Wikipedia:Peer review/Crowded House/archive1
We'd like to get Crowded House to WP:FA, though we haven't yet had it assessed for WP:GA, so this may be a bit presumptuous, but we want to know what could be done to improve the page? I believe it's pretty thorough, but I may be too close to the article to be adequately unbiased. I'm aware that there's a lack on referencing, but we're working on that. All the references needed are actually there, but they're just not referenced directly, just as a general footnote.
Any feedback, negative or positive (hopefully the latter, but we'll accept the former) would certainly be welcomed if it can be used to improve the page to get to GA and then to FA.
Thanks! --lincalinca 09:31, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
- Mostly good, here are some tiny adjustments I'd suggest: mention of 7 worlds collide concert, less "Examples of Crowded House" designs, and a less confusing "band members" section. Alexandermiller 07:06, 11 August 2007 (UTC)
Looks like a good article. If the particular crowded house in Los Angeles is not currently owned or occupied by someone associated with the band, then the street address should be removed. 08:36, 12 August 2007 (UTC)
- Thanks for positive response. Just to clarify, are you suggesting implementing 7 Worlds Collide, the Neil Finn collaborative live project, into the "hiatus" era info? That's what I'm gathering, and I'll do just that. As to reducing the examples section, I was thinking of redesigning the layout so as to not rely on the gallery function and perhaps take up less space. To you, is it a space issue, a layout issue, or just a general content issue? As to the mention of the location of the actual Crowded House in LA, I don't suspect it's owned by the band, so I will remove the street address. Good suggestion. I wouldn't have thought of that. Thanks guys! Any further reviews will be more than welcome, though! I want all the eyes and opinions I can get to perfect this one. --lincalinca 13:11, 13 August 2007 (UTC)
Done. Just curious abuot your suggestion to improve the members section/make it less confusing. I've run through a few ideas in my head, and none seems to be any better laid out than it is at present. It's a confusing history the band has had, so I don't know that there's a way of de-complicating it.--lincalinca 11:40, 15 August 2007 (UTC)
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