoured guest where T-shirts were printed with writings, "We Should All be Feminists."[146] Perhaps, Adichie was surprised to learn that Dior had never had a woman head its creative division and agreed to a collaboration with Chiuri, who invited her as an honoured guest to sit in the front-row of the company's spring runway show during the Paris Fashion Week.(cite Brockes 2017, Medrano 2016, and Ryan 2017)
  • I think here would be a good place to insert Matthew Lecznar's assessment. Perhaps, Scholar Matthew Lecznar, stated that Adichie often challenges feminist stereotypes through references to fashion. He called her allowing Dior to feature her text a skillful way to use various media forms to not only deliver political messaging, but also to develop her image as a multi-faceted intellectual, literary, and fashionable "transmedia phenomenon".(cite to Lecznar p. 168)
  • She became the face of No.7, a makeup brand division of British drugstore retailer Boots. link [Boots (company)#No. 7 Protect & Perfect Intense Beauty Serum|No. 7]] and fix link for the company, it's linked to footwear but needs to be linked to Boots (company)
  • Her view of feminism seems to be different to the 21st-century world of fashion, that in her book Dear Ijeawele, or A Feminist Manifesto in Fifteen Suggestions, she argued that feminine associated acts like fashion and makeup remains a culture of sexism.[143] I'd reword this a bit because Safronova is talking about the Facebook post, not the book, perhaps, In her 2016 Facebook post Dear Ijeawele, or A Feminist Manifesto in Fifteen Suggestions, Adichie argued that minimizing femininity and its expression through fashion and makeup is "part of a culture of sexism".(cited to Safronova) (If this is the first mention of Facebook in the article, it should be linked.)
  • On May 8, 2017, Adichie through her Facebook page created awareness for her "Wear Nigerian" campaign following the termed "disastrous economic policies" which lead to decline in market value of the Nigerian naira and trouble for the middle class (usually seen in her literally works),[147] and to the launch of the "Buy Nigerian to Grow the Naira" campaign endorsed by the Government of Nigeria. is a really long sentence. Perhaps On May 8, 2017, Adichie announced her "Wear Nigerian" campaign on her Facebook page. The government of Nigeria had recently launched a "Buy Nigerian to Grow the Naira", after the Nigerian naira experienced a devaluation.(cite Idowu 2017 and Hobdy 2020)
  • Following her fashion life, the campaign was to patronise and publicise Nigerian fashion brands as well as local designers by wearing their products in public. The clothes which would be worn will be documented in a new Instagram page to be managed by her nieces Chisom and Amaka Looking at Bernardi & Picarelli pp=218-220 I'd probably word this a bit differently. Perhaps, She set up an Instagram account which was managed by her nieces Chisom and Amaka,(cite Idowu 2017) and gained around 600,000 followers.(Bernardi & Picarelli p 218) Her goal was to help protect Nigeria's cultural heritage by showcasing the quality of craftsmanship and use of innovative hand-made techniques, materials and textiles being used by Nigerian designers. (Bernardi & Picarelli p 217) Just as important was the idea of persuading Nigerians to buy local products, as opposed to purchasing garments abroad, as had been done in the past.(Bernardi & Picarelli p 218) The posts on her page do not focus on her private life, but instead highlight her professional appearances all over the world, in an effort to show that style has the power to push boundaries and have global impact.(Bernardi & Picarelli pp 218-219)
  • Insert that she won a Shorty Award in 2018 for her Wear Nigerian Campaign.(cite to Agbo|2018a) before In 2019, she was selected
  • In a discussion with the former Chancellor of Germany Angela Merkel at Düsseldorfer Schauspielhaus, Adichie who wore a printed attire which was made from her mother's wrapper traditionally tied around the waist, spoke on politics and how it affects feminism and fashion. Alongside journalists Miriam Meckel and Léa Steinacker, Adichie argues that the world has survived many political disorder while she believed still, there is hope. She sees fashion as a media for promoting talents especially in Nigeria. Perhaps, In a 2021 discussion at Düsseldorfer Schauspielhaus, Adichie spoke with the former Chancellor of Germany, Angela Merkel, and journalists Miriam Meckel and Léa Steinacker. They discussed that for democracy to survive, people needed to preserve their traditions and history, be informed about intolerance, and learn to accept diversity. Adichie said that she often uses fashion to educate people about diversity and Merkel confirmed that it could serve as a cultural bridge to bring people together globally.(cite Gopalakrishnan)
SafariScribe Okay, fingers crossed that the power issues are resolved. Sorry about yesterday. I see that you have done these, but in the main article, not in our working draft. I've copied the text from there to the sandbox so that we can finalize the text and make sure the refs are linked properly.

