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I've listed this article for peer review because, you know, the 'ole shebang. DLC is forthcoming, so the section is gonna' be stubby for a while, but that's about it. Thanks, Der Wohltempierte Fuchs (talk) 23:44, 13 April 2009 (UTC)
- Random commentary as I see it. I already took a stab at rewording a few of these; feel free to tweak/revert as necessary.
- Lead: "The game is set in the Halo science fiction universe, 20 years before the video game Halo: Combat Evolved, which was released on 2001." don't mix your fictional years and your real-life years in the same sentence. Additionally, it's awkward to have Halo's release date mentioned before Halo Wars'.
- Lead: "The game was an attempt to bring together Halo first-person shooter fans to play a real-time strategy game and experienced strategy players to play a Halo game." Awkward construction, seems to be done solely to avoid repeating the developer's quote later on.
- Gameplay: "...units are trained and upgrades resourced." - You mean researched?
- Gameplay: "The UNSC build reactors..." took a stab at rewording this.
- Plot: Assorted ambiguities, especially in the realm of pronouns. Attempted to fix some of them up, others not so much because I don't know the plot: "Anders formulates a plan to destroy the planet by detonating the ship's faster-than-light reactor." - Which ship?
- Reception: "More neutrally, 1UP.com's would not say..." This sentence's is missing.
More generally, my only other comment is that the section on audio development feels a little long, comparatively. Otherwise it's a very well-researched and pretty well-written article. Nifboy (talk) 00:24, 17 April 2009 (UTC)