Wikipedia:Peer review/Ernest C. Brace/archive1

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Ernie Brace was the longest-held US civilian prisoner of war from the Vietnam War. Of course, there's almost no independent reporting for the seven years he spent in Laos and North Vietnam. The article has more sources discussing Brace's earlier court martial. I can't find significant copyright-free supporting materials, either. Is this the best that can be done on this subject or is there something more? Thanks, Chris Troutman (talk) 05:06, 2 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

A few comments - Dank (push to talk)

  Not done I need to do some more research on Brace's occupational specialty to get this right. Chris Troutman (talk) 05:58, 10 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  Done I ended up just copying the verbiage from the source since I couldn't determine the Marine Corps job code. Chris Troutman (talk) 16:26, 23 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • A lot of sentences begin with "Brace"; it would improve readability to vary the sentence structure a bit.
  Done
  • "100 mission": 100 missions
  Done
  • "then a Captain": then a captain
  Done
  • "The Government": The government
  Done
  • "The court martial resulted in the end of Brace's military career.": The court martial ended Brace's military career. (WP:Checklist#because may be helpful here.)
  Done
  Done Many thanks for your comments! Chris Troutman (talk) 05:58, 10 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]