Religion:

  • Adichie is a Catholic and was raised Catholic Catholic should be liked at its first use in the article, not here. It's also redundant to mention it multiple times in the same sentence. Perhaps: Although Adichie was raised as a Catholic, she considers ...
  • The article by Paul Elie makes a couple of important points that I think need to be included. 1) Differences in ideology between Catholic and Church Missionary Society leaders caused divisions in Nigerian society during her childhood and 2) she left the church around the time of the inauguration of Pope Benedict XVI.
  • I would probably move and alter the She has called for Christian and Muslim leaders to follow the point about Christian divisions and modify it to say As sectarian tensions in Nigeria arose between Christians and Muslims in 2012, she urged leaders to preach... Also note Shariatmadari is a dead link and needs to be marked url-status=dead
  • Having previously identified as agnostic while raising her daughter Catholic, she has also identified as culturally Catholic. In a 2021 Humboldt Forum, she stated that she had returned to her Catholic faith. is not supported by the cited source. This article from the Premium Times is the closest I can find. I think perhaps: Adichie stated that her relationship to Catholicism is complicated because she identifies culturally as Catholic, but feels that the focus of the church on money and guilt are not in-line with her values.(cite it to Augoye 2021) She acknowledged that the birth of her daughter and election of Pope Francis drew her back to the Catholic faith and a decision to raise her child as Catholic.(cited to Elie) But by 2021, Adichie stated that she was a nominal Catholic and only attended mass when she could find a progressive community focused on uplifting humanity. She clarified that "I think of myself as agnostic and questioning".(cite it to Augoye 2021)

LGBT rights: Overall, I think that perhaps undue weight is given to this subject and we need to trim it, but we need to weigh carefully how we do that, so as not to distort its importance by giving it too little attention. I'll probably return to it several times, while weighing it. Please feel free to agree or disagree.

