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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to know what improvements can be made to the article and how it compares to other historical ethnic group articles.
If you need help reviewing other articles, please let me know.
Thanks, Yellowfiver (talk) 08:52, 5 January 2011 (UTC)
Finetooth comments: Peer review is "intended for high-quality articles that have already undergone extensive work, often as a way of preparing a featured article candidate." This article is far from that. A significant problem here is that at least part of the article has been copied from elsewhere. "Fictional accounts", for example, is merely a copy-paste from Oroonoko. Here are a few other comments:
- You asked how this article compares to other articles. It's often useful to look at featured articles to make this kind of comparison. You'll find a list of such articles at WP:FA#Culture and society. See Azerbaijani people, for example.
- Parts of the article lack sources, the "Slavery in Africa" section, for example. My rule of thumb is to provide a source for every set of statistics, every unusual claim, every direct quotation, and every paragraph. All parts of an article should meet WP:V and WP:RS.
- The lead is to be a summary of the whole article rather than an introductory paragraph. My rule of thumb is to include in the lead at least a mention of each of the main text sections and not to include anything important in the lead that is not mentioned in the main text. WP:LEAD has details.
- The first word of the heads and subheads in Wikipedia articles are normally capitalized, but the other words are lower-case unless they are proper nouns (formal names). For example, "Historical Culture" should be "Historical culture". MOS:HEAD has details.
- "the designation for recent Caribbean and South American slaves brought from the Gold Coast or modern day Ghana." - "Recent" should be made specific. I'm sure it doesn't mean "last week" but, rather, the 17th and 18th centuries. You also need to say in the first sentence where the slaves were being taken.
- The tools in the toolbox at the top of this page find two dead urls in citations and one link in the main text that goes to a disambiguation page instead of its intended target.
I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at WP:PR; that is where I found this one. I don't usually watch the PR archives or check corrections or changes. If my comments are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth (talk) 20:10, 9 January 2011 (UTC)