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I've listed this article for peer review because it is the first article I have worked on significantly, and would like to improve it further, preferably to GA in the very long term. The school has historical significance due to it's age (and origination of other schools from it) and the list of student, many of which are significant to german civil society as a whole. I am particularly looking for feedback on structure and sourcing, but content feedback would also be great.
Thanks, FortunateSons (talk) 10:05, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
Comments from Z1720
editComments after a quick skim:
- The lede is too short. This should be expanded out to be a summary of all major points of the article. See WP:LEDE for more information.
- "Fritz Bauer was a Jewish judge and prosecutor who assisted with in the capture of Adolf Eichmann and took part in the Frankfurt Auschwitz trials." This needs a citation.
- Is there any commentary on the architecture of the building, either describing what it looks like or what the layout is?
- There are many short, one or two line paragraphs. I suggest that these are merged together.
- I suggest that you look at Amador Valley High School for ideas on what to include in a secondary school article on Wikipedia.
I hope this helps. Z1720 (talk) 01:58, 30 May 2024 (UTC)