  • NewsWire NGR link is dead needs to be marked url-status=dead. Also I note that while she is credited as writing it, the byline of the piece is for Mohammed Useni, so perhaps list him as editor?
  • I think stating that actual crimes have victims and consensual homosexual conduct between adults does not rise to that standard of crime, making the law unjust goes beyond what the article says. She did not state that, she questioned it. Perhaps that is splitting hairs, but to my mind "it is/it does" is different than "I think". Perhaps: Adichie supports LGBT rights in Africa and has questioned whether consensual homosexual conduct between adults rises to the standard of a crime, as crime requires a victim and harm to society. When Nigeria passed an anti-homosexuality bill in 2014, she was among the Nigerian writers who objected to the law, calling it unconstitutional, unjust, and "a strange priority to a country with so many real problems". She stated that adults expressing affection for each other did not cause harm to society, but that the law would "lead to crimes of violence". I'm happy to discuss this and you can certainly disagree with my interpretation.
  • Malec says nothing about Wainaina being gay, nor what Adichie's thoughts about his sexuality were. This does. Perhaps after Adichie was also close friends with Kenyan openly gay writer Binyavanga Wainaina add ", who she credited with demystifying and humanising homosexuality when he publicly came out in 2014." cited to both Malec and Flood (2019).
  • when he died should start a new sentence, but as written doesn't really convey anything about her reaction to him being gay. (Of course she was sad and crying, anyone would be at losing a friend.) Link to Dayo is dead should be marked url-status=dead. It also doesn't say what Wainaina died from, nor that he died in Nairobi. Perhaps, Writer Bernard Dayo said that Adichie's eulogy to Wainaina when he died in 2019, perfectly captured the spirit of the "bold LGBTQ activist [of] the African literary world where homosexuality is still treated as a fringe concept."
  • The entire paragraph beginning Since 2017, Adichie has been repeatedly accused of transphobia is cited to Facebook, which absolutely cannot be used as a RS. We can however, use this, this, and what Camminga says in this journal article available from the WP library.
  • Since 2017, Adichie has been repeatedly accused of transphobia, initially for saying that "my feeling is trans women are trans women" in response to the question "Are trans women women?" add "in an interview aired on Channel 4 in Britain".(cited to Ring 2022 and Crockett 2017)
  • add her apology She apologised, and acknowledged that trans-women need support and that they have experienced severe oppression, but she also stated that the differences between transgender women and other women's experiences are different and one could acknowledge those differences without invalidating or diminishing either's lived experience.(cite Crockett 2017)
  • Adichie later clarified her statement, writing According to Crockett, this clarification happened after the apology. So, perhaps, After the apology, Adichie attempted to clarify her statement,(cited to Crockett) and then from writing: "[p]erhaps to the end of the paragraph cited to Camminga 2020 pp 819-820. (I am really struggling with whether the entire quote in Camminga should appear as what is in the article is abbreviated, and whether it should be in a note rather than in the body. Perhaps after attempted to clarify her statement,(entire quote as a note) by stressing that girls are socialised in ways that damage their self-worth, which have lasting impact throughout their lives, whereas boys benefit from male privilege that give them life advantages, before transitioning.(cited to Crockett and Camminga p 820). The entire quote is "I said, in an interview, that trans women are trans women, that they are people who, having been born male, benefited from the privileges that the world affords men, and that we should not say that the experience of women born female is the same as the experience of trans women.… I think the impulse to say that trans women are women just like women born female are women comes from a need to make trans issues mainstream. Because by making them mainstream, we might reduce the many oppressions they experience.… Perhaps I should have said trans women are trans women and cis women are cis women and all are women. Except that 'cis' is not an organic part of my vocabulary. And would probably not be understood by a majority of people. Because saying 'trans' and 'cis' acknowledges that there is a distinction between women born female and women who transition, without elevating one or the other, which was my point.… I have and will continue to stand up for the rights of transgender people. Not merely because of the violence they experience but because they are equal human beings deserving to be what they are." Camminga 2020 pp 819-820. Figuring this out and trying to be fair and neutral and not give the topic undue weight is hard!)
  • Then maybe we need a sentence that some accepted her apology,(cited to Crockett) and others rejected it as a trans-exclusionary radical feminist view that biological sex determines gender.(cited to Camminga p 820)
  • I think above in the first paragraph that it needs to be acknowledged that Adichie isn't just a supporter, but an activist. Camminga 2020 p 818 says she has been "a vocal campaigner for LGBT rights in Nigeria" and Crockett says "Adichie, who is also an LGBTQ-rights advocate in Nigeria".
  • In 2020, Adichie weighed into "all the noise" sparked by J. K. Rowling's article titled "J.K. Rowling Writes about Her Reasons for Speaking out on Sex and Gender Issues",[163] calling the essay "perfectly reasonable". Perhaps, The controversy emerged again when Adichie voiced support for J. K. Rowling's article on gender and sex, in an interview in The Guardian, calling the essay "perfectly reasonable".(Cited to Allardice)
  • Adichie again faced accusations of transphobia, some of which came from Nigerian author Akwaeke Emezi, who had graduated from Adichie's writing workshop.[165] In response to the backlash, Adichie criticized cancel culture, saying: "There's a sense in which you aren't allowed to learn and grow. Also, forgiveness is out of the question. I find it so lacking in compassion." That interview sparked a Twitter backlash from critics of her opinion, which included a former graduate of one of Adichie's writing workshops, Akwaeke Emezi.(Akhabau 2020 and Okafor 2020)
  • In a June 2021 essay titled "It Is Obscene", Adichie again criticized cancel culture, discussing her experiences with two unnamed writers who attended her writing workshop and later lambasted her on social media over comments she made about transgender people. She labelled what she called their "passionate performance of virtue that is well executed in the public space of Twitter but not in the intimate space of friendship" as "obscene" In response, Adichie penned It is Obscene: A True Reflection in Three Parts and posted it on her website in June 2021, criticising the use of social media to air out grievances.(Cited to Flood 2021b and Stobie 2021 p. 354)
  • The following month, students who were members of the LGBT community at University of Cape Town, South Africa, boycotted her public lecture on their campus.(cite Stobie 2021 p. 354) Adichie admitted in an interview with Otosirieze Obi-Young in September that She was "deeply hurt" by the backlash and began a period of self-reflection on her biases, informed by reading anything she could find to help her understand trans issues.(cite Obi-Young 2021)
  • After harmful rhetoric about trans people add Cheryl Stobie of the University of KwaZulu-Natal in Pietermaritzburg, South Africa, said that Adichie supported an "exclusionary conceptualization of gender".(cite to Stobie 2021 p. 355) B. Camminga "a Postdoctoral Fellow at the African Centre for Migration & Society at the University of the Witwatersrand"[41] stated that Adiche's fame led to her comments on trans-women being elevated and the voices of other African women, both trans and cis, being silenced.(cite Camminga p. 819) According to Camminga, Adichie disregarded her own advice in The Danger of a Single Story by telling a "single story of trans existence".(cite Camminga p. 828)

