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Giuseppe Continenza

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would appreciate a collaborative effort to improve it.

Thanks, Max Peltuinum (talk) 16:42, 10 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Z1720

Hi Max Peltuinum, some quick comments on how to improve the article:

The WP:LEDE is too short. The lede should summarise the information in the article; for an article this large, the lede should be about a paragraph
The biography has too many one-sentence paragraphs, which is discouraged under WP:PARAGRAPH. Try to merge these short paragraphs together.
WP:A/S has a list of reliable music sources where you might find more information.

I hope this helps. Z1720 (talk) 19:18, 18 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I am closing this PR because the article has been moved to the draft space, so is no longer eligible for PR. Z1720 (talk) 20:08, 16 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Z1720: Thanks for the review and sorry if I answer late, but times are complicated. Unfortunately the entry was moved to drafts. I hope to be able to improve it. In any case, thanks again.--Max Peltuinum (talk) 11:40, 4 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]