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I've been working on this article for the past few months (though I had a break recently due to lack of time). The article has gone through major expansion, more than I had ever hoped for. And now I have new plans to take it a few steps further. I naturally believe that a broader number of opinions would help improving it further, so here I am. Please let me know what else can be done. Thanks, Shahid • Talk2me 17:46, 8 February 2012 (UTC)
- Redtigerxyz' Comments
- Lead: IMO, para 1 should be things the subject is best known for, like Bobby and Rudali, which won her the awards, in this case. Life should start (marriage, comeback) in para 2. A model followed in Brad Pitt, Angelina Jolie, Abdul Karim (the Munshi), Ram Narayan etc.
--Redtigerxyz Talk 17:17, 9 February 2012 (UTC)
- Hey Redtigerxyz, thank you for the comment. I find that your concern has got more to do with structure. I thought of mentioning her most notable work first, I then I decided to go by a chronological order of events to avoid POV. Thanks. Shahid • Talk2me 19:33, 17 February 2012 (UTC)
- Animeshkulkarni's Comments
(I will be commenting more like an admirer than an editor. So these are just suggestions.)
- More pictures please, especially in different roles.
- No mention of Bobby Print? The "polka dot" design that she wore in Bobby is quite popular as "Bobby print". The fashion is refered but the exact term is not. (Sorry! i dont have reference as such.)
- None of her songs are mentioned. "Jhooth Bole Kauwa Kaate", "Chehra Hai Ya Chaand Khila Hai" can find space here.
- Animeshkulkarni (talk) 15:18, 10 February 2012 (UTC)
- Hey Animesh, thanks for the comments.
- I am intending to add images later on, if there are some particular images which could be useful in the article, then I'd be happy to add them.
- "Bobby Print" mentioned.
- I'm not sure how relevant songs would be in an article about her, unless these were just item numbers. There are always popular numbers, I'm not sure proper sources in regard to their notability could be found. Shahid • Talk2me 19:33, 17 February 2012 (UTC)
- A passing mention of songs can be done saying how hit they were and still are. She got to be a part of those songs. Not that she contributed to the singing or music. But as indian actresses have to dance a lot in various songs and they are usually remembered by only through the videos of these old songs, its good to mention it. Just a suggestion! -Animeshkulkarni (talk) 15:19, 18 February 2012 (UTC)
- Another one... The Bobby look was imitated by Prachi Desai in the song (i guess) "Tum Jo Aaye Zindagi Mein" from Once Upon a Time in Mumbaai. -Animeshkulkarni (talk) 15:19, 18 February 2012 (UTC)
- But it was imitated and satirised on several occasions, so I can't see how mentioning this particular film would make much sense. Shahid • Talk2me 10:47, 25 February 2012 (UTC)
- Was it? Didnt know that. -Animeshkulkarni (talk) 20:46, 26 February 2012 (UTC)
- But it was imitated and satirised on several occasions, so I can't see how mentioning this particular film would make much sense. Shahid • Talk2me 10:47, 25 February 2012 (UTC)
Maybe someone else? :) Shahid • Talk2me 07:52, 7 March 2012 (UTC)