Okay, well I'm still not sure that there isn't too much emphasis on this, but I don't want to trivialize it either. I've tried to balance media views with scholarly input and we'll see what other reviewers recommend. SusunW (talk) 16:38, 14 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

SafariScribe I see that you have done the LGBT section, but not the fashion section. So, I assume that means you are ready for me to start on public speaking? I'll work there and hopefully you can work on the fashion bit. By the way, I have a routine doctor's appointment today at 16:00 hours, so will have to knock off early. SusunW (talk) 12:47, 15 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thats true. Please continue. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 17:25, 15 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@SusunW, for the public speaking. I think I'm stuck off. Where do I work on, the draft or the mainspace? Though I can see some changes with the draft one but how do I do this. I mean, won't it affect later conversion to the mainspace including the images which is already incorporated in the mainspace. Maybe am confused. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 14:37, 20 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Work on the draft, not in mainspace. Since we are moving material between various sections, it will be hard to review and keep it stable in mainspace. When we have done final checks on the draft, we won't move the images that are already in the main article. SusunW (talk) 14:47, 20 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Okay okay. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 14:55, 20 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Writings Selected works
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I also think the heading "writings" needs to be changed to "Selected works" and you need for format in the videos that we can find like this {{cite AV media |ref=none |last=Adichie |first=Chimamanda Ngozi |date=6 October 2009 |title=The Danger of a Single Story |type=video |language=en |url=https://www.ted.com/talks/chimamanda_ngozi_adichie_the_danger_of_a_single_story |location=Oxford, UK |publisher=[[TED (conference)|TED talks]] |transcript=Transcript by James Clear |transcript-url=https://web.archive.org/web/20240329113720/https://jamesclear.com/great-speeches/the-danger-of-a-single-story-by-chimamanda-ngozi-adichie |oclc=819784502}} I know it was at Oxford because of this. If we can, we should avoid using YouTube videos. I'm not ready to review this section, but wanted to put my notes in before I forget. I found a bunch, which seem fairly representative, but we need to look for others, if they are more prominent:

  Done Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 12:43, 9 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • As with the references section in general, ISBN segments have meaning one part is the series, one part is the language, one part is the publisher, and the last two parts are the specific book. Use the ISBN converter to properly segment the ISBN numbers.
  • To get rid of the error messages Harv warning: There is no link pointing to this citation. The anchor is named CITEREFAdichie2016. insert |ref=none
  • Treat magazines the same as journals. If you have them insert volume, issue, page numbers. Also needs publisher and publishing location.

Legacy

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This section needs to contain information like how many views her videos have garnered, how many languages the books have been translated into etc.

  • When you move as of 2024, is one of the top twenty most-viewed TED talks of all time.[23] here, don't cite it to Ted Talks, that needs to be removed from the "references". This says as of 2022 it had received over 27 million views. This article from The Times by Richard Assheton dated 1 September 2023 which stays live for fifteen seconds   says "The Danger of a Single Story” is one of the top 25 most viewed" TED Talks of all time. It needs to be marked as subscription only.
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  • Luckett says her works have been translated into over 30 languages.(cite Luckett, 2018 p. 155
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  • Add: In 2018 a painting of Adichie was included in a wall mural at the Municipal Sport Center in the Concepción barrio of Madrid, along with fourteen other historically influential women. The fifteen women were selected by members of the neighborhood to give a visible representation of the role of women in history and a symbol of equality.(cite it to El Mundo 2021)
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  • Matthew Lecznar said "by using her literary celebrity to demonstrate the power of dress and empower people from diverse contexts to embrace it, Adichie shows that fashion has everything to do with the politics of identity–and with her becoming one of the most prominent writers and feminists of the age" should probably be paraphrased and cited to p. 169

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  • Bernardi & Picarelli p 220 says that her support of the Nigerian fashion industry helped put Nigeria "at the forefront" of the movement to use fashion as a globally-recognised political mechanism of empowerment.

