Wikipedia:Peer review/Don Bosco High & Technical School, Liluah/archive1
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This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I want to try to better this article, but I have no idea where to start the clean up.
Sorry if the article is bad, but I wanted to know where it can be improved. So please give a brief account on what can be done to better it.
Thanks, TheOriginalSoni (talk) 17:26, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
Comments
- Too many too short paras in the lead. See WP:LEAD for guidance on how may paras to expect here.
- Call it "English language", not "English".
- Should "S.D.B." really be "(SDB)" after the title?
- "The Telegraph Education Foundation" if this is notable, why doesn't it have an article?
- "Telegraph Awards Hall of Fame" ditto.
- History section could use being turned into prose rather than just a list of bullet points.
- "Mgr. Mathias" what is Mgr.?
- Savio is a dab link.
- History has no refs at all.
- Full of trivia like "The first Past Pupils Day was held In October 1955."...
- Don't bold the section titles.
- No idea what ISC and ISCE is, nor what the "School Average" (shouldn't that be "average") is.
- Again, "Extra-curricular" section is unreferenced, and needs work to prose it rather than just be a list of trivia.
- Same with Facilities.
In general it's desperately in need of references. The Rambling Man (talk) 20:21, 4 July 2012 (UTC)