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I've listed this article for peer review because I have edited this article significantly and requesting feedback and identify areas that can be improved.
Thanks, Sumanch (talk) 20:51, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Interesting article, clear that a lot of effort has been put into it, here are some suggestions for improvement (and more work ;-) ):
- Expand the lead to summarize the whole article per WP:LEAD
- Put references after punctuation, so in the lead It is the longest written constitution of any independent nation in the world,[3]...
- Avoid or define jargon - not everyone will know what "scheduled classes" are, for example. See WP:JARGON
- Wikilink full dates (day, month, year).
- Which year did the Assembly first meet - article says both 1947 and 1946 (and only really needs to say this in one place - avoid repetition)
- There are whole paragraphs and even whole sections without references ("The Constituent Assembly" section and the paragraphs before and after it, for example, or the whole "Influence of Other Constitutions" section - see WP:CITE
- Images should be set to thumb width to allow reader preferences to be followed, see WP:IMAGE
- "Influence of Other Constitutions" is a list - could it be made into text form? Lists in an article are generally discouraged.
- There is a lot on the Preamble, some on Amendments and very little on the Parts and Schedules of the Constitution, besides a list. Since this is an article on the whole constitution, there should be some discussion of each of these - see WP:Summary Style and WP:WEIGHT
- References need to be consistent and follow the MOS - try using {{cite web}} and {{cite book}} and the other cite templates.
Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 18:18, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
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editRuhrfisch comments: Interesting article, clear that a lot of effort has been put into it, here are some suggestions for improvement (and more work ;-) ):
- Expand the lead to summarize the whole article per WP:LEAD
Put references after punctuation, so in the lead It is the longest written constitution of any independent nation in the world,[3]...- corrected - Sumanch (talk) 02:30, 16 October 2008 (UTC)- Avoid or define jargon - not everyone will know what "scheduled classes" are, for example. See WP:JARGON
- Wikilink full dates (day, month, year).
- Which year did the Assembly first meet - article says both 1947 and 1946 (and only really needs to say this in one place - avoid repetition)
- There are whole paragraphs and even whole sections without references ("The Constituent Assembly" section and the paragraphs before and after it, for example, or the whole "Influence of Other Constitutions" section - see WP:CITE
Images should be set to thumb width to allow reader preferences to be followed, see WP:IMAGE- corrected - Sumanch (talk) 02:30, 16 October 2008 (UTC)"Influence of Other Constitutions" is a list - could it be made into text form? Lists in an article are generally discouraged.- corrected - Sumanch (talk) 02:30, 16 October 2008 (UTC)- There is a lot on the Preamble, some on Amendments and very little on the Parts and Schedules of the Constitution, besides a list. Since this is an article on the whole constitution, there should be some discussion of each of these - see WP:Summary Style and WP:WEIGHT
References need to be consistent and follow the MOS - try using {{cite web}} and {{cite book}} and the other cite templates.- corrected - Sumanch (talk) 02:30, 16 October 2008 (UTC)