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Dow Chemical Company

I've listed this article for peer review because a lot of the article does not appear to be written in a neutral tone, paying special attention to the section titled "Advocacy" which appears to be a collection of links, whose content is not used throughout the article, and only purpose seems to be to attack the company. I'd like some outside views and opinions.

Thanks,

Rjd0060 (talk) 21:37, 23 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Right off the bat, I noticed the one sentence intro. Per WP:LEAD, this article needs a much more detailed introduction. I've placed the {{tooshort}} tag on. Ten Pound Hammer • ^{(Broken clamshells•Otter chirps)} 05:40, 24 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Also, I removed the advocacy links as they all seemed frivolous. I would also suggest either removing the self-published references, or finding better third-party references to replace them. Ten Pound Hammer • ^{(Broken clamshells•Otter chirps)} 05:42, 24 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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