Wikipedia:Peer review/Deanna C. C. Peluso/archive1

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch • Watch peer review

This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because: I am hoping that an experienced biography editor could help refine the style of writing and make it easier to read. I am looking for the article to be peer reviewed, without drastically changing anything other than the style of writing. I am not familiar with academic terminology, and believe there may be some room for revision in the information on "Education and Research". I know that the flow of the article also needs some help. Any help would be fantastic. Thank you for your time,

Thanks, Sn0fl4k3 (talk) 03:03, 28 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Finetooth comments: This appears to be a personal vita rather than an encyclopedia article and to involve a conflict of interest. Please see WP:Promotion and WP:COI. Wikipedia is not the place for this.

Significant parts of the article lack sources and therefore violate WP:V. A good rule of thumb is to provide at least one reliable source per paragraph (except the lead) and to provide a source for each set of statistics, every direct quote, and every claim that has been questioned or is apt to be questioned.

The sources should be reliable per WP:RS. Generally, blogs and personal web sites are not considered reliable. Reliable sources would include books, newspapers, magazines, government web sites, and other publications subject to editorial scrutiny.

The article includes a lot of unnecessary detail, most likely because it is promotional rather than neutral. For example, it is unlikely that a true biography would include a section called "Post Graduate Education & Current Research".

I think I need say no more. Finetooth (talk) 23:55, 2 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you, I will begin working on this. Sn0fl4k3 (talk) 23:34, 3 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]