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  • Lisa Allardice, a journalist writing for The Guardian said Adichie became the "poster girl for modern feminism after her 2012 TED talk We Should All Be Feminists, went stratospheric and was distributed in book form to every 16-year-old in Sweden".(Allardice 2020)

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  • Larissa MacFarquhar stated that Adichie is "regarded as one of the most vital and original novelists of her generation". (MacFarquhar 2018)

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  • Journalist Lauren Alix Brown, called Adichie a "a global feminist icon" and "public thinker"[43]

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Photos

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  • Lede image, marked "Creative Commons Attribution 3.0 Unported license". Alt description is supposed to be an description of what is in the image (for someone unable to see it either because they can't load images or have a visual impairment) and should not repeat the "caption" information, which will also be read. The current alt says "Portrait of the Nigerian writer Adichie smiling", "Portrait of/Image of" are not needed as a screen reader will already identify it as such. I would probably simply show the alt as smiling black woman
  • File:Nigeria-karte-politisch-enugu.png, marked "own work", "Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported". Alt description says "see caption", which tells a person who cannot see it absolutely nothing - how do they know that it isn't a photograph of the town based on the "caption". Alt should say something like Map of southern Nigerian states
  • File:Chimamanda-Ngozi-Adichie.webp has no licensing information. Author appears to be JB Reed/AP Images as attributed by Britannica and I find no Creative Commons licensing. Probably should be removed unless you can find proof that it can be freely used.
  • File:Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie at a book signing in Berlin, Germany on 16 May 2014.jpg marked "own work" "Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 4.0 International" is missing alt text. I would probably use File:Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie at a signing in Berlin, Germany on 16 May 2014.jpg by the same author with the same licensing, instead because it shows she is signing books. Perhaps crop out the photobombing woman on Adichie's right? alt=woman sitting at a table signing books
  • File:Ms. magazine Cover - Summer 2014.jpg, "Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 4.0 International" permission from maker Ms. Magazine. "alt=The image of Adichie on the front of a print magazine cover", no need for image of or Adichie, perhaps just front cover of a print magazine
  • I would probably add either File:Congreso Futuro 2020 - Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie 02.jpg or File:Congreso Futuro 2020 - Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie 01.jpg both "own work" "Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 4.0 International" to the public speaking section. (Personally prefer 02, as there isn't so much background "noise". alt=woman standing at a podium caption=Adichie at the speaker's podium during the Congreso Futuro, Santiago, Chile 2020 (We know she was there per this it either needs to mention her speech in public speaking section or you need to add a ref to the photograph.)
  • File:Mural ciudad lineal (12).jpg "own work", "Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 4.0 International" marked as okay per freedom of panorama. alt says see caption, which does not explain to anyone who cannot see it that it has 4 women in it and part of a5th. They are left to right Frida Kahlo, Emma Goldman, Adichie, Valentina Tereshkova, Angela Davis per this. I would likely list the alt as 5 women painted on a wall. Also note "La Concepción" isn't an event, it's a neighborhood. describe it as (l-r) Frida Kahlo, Emma Goldman, Adichie, Valentina Tereshkova, and Angela Davis on a feminist wall mural in Madrid, per this
    Looks good. Thanks! SusunW (talk) 13:50, 20 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Thank youuuuuu. I see you are working on the draft. I will come join there and let me know if there is any thing. Thanks for the expansion too, I feel like keep reading the article since it now gives me joy. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 13:58, 20 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    SafariScribe I was just fixing the missing ref. Please go ahead with the changes to public speaking. We are definitely getting there. I appreciate your patience with me. As I said, I am slow and methodical, but she is far too important and iconic a figure to not pay attention to the details. SusunW (talk) 14:22, 20 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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  • In preparing a FA, all pertinent sources should be reviewed and cited in the body of the article. Looking at "Further reading" I know we have used Emenyonu (2017) and it should be deleted. Have you reviewed the others?
  • "SusunW, yes I've reviewed them and removed used ones. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 11:23, 16 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ditto with External links, what should be here are links to her twitter, facebook, instagram, etc. Official website is already given in infobox, Ted-talks and CSpan talks should be listed in videos, and all should be deleted from this section. Is the link to Muck Rack important? Any sources should be reviewed and either cited in the body of the article or deleted. SusunW (talk) 18:46, 14 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
      Done. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 11:22, 16 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    SafariScribe, I'm going to need time today to regroup. We lost power yesterday around 14:00 hours. Finally at 20:00 we went to a hotel in another part of town, because the temps even then were 43C and we had no air and no water (without electricity, no pump to deliver the water). We literally just got power back, but I have to throw out all the food, and do some real life stuff to get us back to normal. I'll be back later today. Sorry. SusunW (talk) 14:24, 16 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Same power issue here. It's never a problem, just stay off as far as you want. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 14:39, 16 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Hello @SusunW, I'm sorry for not seeing your reviews today. We're just having a heavy downpour tonight and I can make it to complete the review. I'll start that tomorrow. Thanks. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 20:05, 17 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    SafariScribe no worries. Still working through public speaking but power issues continue. Wishing for rain. Hopefully they'll be here by June. We'll just keep plugging away as we can. SusunW (talk) 21:33, 17 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Lede and Infobox

