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Drama Queen (Ivy Queen album)

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I've listed this article for peer review because, I want to get the article to GA status. I had two editors review the page and one of them told me to request a PR.

Thanks, DivaKnockouts (talk) 16:43, 19 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"alongside the help of various" just "with the help of..."
"Hiram Cruz, Francisco Saldaña" don't have articles, are they notable enough to be included in this list?
" Francisco Saldaña, Marcos Masis" -> " Francisco Saldaña and Marcos Masis".
Try to avoid repetition like "The album was.... The album was...".
Avoid over linking (ie. don't link De La Ghetto twice in two paragraphs for example).
Is there not a link for Latin Grammy Awards you can use in the lead?
"a reggaetón version " again, you've already linked reggaeton, but oddly without a diacritic the first time, and with a diacritic the second time.
" never charted on " -> "failed to chart on".
"2008-2010" in the infobox, needs an en-dash, not a hyphen per WP:DASH.
" its 5th year" fifth.
"Unlike, Drama Queen or" no need for comma.
"Drama Queen is the first album where Ivy wasn't in a " consistency in italics, and avoid contractions (i.e. "was not" rather than "wasn't").
"Ivy had this to say:[3]" just "Ivy said:[3]"
" A studio owned by reggaeton production moguls Luny Tunes." this sentence should be merged with the former somehow because on its own it isn't a complete sentence.
In fact "A studio owned by reggaeton production moguls Luny Tunes. The album was produced by reggaeton production duo Luny Tunes..." is repetitive and doesn't make much sense to me.
The "English" in the translated names shouldn't be in italics.
Check all instances of the album name are in italics.
"Music and themes" is unreferenced.
Don't overlink "English" six or seven times in the next section. And again, not in italics.
In the personnel section "Jose Cotto - Mixer" replace all these spaced hyphens with en-dashes (per WP:DASH).
Ref titles also need to use en-dashes instead of spaced hyphens where applicable.

The Rambling Man (talk) 11:37, 1 July 2012 (UTC)[reply]