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Hopful I can get this to FL status at some piont.
Thanks, Buc (talk) 19:58, 17 June 2008 (UTC)
- Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)
- Avoid bold links in the lead per WP:MOS.
- Put (NFL) after National Football League.
- Remove full stop in caption - it's a sentence fragment so it doesn't need a full stop per WP:MOS.
- Four paras in lead is too much for such a short article - see WP:LEAD.
- Explain what AFC is before you use it.
- Link Super Bowl.
- Explain what a "losing season" is.
- "...and were AFC West champions twice and AFC champions once." and.. and... reads clumsily.
- "two years in a row" prefer "for two consecutive years"
- "have also experienced one notable periods of decline" ?!
- "when they never made the playoffs " just "did not make the playoffs" is better.
- "They also had their two worst seasons " ..." They also experienced their..." would be better.
- "But they never made the playoffs prior to the AFL-NFL merger in 1970." don't start a sentence with "But..." and avoid this "never made..." stuff.
- Explicit references required for the "Coach of the Year" etc awards.
- Explain the significance of "The Drive" and "The Fumble" for non-experts.
- "sportsecyclopedia.com. " or "Sports Encyclopedia"? Same site is given different parameters.
The Rambling Man (talk) 08:54, 18 June 2008 (UTC)
- All done. Buc (talk) 07:11, 19 June 2008 (UTC)