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There is a lot of overlinking and repetition in both of these.

  • influenced by the aftermath of the post colonial rule in Nigeria is redundant aftermath is post-colonial. perhaps simply the aftermath of colonial rule.
  • End the sentence after took the lives of both of her grandfathers.
  • and was a major theme of her novels Purple Hibiscus and Half of a Yellow Sun no need to rename the works, IMO, the war was the setting for her first novel and the subject of her second.
  • I would move Most of her works delve the themes of religion, Americanisation, immigration, racism, gender, marriage, motherhood and womanhood. to follow that sentence.
  • She excelled in academics and attended the University of Nigeria, Nsukka where she initially studied medicine and pharmacy. She moved to the United States at 19, and studied communications and political science at Drexel University in Philadelphia, Pennsylvania before transferring to and graduating from Eastern Connecticut State University. Adichie later received a master's degree from Johns Hopkins University. Perhaps she was educated at the University of Nigeria, Nsukka and moved to the United States at nineteen to complete her education. (I would not list the universities in the lede because they are listed in the infobox.)
  • Adichie has cited Chinua Achebe—in whose house her family lived while at the University of Nigeria—Buchi Emecheta, Enid Blyton and other authors as inspirations; I would end this with a period and consider removing the bit about her living in Achebe's house (it's important that he is influential to her, but is the fact that she lived in his house critical to that? I think even if she lived elsewhere, his work would have influenced her.)
  • her style juxtaposes Western influences and the African culture particularly, the Igbo language and culture where she originates. Perhaps Her style juxtaposes Western and African influences, particularly focusing on her own Igbo language and culture.
  • The paragraph beginning Adichie's words on feminism were encapsulated in her 2009 TED talk I think should focus on things not already mentioned. Perhaps Adichie's 2009 TED Talk "The Danger of a Single Story" is one of the most viewed TED Talks of all time. Her 2012 talk "We Should All Be Feminists", was sampled by Beyoncé and featured on a tee-shirt by the French fashion house Dior in 2016. Adichie advocates using fashion as a medium to break down stereotypes and was recognised for her Wear Nigerian Campaign with a Shorty Award in 2018. Both her written works and public speaking encourage recognition of the diversity of humanity and the need for equality. She has received numerous academic awards, fellowships, and honourary degrees, among them a MacArthur Fellowship in 2008 and an induction into the American Academy of Arts and Sciences in 2017. (Again, I wouldn't list them as they are duplicated in the infobox. When you have rewritten the lede, we need to verify that it doesn't exceed 400 words.)
  • In the infobox, I don't think that all of her written works should be listed. Perhaps consider listing only Purple Hibiscus (2003), Half of a Yellow Sun (2006), "The Danger of a Single Story" (2009), Americanah (2013), and We Should All Be Feminists (2014).
  • Infobox prizes, I would replace MacArthur Fellowship with the Orange Prize for Fiction (2007) and add the Women's Winner of Winners Prize (2020). SusunW (talk) 20:10, 19 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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Good. Less repetitive. Word count is 358, so we should have addressed Gog's concern. SusunW (talk) 13:53, 20 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, it now looks good too. Many thanks. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 13:56, 20 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I added 3 words, "and public speaker" so now at 361 words, because that is a critical part of her work.   SusunW (talk) 14:19, 20 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Aight. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 14:28, 20 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Wrap up

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SafariScribe I think we are almost done.

  • We need to incorporate the last comments above from the "Critical reception" section and finish "Legacy"
  • When we have finished those and I have done a final review, I'll give you moving instructions.
  • We need to standardize dates, I have a gadget that does that. Is it standard in Nigeria for dates to be in day month year or month day year format? I'll run it when we have moved everything over.
  • We need to fix dashes. Again, I have a gadget that does that and I'll run it when we have moved everything over.
  • Then we need other people's input on what we've done. SusunW (talk) 13:43, 21 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
SafariScribe are you okay? Didn't hear from you yesterday and I was hoping we could wrap this up so that others could begin reviewing. Please ping me when you have finished the last 2 sections. SusunW (talk) 12:30, 22 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I should think i'm done there. I'm so sorry, I lost connection (mostly when a full wiki page couldn't load; it happens in Nigeria). For the date format, Nigeria uses DMY per my knowledge and List of date formats by country#Listing. It seems I may be done thereof. If there is any I am missing, do call for my attention. Thanks. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 21:57, 22 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
SafariScribe I didn't see that you added the critique of her talks, so I input that as the 2nd paragraph in "critical reception". I tweaked legacy (and moved the film to this section because it is not actually "critical reception", but more about building her legacy). If you are good with these final changes:
  • Move the entirety of what is in the sandbox with the edit summary Moving to [[Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie]]
  • and paste it into the main article with the edit summary Moving from [[User:SafariScribe/sandbox]]
  • Do not delete the sandbox. The edit history needs to remain. You can reuse the sandbox for improving other articles in the same manner.
  • Ping me when that is done and I'll run the gadget scripts on dates, etc.
  • Then we'll do a final review of the mainspace article to make sure all the links work, that there aren't duplicate links, that the refs are in numerical order, etc. SusunW (talk) 15:41, 23 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
SusunW, I have done everything with moving. I also ran the gadget on dates and hyphen, lines, etc. However, your own gadget may have other features too. I am happy these article is moving far to the desired good destination. A tutto bené. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 02:37, 24 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
SafariScribe looks good and yes, the scripts for dates and dashes are the same as I use. We need to do a bit of tidying up because FA are all about consistency and attention to detail.
  • After they also maintain a home in Nigeria insert, Adichie has Nigerian nationality and has permanent resident status in the US.(cite it to Pearce 2017)
  • There are two links with the error message "Harv warning: There is no link pointing to this citation.": Commonwealth Lecture 2012 and Raymer 2014. These need to be deleted.
  • You need to go through the entire article and make sure in-line citations are in numerical order, so for example in and human rights,[50][49] Wagner should be cited before Anasuya.

Then, I think that's probably it from me. I'll ask a friend to help with cropping the book signing photo. It should be now stable enough for Draken Bowser to review it. Perhaps we can find at least one more reviewer and then you might want to send it to the Wikipedia:WikiProject Guild of Copy Editors/Requests after all the reviews are complete and before you renominate it for FA. I'll keep this bookmarked and try to help out if you need me. I think we have definitely improved the article. Congrats! SusunW (talk) 14:16, 24 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I haven't gotten far into my read-through, but it is clear the the aricle has been much improved. Great work! Draken Bowser (talk) 14:37, 24 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
You really did a mouthful. Great thanks. I have sent it to WP:GOCER while I await reviews of @Draken Bowser. Sure, I will always reach out especially when I am fully ready for User:SafariScribe/Nnamdi Azikiwe (Azikiwe is also a feminist). Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 15:02, 24 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
SafariScribe Don't send it to the GOCE until the reviewers are finished. Text will not be stable, because you need to address the concerns of reviewers. As I said above, send it after the reviews are finished. One step at a time. It cannot be rushed.   SusunW (talk) 15:23, 24 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Draken Bowser I know SafariScribe is anxious to renominate this, but I've counseled them to be patient. It's been over a week since I wrapped up my comments. Do you have input for us to address? SusunW (talk) 15:13, 1 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I've got notes on a paper copy scribbled down over the last several days, but the weather is so nice this weekend. I should have enough spare time during the beginning of next week. I understand the urge to get going, but remember -- slow is smooth, smooth is fast. Draken Bowser (talk) 15:29, 1 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
No worries. Thank you so much for your time. SusunW (talk) 17:00, 1 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Draken Bowser

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I'm reserving a spot here, but I'm gonna hold off for now, while things take shape, including getting footnotes for the style- and themes-sections. Draken Bowser (talk) 08:56, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Nice to meet you Draken Bowser I am happy to see your interest. As is probably quite obvious, my focus is on the details and verification. As I said before I am no expert on literary articles. Two examples I have been involved with are Theodora Kroeber and Unity Dow and you can see from them that the structure is similar on both, even though Vanamonde93 was the primary author on one of them. I noted your comments about it needing structural work. As I am getting ready to move to her writing career, I was going to start by suggesting that we remove all the individual headings on the works and discuss them without all the chopped up breaks. I would really welcome any suggestions on how to best structure it. SusunW (talk) 19:51, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I don't feel strongly one way or the other about the headings, do as you think is best. I'm no expert either, but I'll try to help if I can. Since I prefer to review print-outs I'll wait for things to calm down a bit (the method only really makes sense if you print the latest version). :) Draken Bowser (talk) 19:59, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Brief comment: —in whose house she lived while at the University of Nigeria— is an interesting connection, but not the kind of information usually included in the lead. Draken Bowser (talk) 16:46, 6 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for driving in but, I don't see how that affects the article. It's more important people who read only the lede of an article capture that immediately. Welp, there has been argument of Adichie being heavily influenced by Achebe. Bearing that in mind, it's more nevertheless important that it remains there. Regards! Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 19:55, 6 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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Aight, looking through my notes there's not too much, so we should be able to get this over with pretty quickly. I've made some direct edits to the article, here are some follow ups:

Early life...

  • he worked for a few years - in what profession?
    • Removed and rephrased as not attributed to the source.
  • who started school - comes off as a bit incomplete, I'd add the detail of either where or at what age she started.
    • Enugu has been literally discussed about her. I rephrased the line.
  • second master's degree - in what discipline?
    • Was in the first line before it, though I have rephrased the line.

Career

  • first published by Anchor Books - needs a year.
    •   Done
  • He worked in the technology and information development - at TED?
    • Yes. Rephrased too.
  • examining the conflict dramatises - shouldn't it be the other way around?
  • discourses...expand - I can't find the relevant guideline rn, but don't we generally use spaced dots, possibly with brackets?
  • She was also among the "100 Most Influential People" by Time magazine in 2015 - I think this can be contracted by referring directly to the Time 100 with a wl.
    •   Done.
  • one of the highest honours for intellectuals in the United States - do we need to specify this here?
    • Though it's stylish, but not necessary for me. So, removed for now.
  • Standardize the dates in the final paragraph to year only.
    • Done.

Arbitrary break. Part two will be released within two business days. Draken Bowser (talk) 06:17, 3 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

There is absolutely no issue with that. Thanks. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 23:37, 3 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Legacy

  • Richard Assheton, a critic at The Times confirmed that, as of 1 September 2023, the talk is one of the top 25 most viewed TED Talks of all time. - since this is a statement of fact we shouldn't need attribution.
    •   Removed Thanks.

And with most of my work boldly put into the actual article, that's it for the read-through. I plan to have a look at the sources over the next few days to see if that seems fully covered. Draken Bowser (talk) 21:03, 3 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I can assure you that the sources were thoroughly covered and has been verified by SusunW. It's not s bad idea you check a "sailing touch" in them too. Thanks. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 23:43, 3 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I havn't looked att all the sources, but most importantly the themes- and style-sections seem to be built upon decent academic sources. I also like how the Companion features prominently in these sections. At this point more eyes are probebly needed, so I'd say go ahead. Best of luck! Draken Bowser (talk) 10:33, 5 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the kind words @Draken Bowser. Your contributions is incredibly covered and adds to my way of editing. The mist difficult is how you choose words and likely, how you have helped also. You are among the best. Hands waving for you. Safari ScribeEdits! Talk! 14:13, 5 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Drive-by comment

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  • The lead seems - to me - to be a tad long. Probably acceptable, but pushing it. The number of paragraphs similarly: I would be inclined to run the last two together for a total of three. Gog the Mild (talk) 17:49, 9 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Haven't done a review of it yet, I always do it last, after we know what the body will say to summarize, but thanks for that. I appreciate you. SusunW (talk) 21:25, 9 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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